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Trellis of Deceit

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The truth was concealed with many branches Entangled on a trellis of deceit , The anger reflecting inked blots on weeds As I cruised alone through evening’s approach... To bid his disguise hidden like veiled twigs Crumbling, withering in this labyrinth Till the pretense of fidelity glared; Siphoning a love untrue, root to bough... How my heart sullen as dusk tumbled on, Into a maze where a breeze folded its wings, Its cry echoing my black homily That in a daze I recalled his footsteps... Yet, each step I trailed became ashen clay ; His distorted ploy stirring a flamed rage Where old leaves fall in the bleak of moonlight. Lewis Rayne's Contest Emotional Anger, hurt, rage Submitted 12/1/2017

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Date: 8/17/2016 12:51:00 PM
Congratulations Nette, on this outstanding write. Enjoy the entire piece, but the last line is something I needed today. A new beginning and a bright tomorrow; I will walk away and embrace this. Best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 8/12/2016 11:11:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderfully penned poem and I love the image too!
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Date: 8/11/2016 6:09:00 PM
Excellent write Nette....Congrats on your win
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Date: 8/10/2016 11:42:00 PM
Hi Nette, You penned such a well written piece. That's laced in much heartache. Congratulations on your winning write. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Date: 8/10/2016 9:47:00 PM
Nette, beautiful lady...congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 8/10/2016 9:33:00 PM
That was certainly dramatic verse -- deep thoughts and beautifully written. Congrats! :-)
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Date: 8/9/2016 10:35:00 AM
Verse written to perfection! Should gain a placement in the contest - good luck! Jesse
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Date: 8/9/2016 9:50:00 AM
Wow! A dark theme brilliantly executed using analogy ( lattice, weeds, root, bough) to emphasize the mood of this amazing poem. You have slain me!
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Date: 8/9/2016 4:28:00 AM
Wow. A lattice of deceit and syphoning of love in golden moonlight. good luck for the contest.
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Date: 8/9/2016 2:05:00 AM
Perfect title and perfect imagery Nette. I truly enjoyed this. I think it will bode well in the contest. Blessings Carl
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Date: 8/9/2016 1:05:00 AM
Well done my friend nette...just what BW is looking for...we have a winner lol...god bless...WW
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