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They waltz against the dark , offstage Within a tearing pinch of light; A pitch-black room …entrenched in rage Was once the velvet cloth to skin, Now ripped apart by hems of spite As numbness dries low breaths, so thin Frigid the steps…locked in a cage Pale music on iced fingertips, That dancing goodbye twirled with age When frozen love changed to chagrin. Smell of lilacs, damp as old page Bitter this

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 1/12/2016 11:38:00 AM
Amazing the excellence that can come from three phrases..Congrats on your winning phrases..Sara
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Date: 1/12/2016 8:19:00 AM
Congratulations Nette for winning in the combination of 3 words contest! You deserve the win! :) -hans
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Date: 1/10/2016 11:08:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 1/4/2016 10:29:00 AM
Nette, CONGRATS on your "Combination of Three Words WIN!" *SKAT*
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Date: 1/3/2016 12:37:00 PM
Nette, an exquisite write! Congrats!
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Date: 1/3/2016 11:09:00 AM
Nette, so beautiful.you are so talented and it shows every time I read one of your poems..:)-luloo
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Date: 12/31/2015 12:22:00 PM
Wish you my PS lovely friend a sweet Happy New year 2016.
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Date: 12/31/2015 1:24:00 AM
Great job, NETTE....nothing mundane about your writing, dear....Good luck in the contest and Happy New Year....
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Date: 12/30/2015 5:53:00 PM
Hugs sweet friend and have a very safe and Happy New Year's
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Date: 12/30/2015 2:34:00 PM
enchanting piece nette...have a Happy New Year
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Date: 12/30/2015 2:13:00 PM
Wow, so beautiful even in it's sorrow. Awesomely done!
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Date: 12/30/2015 2:07:00 PM
I love the poem, consider changing walk to tango, it better reflects the passionate feel of this piece. Thanks for the visit, may you dance passionately through the coming year. P.s. Great picture to accompany your poem.
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Date: 12/30/2015 2:05:00 PM
How beautiful can cold and bitterness be? This is how I look at this poem in which loss of love makes the heart frigid and emotions turn sour. // We both chose the same word combination, but yours is more poetical! ~ May I wish you and your loved ones a happy new year filled with love and peace. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul
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Date: 12/30/2015 2:03:00 PM
Reads like a winner..I have never smell Lilacs.I need to get me a Lilac plant this year..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 12/30/2015 12:26:00 PM
What I really like in this top-notch poem is that you actually managed to capture all those haunting images within the lines!
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Date: 12/30/2015 12:08:00 PM
The sharp, cold pain you have expressed here is powerful and amazing !
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Date: 12/30/2015 12:08:00 PM
- Thanks for the dance, it was a pleasure - Beautiful written Nette - Best wishes and warm hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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