Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

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Last Breath of Sunset

Royal blue sky scattered sapphire clouds
On horizon embroidered in navy blue attire
Summoned by the onset of marigold sun 
Emitting amber gold on tuscan yellow fire
Where tapestry of fluffy lavender floats
Decorating patterns of designs periwinkle 

Mosaic of colors then spray-paint the water
Spreading a layer of golden yellow cover
Shimmering gold dust on twilight ripples
Abutting brushstrokes of dark blue egyptian

I saw you briefly where first time we met
On the lonely bridge that extends into bay

But as the dark landmass peeked its head
And the lifeless vegetation glinted despair
The tangerine breeze announced your exit
Quivering our aura beneath glittering riffle

For you refused to witness impending flame--
Broken vows ablaze in last breath of sunset

Written: August 4, 2018
Submitted on February 6, 2023 to:
2022 Poetry Marathon Qualifiers' FINAL Placement Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney


Submitted on December 7, 2022 To:
Placed 3rd: 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 22 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney

Poem of the day on August 7, 2018
Placed first in standard contest #180 by Brian Strand

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Susan Ashley March 10, 2023 at 6:51 AM Dear Vijay, it's my great pleasure to return to this award winning masterwork and offer you my heartiest congratulations for your excellent final placement in Mark's Marathon contest. I'm thrilled to partake of this vivid poem, brimming with soulful splendor and metaphorical beauty, once again. It is a grand honor to share the podium with you, Vijay, a wonderfully talented poet and inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Valsa George March 6, 2023 at 5:10 AM Back to your poem once again with congratulations on being chosen as one of the 15 front runners of the contest. I never expected that I could come close to you. Congratulations once again dear friend. Vijay Pandit March 6, 2023 at 5:20 AM BIG congrats to you my friend. I entered that contest on 15th mile (missed first 14) because I didn't know it allowed old poems. I was unwilling to make a long commitment to write 27 new ones. So I only entered the last 12 or 13--though I must say it may not have made any difference in the final outcome if I had entered all. Many thanks, Valsa.

Lin Lane March 5, 2023 at 10:46 AM It was a race well run as well as being fun. Congratulations, Vijay.

Mark Toney March 4, 2023 at 1:29 PM Vijay, congratulations on your Fourteenth Place, overall win in my 2022 Poetry Marathon! Thank you so much for contributing to the success of the contest. The poems of the 28 qualifiers can be accessed from my current "Finish Line" blog post, along with the top 15 placements and their overall stats. Write on!

Susan Ashley December 22, 2022 at 7:08 PM Dear Vijay, your poem is so memorable for its depth and breadth of beauty.. the vivid use of color and imagery and metaphor. I’m so glad to be deeply moved once more by the emotional and artistic splendor of this lost love piece. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend, for a happy and healthy Holiday season.. ~Susan

John Watt December 15, 2022 at 1:28 PM Vijay, a beautiful image and amazing poetic imagery to accompany it, then a dark turn. So well done, beautiful to read, much enjoyed. Congrats on your excellent podium win. Best wishes ~ John Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:26 AM Thank you John, for visiting and comments. Much appreciate your kind feedback.

Andrea Dietrich December 15, 2022 at 8:32 AM Love this one. A wow poem for me. Congrats for your win Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:25 AM A wow--so nice to hear that from you Andrea. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Valsa George December 14, 2022 at 8:22 PM The sky and ocean spray painted with shades of multi colors. Such stunning imagery of fading sunset and a moving tale of vows broken. Congratulations dear friend on your podium win in the Marathon..... Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:24 AM Much appreciate, as always, Valsa. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Sotto Poet December 14, 2022 at 5:50 PM Dear Vijay, my heartfelt congrats on your contest win. This is an excellent piece of poetic treasure that I did not get the opportunity to read since I had not yet joined PS. Your pen created such lyrical elegance, such brilliant imagery, so flamboyantly. This is a work of lyrical greatness. A FAVE Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:24 AM So very kind of you my friend. Much enjoyed reading your detailed feedback, Lasaad. Many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Mark Toney December 14, 2022 at 11:31 AM Vijay, you begin with what seems to be an ode to a beautiful sunset reflected in "the onset of marigold sun ~ Emitting amber gold on tuscan yellow fire," which then becomes a metaphor for broken vows, "Quivering our aura beneath glittering riffle ~ For you refused to witness impending flame--Broken vows ablaze in last breath of sunset." Nicely done. Congratulations on your podium finish on Mile 22 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 23 has already started. Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:22 AM Much appreciate your insightful feedback, Mark. Thank you for taking the time to visit and write detailed remarks. And a special thank you for sponsoring this contest.

Karen Jones October 25, 2021 at 8:55 PM Vijay this is a fav for me just breath taking. Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:20 AM So special to hear that from you, Karen. Many thanks for your visit and your FAVE.

Line Gauthier February 25, 2019 at 11:11 PM Beautiful imagery, Vijay. Congrats on your win. Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:20 AM Thank you Line.

Heidi Sands February 19, 2019 at 7:44 AM Congratulations for your win :) Vijay Pandit December 18, 2022 at 6:19 AM Thank you Heidi.

Deb Radke October 30, 2018 at 1:45 PM Wow. What a vivid and heart-wrenching poem. I've read your fourth stanza again and again. Magical. Best wishes. Deb Vijay Pandit October 30, 2018 at 3:40 PM Appreciate the kind feedback Deb..many many thanks.

Vladislav Raven October 14, 2018 at 2:00 PM Hi Vijay, a much belated congratulations for your Poem Of The Day for this exceptional piece of poetic gold. Such poetic grace, such vibrant images so colourfully drawn by your pen. A master wordsmith at his craft. This is a gem of poetic skill. You always sing from the heart Vijay. It is a pleasure to read your wonderful work. Have a wonderful Sunday. Your friend always....Mike. A fave. Vijay Pandit October 30, 2018 at 3:41 PM Many thanks Mike..I truly appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Aniruddha Pathak October 6, 2018 at 1:19 AM Here in India poets have sung more on rains than on the sun. And a well-deserved Poem of the Day. Congrats Vijay Pandit October 6, 2018 at 7:36 AM Thank you Aniruddha.

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2018 at 8:47 AM This was a well deserved poem of the day. Congratulations, Vijay. Also wanted you to know, I am gonna be gone a few days so I am not ignoring you! It's just a fast trip to Chicago and back for a Memorial service. Vijay Pandit August 23, 2018 at 9:13 AM Thank you Andrea. Yes--I saw your note under your recent postings. You are so kind to let people know..I appreciate that.

Jean Murray August 15, 2018 at 2:12 PM No wonder this was POTD. She took the kaleidoscope of colour away with her. Shame. Vijay Pandit August 17, 2018 at 2:49 PM Thank you Jean.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri August 15, 2018 at 12:34 AM Wow wow beautiful, impressive poem. CONGRATS poet on your poem of the day award! "Egyptian blue' ahh real poetic superb imagery and word choice. Kudos. Cheers. Vijay Pandit August 15, 2018 at 7:37 AM Thank you S. zaynab K.

Manmath Dalei August 13, 2018 at 11:55 PM Last breathe of sunset is really well fabricated with your poetic words. I really enjoyed. Full marks from me. Congratulation for POTD. With love....... //Manmath Vijay Pandit August 15, 2018 at 7:36 AM Thank you Manmath.

Frances Schiavina August 13, 2018 at 8:37 AM It's magnificent Vijay! Congratulations. Vijay Pandit August 15, 2018 at 7:35 AM Thank you Frances.

Paul Callus August 8, 2018 at 11:59 AM I'm captivated by your colourful imagery, Vijay. What a pity that love is not always reciprocated! Congratulations on p.o.t.d. Regards // paul Vijay Pandit August 8, 2018 at 3:53 PM Thank you Paul--appreciate the kind feedback.

Liam Mcdaid August 8, 2018 at 8:32 AM very beautifully painted breath congratulations on the honour of poem of the day well deserved Vijay Pandit August 8, 2018 at 8:37 AM Thank you Liam.

Susan Gentry August 8, 2018 at 12:13 AM Congratulations on your POTD! Beautiful imagery. :) Vijay Pandit August 8, 2018 at 8:37 AM Thank you Susan.

Kim Rodrigues August 7, 2018 at 8:05 PM Congrats on POTD, my friend! Lovely and sad write! Vijay Pandit August 8, 2018 at 8:36 AM Thank you Kim.

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