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Last Breath of Sunset

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Royal blue sky scattered sapphire clouds On horizon embroidered in navy blue attire Summoned by the onset of marigold sun Emitting amber gold on tuscan yellow fire Where tapestry of fluffy lavender floats Decorating patterns of designs periwinkle Mosaic of colors then spray-paint the water Spreading a layer of golden yellow cover Shimmering gold dust on twilight ripples Abutting brushstrokes of dark blue egyptian I saw you briefly where first time we met On the lonely bridge that extends into bay But as the dark landmass peeked its head And the lifeless vegetation glinted despair The tangerine breeze announced your exit Quivering our aura beneath glittering riffle For you refused to witness impending flame-- Broken vows ablaze in last breath of sunset Written: August 4, 2018 Submitted on February 6, 2023 to: 2022 Poetry Marathon Qualifiers' FINAL Placement Contest Sponsor: Mark Toney Submitted on December 7, 2022 To: Placed 3rd: 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 22 Poetry Contest Sponsor: Mark Toney Poem of the day on August 7, 2018 Placed first in standard contest #180 by Brian Strand

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Susan Ashley

Date: 3/10/2023 6:51:00 AM

Dear Vijay, it's my great pleasure to return to this award winning masterwork and offer you my heartiest congratulations for your excellent final placement in Mark's Marathon contest. I'm thrilled to partake of this vivid poem, brimming with soulful splendor and metaphorical beauty, once again. It is a grand honor to share the podium with you, Vijay, a wonderfully talented poet and inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Valsa George

Date: 3/6/2023 5:10:00 AM

Back to your poem once again with congratulations on being chosen as one of the 15 front runners of the contest. I never expected that I could come close to you. Congratulations once again dear friend.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2023 5:20:00 AM

BIG congrats to you my friend. I entered that contest on 15th mile (missed first 14) because I didn't know it allowed old poems. I was unwilling to make a long commitment to write 27 new ones. So I only entered the last 12 or 13--though I must say it may not have made any difference in the final outcome if I had entered all. Many thanks, Valsa.

Lin Lane

Date: 3/5/2023 10:46:00 AM

It was a race well run as well as being fun. Congratulations, Vijay.

Mark Toney

Date: 3/4/2023 1:29:00 PM

Vijay, congratulations on your Fourteenth Place, overall win in my 2022 Poetry Marathon! Thank you so much for contributing to the success of the contest. The poems of the 28 qualifiers can be accessed from my current "Finish Line" blog post, along with the top 15 placements and their overall stats. Write on!

Maria Mitea

Date: 12/27/2022 8:17:00 AM

Remarkable Piece of Work, Vijay! Blessings!

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/22/2022 7:08:00 PM

Dear Vijay, your poem is so memorable for its depth and breadth of beauty.. the vivid use of color and imagery and metaphor. I’m so glad to be deeply moved once more by the emotional and artistic splendor of this lost love piece. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend, for a happy and healthy Holiday season.. ~Susan

John Watt

Date: 12/15/2022 1:28:00 PM

Vijay, a beautiful image and amazing poetic imagery to accompany it, then a dark turn. So well done, beautiful to read, much enjoyed. Congrats on your excellent podium win. Best wishes ~ John

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:26:00 AM

Thank you John, for visiting and comments. Much appreciate your kind feedback.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/15/2022 8:32:00 AM

Love this one. A wow poem for me. Congrats for your win

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:25:00 AM

A wow--so nice to hear that from you Andrea. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Valsa George

Date: 12/14/2022 8:22:00 PM

The sky and ocean spray painted with shades of multi colors. Such stunning imagery of fading sunset and a moving tale of vows broken. Congratulations dear friend on your podium win in the Marathon.....

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:24:00 AM

Much appreciate, as always, Valsa. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/14/2022 5:50:00 PM

Dear Vijay, my heartfelt congrats on your contest win. This is an excellent piece of poetic treasure that I did not get the opportunity to read since I had not yet joined PS. Your pen created such lyrical elegance, such brilliant imagery, so flamboyantly. This is a work of lyrical greatness. A FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:24:00 AM

So very kind of you my friend. Much enjoyed reading your detailed feedback, Lasaad. Many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Mark Toney

Date: 12/14/2022 11:31:00 AM

Vijay, you begin with what seems to be an ode to a beautiful sunset reflected in "the onset of marigold sun ~ Emitting amber gold on tuscan yellow fire," which then becomes a metaphor for broken vows, "Quivering our aura beneath glittering riffle ~ For you refused to witness impending flame--Broken vows ablaze in last breath of sunset." Nicely done. Congratulations on your podium finish on Mile 22 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on because Mile 23 has already started.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:22:00 AM

Much appreciate your insightful feedback, Mark. Thank you for taking the time to visit and write detailed remarks. And a special thank you for sponsoring this contest.

Karen Jones

Date: 10/25/2021 8:55:00 PM

Vijay this is a fav for me just breath taking.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:20:00 AM

So special to hear that from you, Karen. Many thanks for your visit and your FAVE.

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/25/2019 11:11:00 PM

Beautiful imagery, Vijay. Congrats on your win.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:20:00 AM

Thank you Line.

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/19/2019 7:44:00 AM

Congratulations for your win :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/18/2022 6:19:00 AM

Thank you Heidi.

Deb Radke

Date: 10/30/2018 1:45:00 PM

Wow. What a vivid and heart-wrenching poem. I've read your fourth stanza again and again. Magical. Best wishes. Deb

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/30/2018 3:40:00 PM

Appreciate the kind feedback Deb..many many thanks.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/14/2018 2:00:00 PM

Hi Vijay, a much belated congratulations for your Poem Of The Day for this exceptional piece of poetic gold. Such poetic grace, such vibrant images so colourfully drawn by your pen. A master wordsmith at his craft. This is a gem of poetic skill. You always sing from the heart Vijay. It is a pleasure to read your wonderful work. Have a wonderful Sunday. Your friend always....Mike. A fave.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/30/2018 3:41:00 PM

Many thanks Mike..I truly appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 10/6/2018 1:19:00 AM

Here in India poets have sung more on rains than on the sun. And a well-deserved Poem of the Day. Congrats

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/6/2018 7:36:00 AM

Thank you Aniruddha.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2018 8:47:00 AM

This was a well deserved poem of the day. Congratulations, Vijay. Also wanted you to know, I am gonna be gone a few days so I am not ignoring you! It's just a fast trip to Chicago and back for a Memorial service.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/23/2018 9:13:00 AM

Thank you Andrea. Yes--I saw your note under your recent postings. You are so kind to let people know..I appreciate that.

Jean Murray

Date: 8/15/2018 2:12:00 PM

No wonder this was POTD. She took the kaleidoscope of colour away with her. Shame.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/17/2018 2:49:00 PM

Thank you Jean.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/15/2018 12:34:00 AM

Wow wow beautiful, impressive poem. CONGRATS poet on your poem of the day award! "Egyptian blue' ahh real poetic superb imagery and word choice. Kudos. Cheers.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/15/2018 7:37:00 AM

Thank you S. zaynab K.

Manmath Dalei

Date: 8/13/2018 11:55:00 PM

Last breathe of sunset is really well fabricated with your poetic words. I really enjoyed. Full marks from me. Congratulation for POTD. With love....... //Manmath

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/15/2018 7:36:00 AM

Thank you Manmath.

Frances Schiavina

Date: 8/13/2018 8:37:00 AM

It's magnificent Vijay! Congratulations.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/15/2018 7:35:00 AM

Thank you Frances.