Lane

LANE Lover’s lane jammed with cars Lively shadows smog glass Listen to crickets chirp Listen for siren sound Light switch answers doorbell Long looks send you to bed Labeled as a strumpet 2nd Place 4/13/2017 Pleiades – L contest

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Mark Martin

Date: 4/27/2017 2:52:00 PM

Like the first line - can imagine these places gridlocked! Congratulations on your win Kim! :-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/27/2017 5:17:00 PM

Thank you!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/27/2017 5:16:00 PM

Thank you!

Eve Roper

Date: 4/22/2017 7:32:00 PM

This is so cute, Kim, congratulations on your win ~*

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/22/2017 7:33:00 PM

Thank you, Eve :)

Probir Gupta

Date: 4/20/2017 9:26:00 AM

Lovely images ... Congratulations on your nice win ...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/20/2017 11:37:00 AM

Thank you, Probir!

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/18/2017 10:25:00 PM

I can picture the scene so well, Kim. A unique topic with smooth flowing lines! Blessings, Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 10:35:00 PM

Thank you, Kim!

White Wolf

Date: 4/18/2017 5:45:00 PM

I love this, Kim, congrats my friend.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 10:36:00 PM

Thank you!

Jean Murray

Date: 4/18/2017 5:08:00 PM

Wonderful Kim. I love the "long look".

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:25:00 PM

Thank you, Jean!

Paul Callus

Date: 4/18/2017 4:17:00 PM

I think that in those days boys got a fairer deal than girls! I was never tied down by time, but my sisters were! Enjoyed this creative Pleiades, Kim...congratulations on a merited win. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:25:00 PM

Thanks so much, Paul!

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 4/18/2017 3:30:00 PM

A Story in 7 lines!Its amazing Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 3:45:00 PM

Thank you, Sara :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 3:44:00 PM

Thank you, Sara :)

Joseph May

Date: 4/18/2017 7:57:00 AM

Congrats on your win Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thanks, Joseph!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/18/2017 7:57:00 AM

A 7 for your descriptive winning poem, Kim! Janice

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thank you, Janice!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/18/2017 7:16:00 AM

Wow- you manage to tell a whole story within your seven lines. Congrats on your win, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 7:41:00 AM

Thank you, Agnes! :)

Janis Thompson

Date: 4/18/2017 7:15:00 AM

I like how it's a story unfolding. Well written. Congratulation. A 7.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 7:40:00 AM

Thank you, Janis!

Roy Pett

Date: 4/18/2017 5:32:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Kim, excellent Pleiades.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:34:00 AM

Thanks so much, Roy!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:34:00 AM

Thanks so much, Roy!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/18/2017 1:48:00 AM

- Congratulations on your "Pleiades L" poems, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:22:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:22:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise :)

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/17/2017 11:13:00 PM

Ah, the days of parking in high school - some wonderful, (and confusing), memories, that! This is wonderful, Kim, and a whimsical trip back ... congrats! :-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2017 5:20:00 AM

Thank you, Greg! :)