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Just Keep Walking

Just Keep Walking he just kept getting smaller and smaller as he walked farther and farther always at the point of two divergent triangles. walked, and without looking back, knew felt the memories tug less and less heard the ticking of the tower clock muted in the distance the sound of the children trail off at the edge of their boundaries sensed the pull of names and ancestry lessen, pass beneath his feet on uncrushed stone knew the loneliness of loneliness and the empty fullness of being alone he just kept getting smaller and smaller as he walked nearer and nearer the smallness of the future. Contest – Open Free Verse Sponsor – Charlotte Puddifoot 7/12/2014

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Date: 7/29/2014 6:22:00 PM
John, Congratulations, enjoyed your free verse poem..Linda
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Date: 7/23/2014 8:05:00 AM
Loved it John, nice work. Congrats
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Date: 7/21/2014 12:14:00 AM
Very emotional n touching write John! Congrats on ur win!
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Date: 7/20/2014 2:58:00 PM
Congratulations, John! I enjoyed this although it left me with a sense of sadness in my heart. // paul
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 7:52:00 PM
Thank you Paul, I tried to capture the ambivalence of leaving home, moving away from and toward knowns and unknowns.
Date: 7/20/2014 1:06:00 AM
a whooping compare- and- contest approach so beguiling, john.. you have my congrats and huggs
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 12:03:00 PM
Nette, thank you, it is not often the word beguiling is used in reference to me.
Date: 7/19/2014 9:29:00 PM
ooh, I loved those cool phrases you were using like "the empty fullness of being alone" or "the smallness of the future." I really relate to this one. GREAT job and big congrats for your win.
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 12:02:00 PM
Thank you Andrea for your support and comments.
Date: 7/19/2014 6:33:00 PM
I really liked this the first time I read it; good use of language that conjures up an atmosphere and builds throughout the poem - something slightly unsettling about it - congrats on your win in my contest!
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 12:00:00 PM
Charlotte, thank you for the time and effort you put into sponsoring the contest. I liked the open ended free verse theme as it allows the muse to run loose.
Date: 7/19/2014 5:28:00 PM
Nice John... Congrats! on your win... Verlena
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 11:58:00 AM
Thank you Verlena, I haven't had a chance to read your entry. I was floating on the Charles River quietly fishing all morning.
Date: 7/19/2014 4:28:00 PM
Way to go ....Congrats..Sara
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John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2014 11:57:00 AM
Thanks Sara for reading and commenting

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