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Just a Bit

he enters the room coyly she tugs her skirt just a bit enough to reveal her shapely legs tossing back her golden tresses she shakes her head just a bit hoping to attract his eyes tiny shift of the derriere she takes long, gentle strides just a bit has he seen her yet? bending to reveal cleavage she winks as she pours champagne just a bit a taste of ambrosia from a vixen “Sometimes less is more,” she says in a deep, sensual tone “Just a bit, I saved the best for you.” in the mirror she sees his eyes they follow her just a bit before he saunters to her side he kisses her hand warm and soft just a bit camouflaged emotions become clearer other partygoers stay inside he coaxes her with flashing green eyes just a bit as he leads her to the lakeside pavilion a vision in the moon’s soft light she moves closer just a bit and whispers demurely in his ear “Your place or mine?” they giggle just a bit "Should we call the babysitter?"
*Written October 6, 2014 for Justin's Heart of Seduction challenge

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Date: 10/14/2014 8:27:00 PM
Love it, congratulations!
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Date: 10/14/2014 1:09:00 PM
Congrats on your honourable mention Carolyn Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/14/2014 12:22:00 PM
- A kind word costs nothing and is still the most beautiful gift of all: Congratulations, Carolyn ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/14/2014 11:49:00 AM
carolyn, this is a sweet teaser.. wow.. big cheers on your fine win!
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Date: 10/14/2014 7:58:00 AM
This is so subtle n beautiful sweet Carolyn! A perfect 7 to just a bit that has such a brilliant ending to its credit! Congrats on huge win my dear!
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Date: 10/10/2014 9:01:00 AM
"This is it, Elizabeth!" Your wonderful seduction description has caused a huge discharge from my electric heart monitor. I think, though, I'll be alright in a bit. Love, Old daver
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/10/2014 10:38:00 AM
Not sure who Elizabeth is, but thanks, my friend! Love you!
Date: 10/7/2014 10:47:00 PM
Speaks volumes of seduction Carolyn, love the wit in this beauty as well. Awesome to be reading you again. Love W
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Date: 10/7/2014 3:20:00 PM
"just a bit a taste of ambrosia from a vixen",seductive from various angles. Lovely done. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 10/7/2014 2:14:00 PM
Hi sweet Carolyn,how are you?Thanks for visitin dear.What an I to say about this seducing poem,except Exceptional and to my favs : )
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Date: 10/7/2014 1:37:00 PM
Hi Carolyn.....just a bit of this and that and the other...and you had him right under your thumb! You must have studied the art of seduction in detail! Great final line, too. This is going to my faves. hugs // paul
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/7/2014 2:09:00 PM
"Just a bit" when I took theater classes, Paul. Thanks for your lovely comment.
Date: 10/6/2014 8:15:00 PM
Oh this is great! what a way to keep the passion alive! I love it :) A 7 for me girl you made this amazing I hope you get a shiny medal on the winners list for this one :)
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Date: 10/6/2014 6:36:00 PM
Oh, this is a brilliant write Carolyn!! Love how it built to the end which was magical.. A 7!
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Date: 10/6/2014 6:08:00 PM
Definitely a new twist on seduction! Are you emulating Alfred Hitchcock with that ending? Very nice!!
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Date: 10/6/2014 6:06:00 PM
Wonderfully written Carolyn. The ending is the topping on the cake.
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Date: 10/6/2014 6:03:00 PM
I would like to say I loved the twist at the end, because I did. However your poem was so successful at that point you had seduced me. So I did feel kind of left out. If this poem isn't what seduction should be I don't know what is. Just an excellent job Justin's challenge. I hope this places very high in the rankings.
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Date: 10/6/2014 5:52:00 PM
Sounds like they may need the babysitters continued services for many more years at this rate Lol - awesome write Carolyn. Good luck in the contest this should do really well for you! Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/6/2014 5:49:00 PM
See you can seduce and I love the end twist....a fav....hugs Tim
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/6/2014 5:59:00 PM
Thanks, Tim. "Just a bit" was all I could muster :D
Date: 10/6/2014 5:45:00 PM
well done, liked the ending...sounds like the babysitter will be called..goodluck in the contest
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Date: 10/6/2014 5:38:00 PM
Really cute Carolyn. Is this for the romance contest? Joyce
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 10/6/2014 5:57:00 PM
LOL Yes, dear. This is as seductive as I could get.