Just a Bit

he enters the room coyly she tugs her skirt just a bit enough to reveal her shapely legs tossing back her golden tresses she shakes her head just a bit hoping to attract his eyes tiny shift of the derriere she takes long, gentle strides just a bit has he seen her yet? bending to reveal cleavage she winks as she pours champagne just a bit a taste of ambrosia from a vixen “Sometimes less is more,” she says in a deep, sensual tone “Just a bit, I saved the best for you.” in the mirror she sees his eyes they follow her just a bit before he saunters to her side he kisses her hand warm and soft just a bit camouflaged emotions become clearer other partygoers stay inside he coaxes her with flashing green eyes just a bit as he leads her to the lakeside pavilion a vision in the moon’s soft light she moves closer just a bit and whispers demurely in his ear “Your place or mine?” they giggle just a bit "Should we call the babysitter?"
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Goldsmith Avatar
May 16, 2021 at 11:17 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a fun/creative write. Love It. Have a blessed day.............
Alex Avatar
May 15, 2021 at 10:27 PM
Congratulations!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 15, 2021 at 7:22 PM
I really loved this write--I had to excuse the 50 year-olds from my room--and I broke out in laughter in the last stanza, Carolyn. A brilliant piece, deserving of its accomplished win my friend, Aloha!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 8:27 PM
Love it, congratulations!
Allison Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 1:09 PM
Congrats on your honourable mention Carolyn Hugs Jan xxx
Andresen Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 12:22 PM
- A kind word costs nothing and is still the most beautiful gift of all: Congratulations, Carolyn ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Onclaud Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 11:49 AM
carolyn, this is a sweet teaser.. wow.. big cheers on your fine win!
A. Sharma Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 7:58 AM
This is so subtle n beautiful sweet Carolyn! A perfect 7 to just a bit that has such a brilliant ending to its credit! Congrats on huge win my dear!
Austin Avatar
October 10, 2014 at 9:01 AM
"This is it, Elizabeth!" Your wonderful seduction description has caused a huge discharge from my electric heart monitor. I think, though, I'll be alright in a bit. Love, Old daver
Devonshire Avatar
October 10, 2014 at 10:38 AM
Not sure who Elizabeth is, but thanks, my friend! Love you!
Neels Avatar
October 7, 2014 at 10:47 PM
Speaks volumes of seduction Carolyn, love the wit in this beauty as well. Awesome to be reading you again. Love W
Devnath  Avatar
October 7, 2014 at 3:20 PM
"just a bit a taste of ambrosia from a vixen",seductive from various angles. Lovely done. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl
Chircop Avatar
October 7, 2014 at 2:14 PM
Hi sweet Carolyn,how are you?Thanks for visitin dear.What an I to say about this seducing poem,except Exceptional and to my favs : )
Callus Avatar
October 7, 2014 at 1:37 PM
Hi Carolyn.....just a bit of this and that and the other...and you had him right under your thumb! You must have studied the art of seduction in detail! Great final line, too. This is going to my faves. hugs // paul
Devonshire Avatar
October 7, 2014 at 2:09 PM
"Just a bit" when I took theater classes, Paul. Thanks for your lovely comment.
Nance Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 8:15 PM
Oh this is great! what a way to keep the passion alive! I love it :) A 7 for me girl you made this amazing I hope you get a shiny medal on the winners list for this one :)
Locksley Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 6:08 PM
Definitely a new twist on seduction! Are you emulating Alfred Hitchcock with that ending? Very nice!!
Meier-Hans Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 6:06 PM
Wonderfully written Carolyn. The ending is the topping on the cake.
Yvonne Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 6:03 PM
I would like to say I loved the twist at the end, because I did. However your poem was so successful at that point you had seduced me. So I did feel kind of left out. If this poem isn't what seduction should be I don't know what is. Just an excellent job Justin's challenge. I hope this places very high in the rankings.
Allison Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:52 PM
Sounds like they may need the babysitters continued services for many more years at this rate Lol - awesome write Carolyn. Good luck in the contest this should do really well for you! Hugs Jan xxx
Smith Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:49 PM
See you can seduce and I love the end twist....a fav....hugs Tim
Devonshire Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:59 PM
Thanks, Tim. "Just a bit" was all I could muster :D
Parker Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:45 PM
well done, liked the ending...sounds like the babysitter will be called..goodluck in the contest
Johnson Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:38 PM
Really cute Carolyn. Is this for the romance contest? Joyce
Devonshire Avatar
October 6, 2014 at 5:57 PM
LOL Yes, dear. This is as seductive as I could get.
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