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Judgement

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Waves of knives piercing through the barriers their judgement infecting the defenses built up over time claiming that's what they see, unknowing the backlash it will bring think before you attack, the foundations that were laid before this onslaught will remain long after your retreat. The clearing seems unending gathering up the pieces Can we repair the damage? We've sent word of peace with no response, at which action do they stand back and re-evaluate their position stubborn no sign of defeat I'm going have to make the first move in person side stepping the messenger assassinated along the route blades at the throat.. "I 'am here to see the one that claims to be above". Pressured released Just as I imagined a known weakness lays in front, if not seen through I could forgive myself if I postured near their scent, a sight to behold. I nod to the oncoming advances for it is "I" that caused this trouble between us, for that you believe. Does Love conquer all? I should return to my land for it is left unguarded

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Date: 4/5/2024 9:54:00 PM
With knowledge of what has gone before, a tactical response. I so enjoy the way you dictate Lee. Forceful yet carefully enunciated diction. Words perfectly formed. The speed is heightened to the frenzy of the poem, and slowed to the distinctive poignant structure. Masterful and brings out the full intensity of your verse. Another enjoyable opportunity to delve into your thoughts. A creative piece with vitality and question.
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Lee Norton
Date: 4/6/2024 11:55:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words about my poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it and understood what I was trying to express. Your feedback is invaluable, and I'm forever grateful for your engagement, as it adds depth to my dialogue. Looking forward to sharing more of my work with you Wen, always, in the future. Fingers crossed :)

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