Journey's End

Comet decending from sky Silvery trail in it's wake Plummets to Earth with a crash Journey completed

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Casarah Nance

Date: 8/10/2014 7:56:00 AM

cool, I think I want to give this form a try! that is such a neat lil poem sweetie, I like the images :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/16/2012 4:44:00 AM

like this form, Richard, interesting how you wrote this,, like it..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2012 6:57:00 AM

Thanks Harry, all part of my education, I have never received any poetic training so this is all new to me.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/15/2012 4:52:00 PM

Coolio!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2012 6:57:00 AM

Thanks Andrea

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/15/2012 3:05:00 PM

Wonderfully done my friend! There is just one thing you might want to take care of though...the first line in this Dodoitsu is 8 syllables and should be 7! I know, sometimes it sneaks up on you and surprises you that you didn't have the correct number of syllables! It happens to me still as well! But aside from this minor error, this poem is very awesome, completed rather nicely! I really enjoyed reading this delightful piece this afternoon! What a fun write this one is! Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2012 3:22:00 PM

Russel have you read my poem Melted Tears? It is dedicated to you.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2012 3:20:00 PM

Thanks, I will change it.

Jack Ellison

Date: 11/15/2012 1:36:00 PM

Never heard of a Dodoitsu before but that's not surprising for me. What are the characteristics that make it one?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2012 1:43:00 PM

7 7 7 5 no Rhymes. I am attempting to expand my horizons, so I am trying out some different styles.