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Journey Without Movement

this week i took more steps than last ~ the hamster on a wheel thought aghast By David Kavanagh Not for contest

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Di11y Da11y

Date: 10/31/2023 12:39:00 PM

Life's tick list seems so important and I'm sure it actually is but the true meaningful moments tend to be when you stand still

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/31/2023 12:56:00 PM

Yes they do Dilly, and I think that’s exactly how my metaphorical hamster felt upon realisation of same, cheers David

Gary Radice

Date: 12/12/2022 2:17:00 AM

Hamsters, according to Google, in the wild run up to 5 miles a day so that placing a wheel in a hamster cage is seen as a necessity. Not keeping hamsters in a cage in the first place would seem the priority to me. The 'Talking Heads' track "Road To Nowhere" comes to mind only because it best describes my confused and garbled comments here. :) It's almost Christmas. Cheers - Gary

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/12/2022 5:45:00 AM

Great song that Gary, and band, Probably a few interpretations here, the hamster is more metaphoric of human behaviour of going around in circles, and getting better at it, to our own consternation, indeed Christmas is upon us, another cycle of madness on the hamster wheel, but must be done nonetheless, cheers David

Brian Sambourne

Date: 12/4/2022 5:29:00 PM

Greetings David, Enjoyed your Monoku immensely. I suspect, however, that your steps are more purposeful + goal centred than the hamster spinning himself to no where. Carry on! Many more hikes await us. Cheers Brian

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/5/2022 4:20:00 AM

Heya Brian, purpose then goal, but will the goal bring any purpose other than more goals lol, we never stop! cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 12/4/2022 3:46:00 PM

Like it David Much like a goldfish Circling a Bowl Swimming up stream

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/5/2022 4:16:00 AM

Perhaps Christopher, or life spiralling into its own driven madness, who knows a lot going on, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 12/3/2022 7:47:00 AM

Your imagination was sorely missed by me last week, David. The question is: How many more steps does a hamster make while spinning on a wheel, than you took last week? World Cup viewing for me today... not too hopeful they'll make it through this one. ;(

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/3/2022 8:05:00 AM

Hmmm good question Jenna! A marathon of World Cup qualifiers last week, some were like watching hamsters on the wheel lol, The US beating Iran was a real highlight, but to get past the Dutch world be a huge bonus, a bit like your kind comment, hopefully I’ll be back writing soon, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 12/2/2022 8:03:00 PM

Chuckles over here! Warm hello to you, xomo!

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/3/2022 4:41:00 AM

Un chaleureux bonjour à vous, super Mo, I thought you might get a chuckle from this one, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/2/2022 6:23:00 PM

Lol good one David, hope you are keeping well. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/3/2022 4:31:00 AM

All good Tom, Taking a little time off enjoying the World Cup, this one has so many twists and turns a bit like my little Monoku, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 12/2/2022 5:30:00 PM

Good job, keep on truck'n! I too wrote about journey without movement...Yet I move not a step..."Wading Rhapsody's Bliss" hope Seeker like's it!

David Kavanagh
Date: 12/3/2022 4:28:00 AM

Heya Anaya, this one is totally not what the seeker wants, but his contests inspire me, must check out your entry, cheers David