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Jewel Of Jinx - Depression Awareness

An alchemical raven's gray rhapsody awakens those cynical roses who Breathe-in the ebony beams of blood-bathed sun, exhaling Cacophonies that ricochet across these truthful horizons where, Depressive roars embalm Lilith's lawns. Awash with smoked prairies and Equinoctial secrecy, my neon lips swathe in life's witchy lies, for - Flames of fury, lace every lead feather of the pewter crow, that feasts on beliefs. Grieving charcoal stars swing like souvenirs of deceit when, Heartbeats of hibiscus moon, shiver and shatter upon my schizophrenic Ink, carving betrayals in asphalt ashes. "Am I a Jewel of jinx, floating like a jet-black jasmine across Kohl orchards?" - whispers time's wistful rebirth in the Lachrymose lake of death, as conspiracies entwine in cyan cobwebs within Medusa's redstone heart, tumbling at my tulip-tombstone. Now, nebulous blackbirds, rise from corbeau cinders, as Onyx wings of resilience have torn apart and Pierced every sheath of shimmering faith - surrendering to the 'Queen of darkling serendipity', as her clemency clenches me onto the cusp of Rhetoric valleys and winds pirouette with a pirate's porcelain wave, Silencing the saffron of my soulful sculpture, in eternal streams of fall. Thornless fate has forevermore, been an insomniac illusion and maybe, Ultraviolet elegies of saturn's rings will become a noose for my dreams and Viola orbs will encase every dove-dawn in a woeful chrysalis, When anxiety's darkling dungeon, spreads across rustic realms and Xanthic Satan dethrones my poinsettia-crown, as survival holds onto the Yarns of last crystal light within Cleopatra's claustrophobic hope. But in the Zillionth moment - my heart shall wail in rhymeless refrain - am I the one, lost?

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Date: 12/16/2023 6:42:00 PM
Hiya congratulations and your poem is a powerful and moving exploration of depression. Its real strengths lie in its vivid imagery, evocative language, and raw emotional impact. Well done! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 12/16/2023 12:55:00 PM
This was heavy and intense, Hiya, I really wouldn't know where to begin...or end, lol. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
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Date: 12/16/2023 10:52:00 AM
A poem on a very important subject Hiya, well done for highlighting this.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
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Date: 12/13/2023 7:31:00 AM
A wonderfully structured Abecedarian Form you've delineated, Hiya. Your words dance marvelously as if you're changing dance partners per alphabet. Liliths and Cleos in their performances gave me a smile, my friend. Aloha, William
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/14/2023 5:44:00 AM
Awh, your description about my poetry is so poetic, dear William. I truly appreciate this wonderful feedback and youd kind support. Also, I'm happy that you liked the Cleo and Lilith reference - I'm always glad to see your wonderful visits on my page. Sending best wishes and light :)
Date: 12/12/2023 5:37:00 PM
Beautifully written, Hiya. Wait! Did I read that you are only 18. No way, uh uh, can't be...I don't believe it, I can't believe it. So there...that's my story and I'm sticking to it (lol). Keep on writing lovely you :) Charlie
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/14/2023 5:46:00 AM
Awwn, haha, thank you so much dear Charles.. Well, it's a fact that yes, I'm 18 years old and passed my high school just this year. I'm so happy to see your beautiful visit on my page and for your wonderful support always - keep inspiring :)
Date: 12/12/2023 5:16:00 PM
absolutely stunning..an Abecedarian with beautiful and captivating imagery. I also appreciated all the alliteration! You've delved into a serious topic and done so beautifully...best wishes with the contest, Sara
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/14/2023 5:48:00 AM
Thank you so much dear lovely Sara, you're always so kind and genuine in blessing my poetry with such beautiful feedbacks.. I'm wholeheartedly grateful for your wonderful support always- sending love and light :)
Date: 12/12/2023 12:55:00 PM
Dear Hiya, Your use of rich images and diction is extremely captivating. It comes from the depths of a lyrical spirit and is expertly fashioned with expressive creativity. The number of great images and phrases left me speechless, making it impossible to single out one worthy of focus because they all emanate an incredible attraction and beautifully preserve your underlying concept. Surely the stars will align to your advantage for your upcoming contest
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/14/2023 5:51:00 AM
Oh my, thank you sooo much dear Sotto, even your comment is so poetic and how you've described this poem of mine truly leaves me in awe.. You're beyond kind and wholeheartedly supportive and that is evident through your comments. It's such a blessing to receive such amazing words from a brilliant poet like you. I'm always grateful - thank you :)
Date: 12/12/2023 11:46:00 AM
Hiya, your imagery and word use are stunning. They come from the heart of a poet written with eloquent artistry. There are so many outstanding images and phrases, I can't chose one to highlight as they are all amazing and carry your theme with delicate elegance. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings to you!
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Date: 12/12/2023 10:37:00 AM
I agree with To Woody, you have an extra ordinary gift of poetry writing. All of us suffer depression of some sorts, once a while. But expressing your thoughts, subdues your worries.
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Date: 12/12/2023 8:20:00 AM
A wonderful Abecedarian Hiya, very creative in the way you express the awareness of depression, an excellent write… Belle
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Date: 12/12/2023 6:30:00 AM
"Silencing the saffron of my soulful sculpture, in eternal streams of fall." This whispers a lot. Lovely written Hiya.
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Date: 12/12/2023 6:26:00 AM
This had to take some time. My close relative is going thru a depression episode right now. For an 18 year old you have an awesome vocab and way with metaphor that shines large
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Date: 12/12/2023 6:07:00 AM
Your imagery is enticing, and the flow inviting, Hiya. This is one of the best Abecedarian poems I have ever read, my friend. A FAV for my list! A wonderful collection of beautifully descriptive lines of poetry. Thanks for sharing your poetic gift with us. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 12/12/2023 6:00:00 AM
Amazing how you adorned such a long poem in ornate words maintaining the continuity of thought. --Grieving charcoal stars swing like souvenirs of deceit when, Heartbeats of hibiscus moon, shiver and shatter upon my schizophrenic Ink--so well said!
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Date: 12/12/2023 5:27:00 AM
I agree with Ink Empress! This is beyond AMAZING. It is poignantly powerful and yet graceful and poetic as it dives into a deep subject with a meaningful message. Bravo! Should do well in the contest!
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Date: 12/12/2023 3:54:00 AM
Gosh where do I even begin praising this deeply meaningful and much needed abcedarian! I absolutely love your use of colours adjectives, imagery metaphors similes alliterations and so much more to depict the emotional turmoils of an individual struggling with depression. I especially love medusas redstone heart line truly! Left me in awe! How creative of you to include a touch of mythology in this. I see you and i both used similar words but yours is dark and soul hitting. I also love how youv
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Date: 12/12/2023 3:56:00 AM
Used xyz very unique choice of words for that. “Yarns of last crystal light within Cleopatra's claustrophobic hope. But in the Zillionth moment - my heart shall wail in rhymeless refrain - am I the one, lost? “Exquisite ending to an impeccable take’ just loveee this!! Every line speake volumes. Goodluck for the contest . Im sure silent one will love this

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