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Jerusalem, the Jugular - Part One

You can't imagine what its like to march on a sacred city, to plunder and pulverize a Peoples' promise to Deity, demolishing centuries of lavish labor, wasting offspring of ancient heredity, destroying flesh, scriptures and stone with a savage Roman military synergy, a discipline determined in it's destruction of dissention, inspired by ancestral victory, politics was not our purview, methodical punishment was our specialty, We were War's royalty, we were Legio XV Apollonaris, monsters of Mars, messengers of Apollo, the juggernaut of Jupiter, along with 11 other Legions led by General Titus, 60, 000 cuts of glory we stood, for 3 and a half years we fought through Jewish guerilla ambush asymetrical urban warfare welting our progress like a pirate pestilence district after district, hell spell after hell spell we bled with chilled maneuver, the Zealots were pyromaniacs, burnt sacraficers, their zeal and our bodies zesty wood, in the Kidron Valley they flooded the streets " knee high " with oiled water as the Cohorts waded through the lanes leery, a torch was tossed, flames rose in rush 240 men perished like spazing stars trapped in a box, our grief agape with a horrified crush, as reprimand, Titus made the Legate sit in a tent with his chopped off ring finger smoldering like hot sand in the hand of a marooned man aware of error in his plan, the insurgents had men we called Fox Tails, desperate demons who knew how Hell began, as a skirmish succumbed to our skill and number they would run into apartments, dragging the fury of our blades into rooms of Hades revenge, these were fire entrapments, the buildings would blaze like windowed volcanos, screams salting us with panic linger, It was not uncommon to discover a missing Brother Legionary castrated, and decapitated with a headedless eagle carved upon his chest, don't speak to me about morals and mercy for I have seen and dealt the damage of rude death hate becomes your Father, vengence your Mother, aggravated murder your cause when everything you revere and fear merge to make a leviathen of life, the " Chosen People " of God became the chosen target of annihilation, Mount Moriah, mansion of Yahweh the Pariah would become capital of Divine crucifixion, J.A.B. This poem has been entered into the Roman Legion Contest to honor Ancient Rome and the Poet who sponsored this historical subject.

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Date: 8/3/2014 8:40:00 PM
Done well Justin... Enjoyed... Verlena
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Justin Bordner
Date: 8/5/2014 3:48:00 AM
Both Parties fought well, and with distinct tactics Verlena. Thank you. J.A.B.
Date: 7/17/2014 10:41:00 PM
This is very good and very interesting. I am going to part 2. Lucilla
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Date: 7/20/2014 1:07:00 AM
Thank you Lucilla, I do appreciate your presence and perspective my wise friend. J.A.B.
Date: 7/9/2014 8:47:00 AM
This is both effective and disturbing. Off to part two.
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/10/2014 12:15:00 PM
Yes Richard, disturbing indeed, and terribly realistic within the warmth of poetic eloquence. I wanted to demonstrate that the Zealots were equally militant and brutal in their objectives. So happy you're studying this poem. J.A.B.
Date: 7/3/2014 11:05:00 PM
gosh, you really can bring it to life!!! Such description. I take it this was a winner in that one contest?? So you could only enter part one then. Later I will take a look at the other parts. I am so sore now from being here at the computer all evening, I have to hurry and get off. LOL!!
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/4/2014 8:27:00 PM
Passion keeps life alive Andrea. It would make me happy if you read the entire write. Itsfunny how much pleasure can be achieved through soreness. J.A.B.
Date: 7/2/2014 1:57:00 AM
wow you know your Romans congratulations and thanks for stopping by mine xx
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/2/2014 1:41:00 PM
The Romans know me Mandy. Thank you. The Roman Empire is a macrocasm of everything we are as individuals alive in a collcetive consciousness. J.A.B.
Date: 7/1/2014 7:42:00 AM
ohhhh.. action pack write with so much feelings in it and vivid descriptions trips me to that .. great write.. kudos!
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/1/2014 3:25:00 PM
Glad I was able to bring you to the battle and all of it's dilemmas, sufferings and glory Olive. Action is good for you. Thanks Olive!!! J.A.B.
Date: 7/1/2014 6:18:00 AM
A truly amazing write, Justin! The last stanza speaks volumes, my friend. Hugs and congrats on a great win.. Arlene
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/1/2014 3:21:00 PM
Yes Arlene, when a soldier's responsibility transforms into a barbarous fanaticism. Thanks for the hugs and respect! J.A.B.
Date: 7/1/2014 1:53:00 AM
Sorry about the Soup glitches Isaiah and Eileen...the messages remain the same...J.A.B.
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Date: 6/30/2014 10:35:00 PM
Lots of good material here, and plenty of brutality/realism. I would have liked it to be a little more "in the present"; nevertheless, it is a worthy poem. Congratulations on your placement!
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Date: 7/1/2014 1:50:00 AM
Thank you for your steadfast respect Eileen. I will continue to fight for all the marvels in life that I love, and I will also exercise the discipline to discover new things to to honor and love Eileen, thank you. J.A.B.
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Date: 7/1/2014 1:35:00 AM
I wrote this composition in total harmony with my vision, knowledge of ancient Roman warfare and with the Spirit of soldier craft which transcends time periods. This work displays the raw yet disciplined perspective of a warrior, his Brethern, and the qualities of the enemy. I respect your preference and candor Isaiah. J.A.B.
Date: 6/30/2014 10:35:00 PM
It was a wonderful piece, Justin. Deserving of more. Congrats on this win. You are a warrior...Keep fighting.
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Date: 7/1/2014 1:40:00 AM
Continued...I am so very grateful for the splendors of Ancient Rome, an Empire which continues to exist into the 21st century, and grateful that a fellow Artist presented this opportunity to all of us. I am very excited to read, feel, and learn from all of the submissions. Good readin!!! Thank you Isaiah. J.A.B.
Date: 6/30/2014 10:28:00 PM
Congrats, Justin... Nicely Done...Linda
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Justin Bordner
Date: 7/1/2014 1:19:00 AM
Thanks Linda, so happy I receceived the inspiration to express Roman History in a poetic way. J.A.B.
Date: 6/30/2014 4:09:00 PM
"the buildings would blaze like windowed volcanos, screams salting us with panic linger,"..I love that line! So far, I am swept away... ~Laura
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Justin Bordner
Date: 6/30/2014 8:56:00 PM
Battles are best viewed from a bird's eye view Laura. So excited I got your powerful imagination jumpin into the fray! That moment is sick with intensity...J.A.B.
Date: 6/29/2014 2:57:00 AM
Justin. This is a historical account told with accuracy, emotional depth, and power. It is a very worthy entrant into the competition. I wish you well. The mayhem and destruction you have portrayed with a word brush of brilliance.
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Date: 6/29/2014 1:16:00 PM
My artistic objective was to unite a historical event with a spiritual memory articulated with poetic vision. I wrote what I saw and felt. Your evaluation makes an old soldier blush Eileen. I simply needed to honor Rome. Thank you for addressing the emotional depth. J.A.B.

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