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hold still, eventide ... I am a capricious cad among wraiths, waltzing with a mop in a Marrakesh courtyard - catching stars as they drip with waxy and wild wonder, into the braids of my maudlin noose, tightening jangling, dangling ... rose gold anklets, (wrapped 'round leggy perfection), shimmer their hammered facets, kicking smoke into toroidal hoops with raw regard while they spin, table-top, to a Chaabi chant candles waving their flames to beckon the darkness close ... notes from a punji weave mystery thru the heavy heat, Henna-striped hands cradling a bottle, jade green, as the white flowers gush their cold, gold bounty down a curvy thigh wetly wrapping an unblemished capuccino calf, Perrier-Jouët trickles off tender toes to plop, warm, on my tantalized tongue I kiss the fuchsia-daubed nails to show proper veneration, then spin back to the murky music, mop-handle lover in tow down to the spinning tie-dyed rugs and pillows, I surrender all to the callow flesh there, wanting ... willing her hair and hide and ebon eyes dark as delirium, while the brass-headed snake-of-a-hookah waits for a kiss long draws bring dizzy dreams and hypnotic swirls from the lamp, aromas and an opiate nirvana coiling around my cares lost as a lamb, to soft skin ... and sweet smoke. ( Jemaa el-Fnaa Square in Marrakesh is one of the most active and exciting places on earth, with exotic foods, snake-charmers, clothes and antique vendors, magicians, dancers, haqle or street theater, storytellers, acrobats, musicians, comedians, water sellers, tattoo artists, carnival acts, even organ-grinders with monkeys, and yes, opium and hashish traders. It has remained largely the same for over a thousand years, and is indeed an important part of history, declared by UNESCO as a "Masterpiece of World Heritage" - if you're ever in Morocco, it is a MUST-see! )

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Date: 2/4/2022 4:32:00 PM
What a wild and wonderful place you so artistically describe Greg. I think my travel days are over now, but I would have enjoyed the excitement there. Congratulations on your well deserved Trophy win my friend. Blessings xxoo y hugs
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Date: 2/4/2022 8:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A beautiful write and picture. I can almost smell the food. I like how you adding the information on the bottom. Thanks. Have a great/blessed day.......................
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Date: 2/4/2022 7:45:00 AM
That is so beautiful and stirring. The sounds, the colors--you bring to brilliant light. Your words make me want to visit the square (but not the cobra!) Congrats!
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Date: 2/4/2022 5:32:00 AM
You never fail to amaze with your brilliant poetic reflections. Beautifully done. God bless you and Congrats on a number one win. Love, Gina
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Date: 8/31/2021 3:04:00 AM
"" candles waving their flames to beckon the darkness close ... notes from a punji weave mystery thru the heavy heat, Henna-striped hands cradling a bottle, jade green, as the white flowers gush their cold, gold bounty down a curvy thigh "" TRULY MASTERFUL..... as is every verse in this new creation...This stanza to me is especially so!
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Date: 8/31/2021 3:01:00 AM
Now this is indeed a magical image feast to stir the senses my friend! To me it has the depths, the colors , the splashed-the bells and the whistles too. As close to perfection as I've ever seen in a poem.. And that is saying a lot, as I have over 50 years reading the golden greats . A great fav- God bless..
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Date: 8/29/2021 4:30:00 PM
Enjoyed your poem, Gregory! My family and I were assigned with the Air Force in Casablanca 1955-58 and visit Marrakesh - Morocco is a fascinating place! Bob
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/29/2021 9:27:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sir Roberto - it is an amazing place, isn't it? I love that they have become "modern", and yet strive to hold on to the classic elements of their culture as well ... like stepping back in time. Blessings, my friend! :o)
Date: 8/29/2021 4:39:00 AM
You have described the place beautifully, Greg:) stunning imagery:)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/29/2021 9:25:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Jo - it is greatly appreciated, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/29/2021 3:50:00 AM
One thing Greg I notice some of your poems (ae in this one..2nd/3rd verse) has too many asides which detract from the imagery,also too long lines are to be avoided ,visually a no-no ..just saying
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/29/2021 9:24:00 PM
I don't know what you mean by "asides" Brian, but thanks for the critique anyway. Not many long lines in this one, (fewer than I usually have), so maybe you mean because the rest are so short? I do appreciate the critique, and I always take yours very seriously, but I think I'll have to agree to disagree with this one, as I find it flows extremely well, paints some wonderful ambiguity and imagery, and has a sense of mystery to it. Thanks, as always, Brian.

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