Jagged Horizon

I can not say the way I feel
Too unraveled, too unreal
I seem a range
Of contorted and strange

Jagged, the horizon lies
Untying the stars and skies
Moon and sun, between them keep
Heavy hours of uncaught sleep

Madness moves in lacy gray
Where coy slumber declines to stay
Mumbled noises seek amends
As the feathered weight descends

3/23/22
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Ligon Avatar
April 16, 2022 at 7:29 AM
I love this! So creative in your expressions.
Proxenos Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 1:02 AM
Congratulations my friend an awesome poem your chosen words do it intense justice Michelle. Hugs blessings Jennifer
Proxenos Avatar
April 6, 2022 at 1:00 AM
Congratulations my friend an awesome poem your chosen words do it intense justice Michelle. Hugs blessings Jennifer
Dietrich Avatar
April 5, 2022 at 7:09 PM
Very well done, Michelle. Congratulations
Rose  Avatar
April 2, 2022 at 10:56 AM
Congratulations dear Michell, your creativity knows no boundaries, and your a brave writer who express every limit, :)
Canerdy Avatar
April 2, 2022 at 10:27 AM
CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Michelle. Janice
George Avatar
March 31, 2022 at 10:15 PM
Michelle, you have created the gloomy innerscape matching with the external landscape. Sleep deserts a troubled mind and mind becomes cloudy ! Wonderful use of images to delineate a disturbed mind.
Ashley Avatar
March 28, 2022 at 6:01 AM
Dear Michelle, what moody ambience your creative pen creates! I especially love "Jagged, the horizon lies / Untying the stars and skies" - Just stunning! A frame of mind and body defined. Your amazing artistry captures the woes of insomnia and your last line a grand finale to a vivid piece! Congratulations for your wonderful win in Constance's contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Poet Avatar
March 27, 2022 at 7:51 AM
Congratulations on your well-deserved win in the contest with this stunning poem. Blessings
Watt Avatar
March 26, 2022 at 10:34 PM
Wonderful writing, Michelle. You are an artist with word combinations and inventive phrases, "Jagged Horizon", "Convoluted, meek and strange", "Untying the stars and skies", "feathered weight" among my favorites. You capture a mood so well. Congrats for your win ~ John
La France Avatar
March 26, 2022 at 7:02 PM
Michelle, congratulations on your win in my Just Write Me A Poem contest, wonderful ~Constance
Eslinger Avatar
March 26, 2022 at 9:46 AM
Hi, Michelle! “the feathered weight descends…” STUNNING! True! At last! Descriptive words for the state and feeling. And in a poem! Bravo! xox
Delaney Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 12:54 PM
This is excellent, Michelle: Insomnia well described. Congrats on your win.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 10:36 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely/creative write. Have a blessed day/weekend....................
Faulkner Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 11:17 AM
Thank you, Paula, you as well~
Deo Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 3:22 AM
Special & superb, as always Sis Michelle. But somehow stanza 3 causes concern. Insomnia? Unable to stop thinking ... Watch each breath & caount ins & outs (no sheep - just a Good Shepherd for shalom sleep). With apology for indulging ... Anil
Faulkner Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 11:17 AM
Yes, this is about insomnia, always glad for your insightful comments, Anil!
Alex Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 10:26 PM
"Madness moves in lacy gray" - Apt color. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
Faulkner Avatar
March 25, 2022 at 11:16 AM
Thank you so much, Christuraj
Wolf Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 5:28 PM
'Mumbled noises seek amends // As the feathered weight descends' -- Magnificent, memorable closing to a meaningful write. Love the way the images you presented lured me into your perspicacious perspectives and perceptions, Michelle. ~ Peace, gw
Wolf Avatar
March 27, 2022 at 8:19 PM
ha, ha, ha, -- Can't tell who the 'real hippies' are these days! :) Big Hippo
Faulkner Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 9:20 PM
Positioning positive proclamations! Peace and love to you too, you tree hugging hippie :)
Rose  Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 4:18 PM
I can see your feelings were put down beautifully here dear Michelle, winning wishes :)
Faulkner Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 9:11 PM
Thank you very much, hope you are doing well~
Mcconnell Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 3:09 PM
Great penning with nice imagery and insightful thought too Michelle, also loved your rhyme too. Blessings,Gordon
Faulkner Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 9:10 PM
Appreciate it, thank you Gordon~
Leffanta Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 11:20 AM
Quite right as a level horizon is more of a mirage than harmony . . . .Aloha!
Faulkner Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 2:15 PM
Very true, Rico, thanks for stopping by~
Hillebrand Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 3:04 AM
Such a great poem. Best that I have read in a long time. Really.
Faulkner Avatar
March 24, 2022 at 10:11 AM
That is very kind of you, Francois, thank you-
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