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Jagged - First Place Contest Winner

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In a striking and jagged world, my heart cracked. But I will not be beaten; I will not be subdued. As I wandered, Earth's boundaries attacked. I have vigor and a spirit that is renewed. Mark the scheme's progression with scars. Each nightmare makes you stretch spars. And scream upon weeping rose to the stars. Remnants of a world once whole, now debris Space junk drifts to pierce my roof and set me free. Chemicals and detritus are just tough to foresee. On the way to jagged peaks, many have struggled. It's twisted and rusted, with a grief portent imbued. Thus, brace ourselves for lengthy star wars Jagged shards of cosmic space float aimlessly. 1 st place contest winner

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Date: 7/21/2023 9:53:00 AM
Sotto, wonderful poem and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge J Words !
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Date: 7/11/2023 10:28:00 PM
The once beautiful world is turning into a heap of debris ! Sadly it is all of man's making. A Great poem where the horrors of war are so powerfully delineated. Congratulations friend on your well deserved first place.
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Date: 7/11/2023 12:36:00 PM
- "Remnants of a world once whole, now debris" ... excellently described, Las ... this is what we humans do to our beautiful world ... we cry ... and complain ... but spit out shit and poison - Congratulations with your important poem to humanity :) - hugs
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Date: 7/11/2023 12:47:00 AM
Congratulations on a well earned win in the contest my friend
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Date: 7/8/2023 3:06:00 AM
This poem is striking in content, expressive, beautiful and sad at the same time, my friend. Despite the jaggedness, it is our duty to plod on and do our best to heal and save this planet and its surroundings. ~ Best regards // paul
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Date: 7/7/2023 10:22:00 PM
Splendid poem. I suppose this is for the contest. If so best of luck.
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Date: 7/7/2023 10:04:00 PM
Terrific poem - thought provoking + moving. We are a world of junk - here on earth + in the stars. I think of all the devastation from the war in Ukraine. From star ship waste to human loss to an environment war scarred. Just so far reaching. Be well + safe. Sincerely, Brian
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Date: 7/7/2023 12:27:00 PM
Hi Sotto, This poem may be for some fragmented contest but it speaks volumes and resonates with your sadness for the state of our planet. The music and the pic made me feel like I was viewing an educational environmental film. You are so gifted and soulful. Keep on Keeping on sir.
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Date: 7/7/2023 11:26:00 AM
Great poetic skill reaching the skies. Well done, Sir.
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