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Its a Risque Business

              they closed the brothel
                  to open a bakery 
                tarts still lay around 
           black forests are on display 
    no fresh muffins ~ nothing’s changed 


They Closed The Brothel Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Kai Michael Neumann
14/02/2021/ syllable counter PS 5/7/5/7/7

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Jenna Logan

Date: 3/5/2021 11:52:00 PM

Didn’t you just tell me you were having a writing dry spell? This poem certainly proves you are not. Well done, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/6/2021 12:16:00 AM

Heya Jenna, thanks for popping in, I’m museless at the moment, I have started so many poems, only to run into brick walls, I’ll come back with a ladder next week hopefully, glad you enjoyed this one, cheers David

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 3/5/2021 12:26:00 PM

that is really very very funny..loved it.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2021 12:46:00 PM

Heya Nancy thanks you so much for looking in, bit of light hearted double entendre, delighted you enjoyed cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/5/2021 10:09:00 AM

- :))) ... love the last line :))) ... unique and imaginative - Congratulations on your third place in the contest, David :) - // Anne-Lise :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2021 10:56:00 AM

I was lucky to scrape in 3rd me thinks Anne Lise, but delighted to get a place, thank you so much for calling in with congratulations cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 3/5/2021 7:19:00 AM

LOLOLOL. Perfect - I'm still laughing. :)) A stroke of genius ;) Congratulations on the win David! Linda

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2021 8:49:00 AM

What can I say Linda, it all started with the tarts and went downhill from there, believe me a couple of others came to mind, but I thought, best not go there, thanks for calling by with congratulations cheers David

Brian Sambourne

Date: 3/5/2021 6:41:00 AM

What a superb take on the brothel closing. Very imaginative indeed. A winner. Congratulations! Brian

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2021 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Brian, I took a chance on the smutty side, best not tell my wife, she worked in a bakery some time ago, Hmm! anyway I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David