David Kavanagh Poet Tanka

Its a Risque Business

              they closed the brothel
                  to open a bakery 
                tarts still lay around 
           black forests are on display 
    no fresh muffins ~ nothing’s changed 


They Closed The Brothel Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Kai Michael Neumann
14/02/2021/ syllable counter PS 5/7/5/7/7

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Jenna Logan March 5, 2021 at 11:52 PM Didn’t you just tell me you were having a writing dry spell? This poem certainly proves you are not. Well done, David. David Kavanagh March 6, 2021 at 12:16 AM Heya Jenna, thanks for popping in, I’m museless at the moment, I have started so many poems, only to run into brick walls, I’ll come back with a ladder next week hopefully, glad you enjoyed this one, cheers David

Nancy Kaufman March 5, 2021 at 12:26 PM that is really very very funny..loved it. David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 12:46 PM Heya Nancy thanks you so much for looking in, bit of light hearted double entendre, delighted you enjoyed cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen March 5, 2021 at 10:09 AM - :))) ... love the last line :))) ... unique and imaginative - Congratulations on your third place in the contest, David :) - // Anne-Lise :) David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 10:56 AM I was lucky to scrape in 3rd me thinks Anne Lise, but delighted to get a place, thank you so much for calling in with congratulations cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler March 5, 2021 at 7:19 AM LOLOLOL. Perfect - I'm still laughing. :)) A stroke of genius ;) Congratulations on the win David! Linda David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 8:49 AM What can I say Linda, it all started with the tarts and went downhill from there, believe me a couple of others came to mind, but I thought, best not go there, thanks for calling by with congratulations cheers David

Brian Sambourne March 5, 2021 at 6:41 AM What a superb take on the brothel closing. Very imaginative indeed. A winner. Congratulations! Brian David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 8:56 AM Thanks Brian, I took a chance on the smutty side, best not tell my wife, she worked in a bakery some time ago, Hmm! anyway I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

Unseeking Seeker March 5, 2021 at 4:50 AM Brilliant! Congrats on your win, with this original take on the contest! David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 6:07 AM Thanks seeker risqué indeed, had a good laugh writing some double entendre, I’m delighted to get a placement cheers David

Krish Radhakrishna March 5, 2021 at 4:00 AM clever and brilliant pun! well done! congrats on your win! David Kavanagh March 5, 2021 at 6:09 AM Thanks Krish was totally unexpected to get a placement, but delighted with the result cheers David

Gary Radice February 15, 2021 at 11:26 AM I laughed out loud. Brilliant. :) David Kavanagh February 15, 2021 at 12:02 PM I was laughing myself writing it Gary, wondering if the 2 Ronnie’s would’ve taken a chance on it, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty February 15, 2021 at 9:24 AM Hahaha funy clever Enjoyed David Kavanagh February 15, 2021 at 10:51 AM Took a chance on this one for the contest, I hope Kai sees the Funny side, cheers David

Jan Allison February 14, 2021 at 3:47 PM ha ha ha this is hilarious David, good luck in the contest i dont think i will be writing for it:-) hugs jan xx David Kavanagh February 15, 2021 at 4:05 AM Oh come on Jan, I was looking forward to your take on this contest, only kidding, a serious one perhaps? glad you enjoyed cheers David