David Fisher Poet Rhyme

Island Grit

Ten years on an island
Can that really be?
Because living near sand
Has been my fantasy.


Except when sticky grit
Gets into my food.
And invades hidden cracks
That show up when I’m nude.


Well, enough about that,
Small inconvenience.
I’ll dine on a straw mat,
Which makes a lot of sense.


And during any hour
I’ll get much relief.
With a brand new shower
Not far from the reef.


Oh shucks, now that I’ve picked
Two of the items.
You might think that I’m licked
Yet, I’m not frightened.


Sure I don’t have a camp,
Or means for a fire.
But a nice genie lamp
Would fill those desires.


It sounds like I’m cheating
Though that’s not my aim.
Plus there’s no fear meeting
Someone to pass blame.


Ten years may sound dreadful
On an isle so teeny.
But not fully fretful
With the aid of a genie.


For What Would You Take contest, 10/27/13

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Dominic Amezimi November 9, 2013 at 12:33 AM first stanza is the best one that you could have started this piece with... kudos David

Skat A November 7, 2013 at 9:57 AM Hi David, , Cheers on your winning poem...... SKAT LOVE :) :)

Poet Destroyer A November 6, 2013 at 7:46 PM DAVID , nicely done.... congrats in Shadow's contest.... xox~ LINDA

Sara Kendrick November 4, 2013 at 4:57 PM Great thinking on your part..If only, but in the world of poetry anything can happen..Creative win..Congrats..Sara

Nette Onclaud November 4, 2013 at 9:45 AM .. sweet congrats on your win, david!..:) huggs

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl November 4, 2013 at 4:18 AM A great answer ,well done, and on you winning spot xx

Sandra Adams November 3, 2013 at 6:34 PM very clever write and nope it's not cheating...it's one of your 3 items, it just so happens to be one that keeps giving...loved it...congrats on your win :)

Donna Jones November 3, 2013 at 6:14 PM Clever clever......congratulations

Joseph May November 3, 2013 at 5:09 PM I love the genie idea....congrats on your win

Shadow Hamilton November 3, 2013 at 2:17 PM David congrats on placing in my contest Shadow x smile

Andrea Dietrich November 1, 2013 at 12:51 AM sure do like your style!!!

Robert Pettit October 28, 2013 at 11:49 PM Nice little write with some appropriate rhyming.

Jon A Cavanaugh October 28, 2013 at 10:52 PM Being stuck on an island would be no fun at all / but with the aid of a genie I'd have a ball.

Delysia Hendricks October 27, 2013 at 7:34 PM hahaha. With a genie at hand you can wish for most anything, I would imagine, and you need not be alone. Strong contest entry, my friend. To answer your question posed elsewhere, no, not at all. No-one around to pull that trick (lol). It's a very old joke reworked. Good luck in the contest, David. I'm rooting for you. Licia :-)