Inside the Eye

There is a wall beyond which I can see
no sign of you, yet I sense everywhere
a downpour of insane calamity
while I am but a droplet in the air!
The storm is all around me, but I stay
inside the wall of it; I’m in its eye.
For now there’s calm and quiet as I pray
that when the tempest crashes through my sky,
I will endure it somehow . . . without you.
How can I stand the worst part of the rage
that’s coming? Without you, what will I do?
The walls collapse around my facade-cage.
The too much quiet turns into a din.
I fall to earth with all the pain I’m in.

Sept. 4, 2020

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 9/24/2020 6:03:00 AM
Your last two lines are so perfect... Too much quiet is a din... I've been there and heard it. Your pen always finds the heart of the pain. Congrats on your top win. Jeanne
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Date: 9/23/2020 10:48:00 PM
Congrats on your win. Excellently woven sonnet.
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Date: 9/23/2020 6:31:00 PM
Andrea, so wonderfully woven. Congratulations on your deserved Win.! Your words have impact, realising the rage to come, our insight. 'The too much quiet turns into a din' says perfectly how painful the situation is.
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Date: 9/23/2020 5:35:00 PM
Thank you my friend and congrats on your placement.
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Date: 9/8/2020 9:48:00 AM
Beautifully done; shows the true feelings of longing.
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Date: 9/7/2020 1:42:00 PM
This is excellent Andrea, especially the ending! Fantastic metaphor! Blessings xxoo
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Date: 9/6/2020 3:24:00 PM
Now it makes sense Petal lol, amazing what one line can do. I wonder how many live in a facade-cage, great line, wonderful write. Take care, Richard
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Date: 9/6/2020 12:40:00 PM
Tragic silence; just before the tempest begins!! A great piece, Andrea.
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Date: 9/5/2020 5:36:00 PM
Hello Andrea … another of your high standard sonnets Andrea. They are such a pleasure to read - Lindsay
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Date: 9/5/2020 9:53:00 AM
Powerful emotion comes through this piece.
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Date: 9/5/2020 9:52:00 AM
The poignancy of being without the one you want/need/love is deep, but intensified by the sense of the imminent arrival of a fierce storm. Dark, sad, and lonely. "Facade-cage" is a powerful image. Well done, Andrea.
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Date: 9/5/2020 9:07:00 AM
Your poem really touches something in me. I felt the heartbreak. What an excellent poem; among your very best. I loved it and it hurt me at the same time. But that is what a good poem should do.
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Date: 9/5/2020 5:04:00 AM
I feel the depth of emotions in this poem, Andrea--all the best.
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Date: 9/5/2020 4:47:00 AM
Awesome as usual. Dropped in to wish you Happy Birthday. May you have a great day and blissful life ahead. Enjoy. Warm regards Rama
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Date: 9/5/2020 4:45:00 AM
Great lines dear friend Andrea defeating the very psychological havoc of the tempest. My good wishes for your contest entry. With best wishes...Ravindra
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Date: 9/5/2020 4:44:00 AM
This is very powerful, Andrea. It is true that some things we can do and face on our own, but a strong helping hand would make it much easier. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 9/5/2020 4:27:00 AM
Very deep and profound, Andrea. A winner for sure. ~ Elaine
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Date: 9/4/2020 10:38:00 PM
Andrea, Even in the midst of a tempest, a ray of light shines. Your poem sings of a calming light inside. -Richard
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Date: 9/4/2020 10:37:00 PM
Enjoy the calm before the storm arrives. Nice poem (soupmail).
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Date: 9/4/2020 5:42:00 PM
a different take on the theme, andie.. using metaphor worked...mine pales in comparison.. go look!..huggs
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Date: 9/4/2020 5:31:00 PM
Your senses were spot on when your muse whispered this one in your ear.
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Date: 9/4/2020 3:07:00 PM
Wow! Nicely done!
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