Incredible India: My Motherland

Ah, to this land of the monsoons
or should it have been the sunsoons? 
Yet for frozen land tourists, a tropical hot boon.

Where bullock carts, stray dogs, horse carriages and cows
pedestrians, goats, bikes and rickshaws
scooters, trucks, motorbikes and cabs
all compete together in quirky medley of traffic jams
On crammed roads you could ram into bulls and rams

So brakes forever screeching, the cars forever honking, hooting
while beggers begged and pickpockets could go a' looting on a footing

But where else you'd see, ducks and ponds in the city
buffaloes wallowing in mud without fear or pity! 

Urban jungle eh, you'd think with a wink
and in many's esteem this land shan't ever sink.

Then pass the huge expanses of paddy fields and the rice farmers
and next come face to face with those Indian snake charmers! 

Ah and the imposing edifice, Tajmahal, one of the seven wonders of the world
is no where else found, nor are the epic himalayas on any map unfurled
except for India, and a whole ocean with her name
The Indian ocean knows and salutes her fame! 

As for me, meeting relatives there, is the best best part
then shopping too in each and every crowded mart
shopping like crazy, filling my spree's shopping cart!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Foli Avatar
April 20, 2020 at 5:54 PM
You're very good with Rhymes and organization of words. By the way are you from India? Always in my heart to marry an Indian Poetess... Smiles :).. Love and hugs Zaynab.. Stay safe my dear friend. And my regards to Ravi Kapoor.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
April 21, 2020 at 4:20 AM
Hi, hey, my ancestors were Mesopotamian, my forefather Arabian, my parents are Indian . And I'm married lol by the way. Thanks soo much, stay safe, best wishes.
Raven Avatar
March 21, 2020 at 12:23 PM
Hi Zaynab, such a wonderful write, coming from the heart, on India, the great motherland, filled with beauty and history. It sounds as if a busy life goes on all around. Maybe put a visit to India in my bucket list. A wonderful poem. Your friend always....Mike.
U.D Palawon  Avatar
February 16, 2020 at 3:03 AM
I can the link to the imagery of the scene described so vividly...lived that experience there...I enjoyed it for its uniqueness. :D:D all the best . :) Sunita UPD
Roper Avatar
January 17, 2020 at 8:35 AM
Incredible, each country has it own identity. Our is traffic jams from rush hours, but some road rage. Great imagery.
Krutsinger Avatar
January 15, 2020 at 3:17 PM
It sounds incredible. I want to go there right now! You have written it up as so desirable! Wow! Great imagery.
Wolf Avatar
January 15, 2020 at 12:52 PM
Thanks for the poetic tour of the country of endless fascination (in my book, anyway)! Best wishes, Gershon
Somadas Avatar
January 15, 2020 at 4:58 AM
Incredible India: My motherland.. You did justice to our motherland describing her truly but incomplete.. Your pen lacks ink for describing her diversity.. But it is a very good attempt..
Burch Avatar
January 15, 2020 at 2:06 AM
I like your style, which I might call "loosey goosey" and I also like your sense of humor. I think you have a tendency, after a number of good, original lines, to settle for something too easy, as with the "unfurled" rhyme. I would challenge you to find something better there. But overall, I think you have found a style that works very well for you.
Loving Iii Avatar
December 19, 2019 at 1:03 PM
Reading , I see what you see, the poor using the old ways. The land being what they were meant to be not just the wild but the tame servants of man. And the history the tourist attractions that can only be there and no where else. Well writen.
Knapp Avatar
December 8, 2019 at 6:22 PM
My Friend, India sounds like a great world in which to learn and experience life. A wonderful contrast with beauty laced thought out.
Vangaveti Avatar
November 29, 2019 at 7:33 AM
I have never dared to write about our country. I was afraid if I would cause to her any injustice by not being able to choose the right words. When I read this now, Wah!! I just can't say how happy I became to see my fellow poet on P.S. write about INDIA that too mirroring her true essence. I bow!!
Salehi Avatar
November 27, 2019 at 3:12 PM
LOL... Good for you... a great tribute to India.
Kiser Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 1:55 PM
As seen through your eyes, majestic. Love those mountains.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 2:14 PM
Hi poet kiser, thanks so much for comment. I'm flattered if the domestic animals on roads and all still makes it appear majestic in all its humble urban jungle way. Best wishes,
Callus Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 1:53 PM
This poem springs from the heart, as you show the love for your country, Zaynab. Your India is full of activity...full of life. It has so much to offer! Pity it is so far from where I live; I have always wanted to visit. Regards // paul
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 2:09 PM
Hi Paul, I've never lived there, just go vacationing merely so the sights and sounds amaze me. Yeah it's a noisy place but I enjoy the animals since that's not what you get to see here where I'm settled. Thanks soo much for bright comment.
Wanter Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 11:47 AM
Such a clear picture of your country. I feel as if I have walked through it with you this morning!
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 22, 2019 at 2:06 PM
Im glad if my lucid poem is worth a read and gives you a walk with mere words. Warm thanks for lovely comment.
Sergi Avatar
November 20, 2019 at 10:35 AM
Hi Zaynab A beautiful description of your beloved country with all its busy culture of animals blending in. My son in law is from Goa and he can attest to this picturesque country!
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 20, 2019 at 10:39 AM
I see, Goa eh, so the scenery there must be similar I guess. Yeah I love animals and you get to see even elephants and horses I rarely get to see in the foreign countries I've lived in. Thanks soo much for a cool nice comment!
Rodrigues Avatar
November 20, 2019 at 7:09 AM
Very enjoyable! You painted a picture for us with your imagery. Felt like I was dashing between vehicles...could hear the honking, screeching and hooting.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 20, 2019 at 10:40 AM
Glad I pictured it so you could imagine it easily. Warm thanks for a super comment ! ??
La France Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 11:32 AM
Zaynab, you have penned a beautiful poem of your motherland. You make it so interesting and inviting. Wonderfully written!
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 12:50 PM
I'm super glad you think so, warm thanks for your nice comment.
Green Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 9:46 AM
Sounds like an amazing place to live or visit. Your poem is like a painting of spectacular scenes captured in all of their beauty. Really nicely done.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 10:55 AM
Heyy, thanks soo much for a poetic super comment. There's beauty in chaos then perhaps like poets say, the scenes there look so chaotic yet paintable yes. Best wishes!
Gauthier Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 7:51 AM
I'd love to visit India. Indeed there is no place in the world like it. Namaste. I wrote several poems about my love for India. One of them is Bollywood Charm.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 10:53 AM
Hii Line! Why thanks so much for a delightful comment. I'm super excited about reading your said poem then. Knowing your talent I'm ready to be charmed. Cheers!
May Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 6:59 AM
Your description of your homeland is amazing, I felt as if I was siting next to you as you described it. Well done! S.zaynab!
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 7:03 AM
Im glad if my description was vivid enough. Thanks soo much for comment. Cheers!!
Mcconnell Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 2:56 AM
A lovely penned piece my friend, telling well your love for your nation, This beautifully expressed.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 4:32 AM
Yeah I like my motherland though I don't like it's people in power. I don't llive there as I have settled in other places. Thanks soo much for comment.
Moorman Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 12:57 AM
You have gracefully and gratefully expressed your love for you motherland. I knew I would love it the moment I began reading it. I will continue to follow your work closely, especially when I need cheering up. Keep on writing!
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 19, 2019 at 1:14 AM
I'm super glad my poem cheered you! Thanks soo much for telling me you liked my poem, I enjoyed yours so much so will visit you time and again upon your muse.
Deo Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 9:59 PM
I loved LINE #2, "Sunsoons" is a Word Creation, a unique word, and only from a India Lover. I have visited once ...thought U were "Persian" in Iran. But my guesses pale against the glory of these surprises. Fine writing, tinged with admiration for ordinary India (& Taj!) shalom salam
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 11:22 PM
Wow thanks soo much for a wonderful comment!! Persian, a bit I'm that , more Mesopotamian and Arabian due to ancestors, but motherland is India. Ok best wishes,
Pandit Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 6:52 PM
Beautiful sights and sounds of India--meeting relatives, sampling the food, the wonderful sites..never ending pleasure when you visit..well done.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 11:19 PM
Thanks soo much for comment vijay, you summed my poem well.
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