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Incredible India: My Motherland

Ah, to this land of the monsoons or should it have been the sunsoons? Yet for frozen land tourists, a tropical hot boon. Where bullock carts, stray dogs, horse carriages and cows pedestrians, goats, bikes and rickshaws scooters, trucks, motorbikes and cabs all compete together in quirky medley of traffic jams On crammed roads you could ram into bulls and rams So brakes forever screeching, the cars forever honking, hooting while beggers begged and pickpockets could go a' looting on a footing But where else you'd see, ducks and ponds in the city buffaloes wallowing in mud without fear or pity! Urban jungle eh, you'd think with a wink and in many's esteem this land shan't ever sink. Then pass the huge expanses of paddy fields and the rice farmers and next come face to face with those Indian snake charmers! Ah and the imposing edifice, Tajmahal, one of the seven wonders of the world is no where else found, nor are the epic himalayas on any map unfurled except for India, and a whole ocean with her name The Indian ocean knows and salutes her fame! As for me, meeting relatives there, is the best best part then shopping too in each and every crowded mart shopping like crazy, filling my spree's shopping cart!

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Date: 4/20/2020 5:54:00 PM
You're very good with Rhymes and organization of words. By the way are you from India? Always in my heart to marry an Indian Poetess... Smiles :).. Love and hugs Zaynab.. Stay safe my dear friend. And my regards to Ravi Kapoor.
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S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 4/21/2020 4:20:00 AM
Hi, hey, my ancestors were Mesopotamian, my forefather Arabian, my parents are Indian . And I'm married lol by the way. Thanks soo much, stay safe, best wishes.
Date: 3/21/2020 12:23:00 PM
Hi Zaynab, such a wonderful write, coming from the heart, on India, the great motherland, filled with beauty and history. It sounds as if a busy life goes on all around. Maybe put a visit to India in my bucket list. A wonderful poem. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 2/16/2020 3:03:00 AM
I can the link to the imagery of the scene described so vividly...lived that experience there...I enjoyed it for its uniqueness. :D:D all the best . :) Sunita UPD
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Date: 1/17/2020 8:35:00 AM
Incredible, each country has it own identity. Our is traffic jams from rush hours, but some road rage. Great imagery.
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Date: 1/15/2020 3:17:00 PM
It sounds incredible. I want to go there right now! You have written it up as so desirable! Wow! Great imagery.
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Date: 1/15/2020 12:52:00 PM
Thanks for the poetic tour of the country of endless fascination (in my book, anyway)! Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 1/15/2020 4:58:00 AM
Incredible India: My motherland.. You did justice to our motherland describing her truly but incomplete.. Your pen lacks ink for describing her diversity.. But it is a very good attempt..
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Date: 1/15/2020 2:06:00 AM
I like your style, which I might call "loosey goosey" and I also like your sense of humor. I think you have a tendency, after a number of good, original lines, to settle for something too easy, as with the "unfurled" rhyme. I would challenge you to find something better there. But overall, I think you have found a style that works very well for you.
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Date: 12/19/2019 1:03:00 PM
Reading , I see what you see, the poor using the old ways. The land being what they were meant to be not just the wild but the tame servants of man. And the history the tourist attractions that can only be there and no where else. Well writen.
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Date: 12/8/2019 6:22:00 PM
My Friend, India sounds like a great world in which to learn and experience life. A wonderful contrast with beauty laced thought out.
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Date: 11/29/2019 7:33:00 AM
I have never dared to write about our country. I was afraid if I would cause to her any injustice by not being able to choose the right words. When I read this now, Wah!! I just can't say how happy I became to see my fellow poet on P.S. write about INDIA that too mirroring her true essence. I bow!!
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Date: 11/27/2019 3:12:00 PM
LOL... Good for you... a great tribute to India.
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Date: 11/22/2019 1:55:00 PM
As seen through your eyes, majestic. Love those mountains.
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S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 11/22/2019 2:14:00 PM
Hi poet kiser, thanks so much for comment. I'm flattered if the domestic animals on roads and all still makes it appear majestic in all its humble urban jungle way. Best wishes,
Date: 11/22/2019 1:53:00 PM
This poem springs from the heart, as you show the love for your country, Zaynab. Your India is full of activity...full of life. It has so much to offer! Pity it is so far from where I live; I have always wanted to visit. Regards // paul
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S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri
Date: 11/22/2019 2:09:00 PM
Hi Paul, I've never lived there, just go vacationing merely so the sights and sounds amaze me. Yeah it's a noisy place but I enjoy the animals since that's not what you get to see here where I'm settled. Thanks soo much for bright comment.
Date: 11/22/2019 11:47:00 AM
Such a clear picture of your country. I feel as if I have walked through it with you this morning!
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Date: 11/22/2019 2:06:00 PM
Im glad if my lucid poem is worth a read and gives you a walk with mere words. Warm thanks for lovely comment.
Date: 11/20/2019 10:35:00 AM
Hi Zaynab A beautiful description of your beloved country with all its busy culture of animals blending in. My son in law is from Goa and he can attest to this picturesque country!
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Date: 11/20/2019 10:39:00 AM
I see, Goa eh, so the scenery there must be similar I guess. Yeah I love animals and you get to see even elephants and horses I rarely get to see in the foreign countries I've lived in. Thanks soo much for a cool nice comment!
Date: 11/20/2019 7:09:00 AM
Very enjoyable! You painted a picture for us with your imagery. Felt like I was dashing between vehicles...could hear the honking, screeching and hooting.
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Date: 11/20/2019 10:40:00 AM
Glad I pictured it so you could imagine it easily. Warm thanks for a super comment ! ??
Date: 11/19/2019 11:32:00 AM
Zaynab, you have penned a beautiful poem of your motherland. You make it so interesting and inviting. Wonderfully written!
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Date: 11/19/2019 12:50:00 PM
I'm super glad you think so, warm thanks for your nice comment.
Date: 11/19/2019 9:46:00 AM
Sounds like an amazing place to live or visit. Your poem is like a painting of spectacular scenes captured in all of their beauty. Really nicely done.
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Date: 11/19/2019 10:55:00 AM
Heyy, thanks soo much for a poetic super comment. There's beauty in chaos then perhaps like poets say, the scenes there look so chaotic yet paintable yes. Best wishes!
Date: 11/19/2019 7:51:00 AM
I'd love to visit India. Indeed there is no place in the world like it. Namaste. I wrote several poems about my love for India. One of them is Bollywood Charm.
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Date: 11/19/2019 10:53:00 AM
Hii Line! Why thanks so much for a delightful comment. I'm super excited about reading your said poem then. Knowing your talent I'm ready to be charmed. Cheers!
Date: 11/19/2019 6:59:00 AM
Your description of your homeland is amazing, I felt as if I was siting next to you as you described it. Well done! S.zaynab!
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Date: 11/19/2019 7:03:00 AM
Im glad if my description was vivid enough. Thanks soo much for comment. Cheers!!
Date: 11/19/2019 2:56:00 AM
A lovely penned piece my friend, telling well your love for your nation, This beautifully expressed.
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Date: 11/19/2019 4:32:00 AM
Yeah I like my motherland though I don't like it's people in power. I don't llive there as I have settled in other places. Thanks soo much for comment.
Date: 11/19/2019 12:57:00 AM
You have gracefully and gratefully expressed your love for you motherland. I knew I would love it the moment I began reading it. I will continue to follow your work closely, especially when I need cheering up. Keep on writing!
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Date: 11/19/2019 1:14:00 AM
I'm super glad my poem cheered you! Thanks soo much for telling me you liked my poem, I enjoyed yours so much so will visit you time and again upon your muse.
Date: 11/18/2019 9:59:00 PM
I loved LINE #2, "Sunsoons" is a Word Creation, a unique word, and only from a India Lover. I have visited once ...thought U were "Persian" in Iran. But my guesses pale against the glory of these surprises. Fine writing, tinged with admiration for ordinary India (& Taj!) shalom salam
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Date: 11/18/2019 11:22:00 PM
Wow thanks soo much for a wonderful comment!! Persian, a bit I'm that , more Mesopotamian and Arabian due to ancestors, but motherland is India. Ok best wishes,
Date: 11/18/2019 6:52:00 PM
Beautiful sights and sounds of India--meeting relatives, sampling the food, the wonderful sites..never ending pleasure when you visit..well done.
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Date: 11/18/2019 11:19:00 PM
Thanks soo much for comment vijay, you summed my poem well.
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