Jack Horne Poet Ottava rima

In Swirling Mist

In swirling mist, I inch along the roads,
There are no passengers aboard the coach;
This is no night for driving heavy loads.
The headlights full to warn of my approach,
My scalp is prickling: wonder what this bodes
(My instincts always prove beyond reproach).
And then dismembered hairy hands appear;
An evil laugh the last thing that I hear…

* based on a local legend

Jack Horne, 24th August, for Nette’s Through the Mist contest

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Joyce Johnson October 1, 2014 at 9:55 PM A great win Jack. Glad to see your name at the top. There are so many contests going on that I don't always see who wins and I can't enter too many. thank you for your kind comments on my work. this is a busy week for me. My daughter's birthday and her daughter, my youngest granddaughter is getting married on Saturday so we are all in a whirl about that. Love, Joyce

Matthew Anish October 1, 2014 at 3:49 PM Dark and sinister poetry - well done - I can feel the emotion in this work. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Joe Maverick September 30, 2014 at 1:21 AM I was thinking of visiting Jack, but this has made me reconsider L O L)) how are things down there Jack.?

Daver Austin September 29, 2014 at 11:32 AM Good Halloween stuff, Jack. Those dismembered, hairy hands grabbed me. Thanks for reading my long spook show. Love, daver

Phyllis Babcock September 27, 2014 at 5:10 PM Had me feel a chill up my spine as the imagination can play many tricks in the swirling mist. A local legend always makes one think what did they really see. Nice one Jack. love phyl

Regina Mcintosh September 8, 2014 at 4:00 PM scary.... very good writing. Love and prayers to you, Gina

Nette Onclaud August 31, 2014 at 10:43 PM i am stunned by such impact in few lines, jack.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!

Constance La France August 31, 2014 at 8:55 AM Jack, this poem remains awesome for the contest and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Comments Contest, that was fun and I am deeply honoured with my placement ~~ Constance La France August 31, 2014 at 9:00 AM . . . And a big congratulations on your big win in the contest with this poem, I knew it was a winner ~~

Andrea Dietrich August 31, 2014 at 1:06 AM Jack, so glad to see this on the list. It was very well written. You are one of my favorite writers of short poetry on this whole website!! Congrats for this win.

Connie Marcum Wong August 30, 2014 at 11:25 PM Your rhyme is always sublime Jack. You are a true poet, as it appears like you use little effort in creating your poetry, yet there is a deepness about it that we all know takes time to create. Love it!

Jan Allison August 30, 2014 at 12:23 PM really enjoyed the unique take on the theme. many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx

Robert Johnson August 28, 2014 at 10:57 AM Boo! I hope I didn't scare you off the road. You'd better get the h... outta there man. :) Peace.

Poet Destroyer A August 26, 2014 at 6:59 PM LOL, Jack, I'm teasing, how's your comment contest going.. By the way, I actually think I can hear that evil laugh.. Love Linda

Poet Destroyer A August 26, 2014 at 6:58 PM Nice poem Jack...PD

Andrea Dietrich August 25, 2014 at 5:04 PM soupmail please!

Andrea Dietrich August 25, 2014 at 8:08 AM wow, you NAILED it, the form AND the topic . Swell poem, Jack, I hope it scores big.

Sara Kendrick August 25, 2014 at 5:48 AM Scary one..Top notch..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Constance La France August 24, 2014 at 2:29 PM It's a fantastic poem for the contest, Jack, I like the form chosen but doubt I could do it, best of luck ~~

Daver Austin August 24, 2014 at 11:37 AM Gonna travel a different way. Love, daver

Angie Thomas August 24, 2014 at 10:53 AM The ending was unexpected, and I was hooked till the end... :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 24, 2014 at 10:42 AM Brilliant take on the theme Jack! Wish u luck in contest!