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In Swirling Mist

In swirling mist, I inch along the roads, There are no passengers aboard the coach; This is no night for driving heavy loads. The headlights full to warn of my approach, My scalp is prickling: wonder what this bodes (My instincts always prove beyond reproach). And then dismembered hairy hands appear; An evil laugh the last thing that I hear… * based on a local legend Jack Horne, 24th August, for Nette’s Through the Mist contest

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Joyce Johnson

Date: 10/1/2014 9:55:00 PM

A great win Jack. Glad to see your name at the top. There are so many contests going on that I don't always see who wins and I can't enter too many. thank you for your kind comments on my work. this is a busy week for me. My daughter's birthday and her daughter, my youngest granddaughter is getting married on Saturday so we are all in a whirl about that. Love, Joyce

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/1/2014 3:49:00 PM

Dark and sinister poetry - well done - I can feel the emotion in this work. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Joe Maverick

Date: 9/30/2014 1:21:00 AM

I was thinking of visiting Jack, but this has made me reconsider L O L)) how are things down there Jack.?

Daver Austin

Date: 9/29/2014 11:32:00 AM

Good Halloween stuff, Jack. Those dismembered, hairy hands grabbed me. Thanks for reading my long spook show. Love, daver

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 9/27/2014 5:10:00 PM

Had me feel a chill up my spine as the imagination can play many tricks in the swirling mist. A local legend always makes one think what did they really see. Nice one Jack. love phyl

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/8/2014 4:00:00 PM

scary.... very good writing. Love and prayers to you, Gina

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/31/2014 10:43:00 PM

i am stunned by such impact in few lines, jack.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!

Constance La France

Date: 8/31/2014 8:55:00 AM

Jack, this poem remains awesome for the contest and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Comments Contest, that was fun and I am deeply honoured with my placement ~~

Constance La France
Date: 8/31/2014 9:00:00 AM

. . . And a big congratulations on your big win in the contest with this poem, I knew it was a winner ~~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/31/2014 1:06:00 AM

Jack, so glad to see this on the list. It was very well written. You are one of my favorite writers of short poetry on this whole website!! Congrats for this win.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/30/2014 11:25:00 PM

Your rhyme is always sublime Jack. You are a true poet, as it appears like you use little effort in creating your poetry, yet there is a deepness about it that we all know takes time to create. Love it!