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In My Closet

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Mom kissed me on the forehead and tucked under my covers. There is a chill all over me as I look over at the dark closet. I am afraid… Swallowing hard, I felt my heart beginning to race. Alarm bells are going off inside, someone is watching. I can feel it… There are eyes looking back at me, I can see them. I remember the light switch is at the foot of the bed. I am pondering… I look briefly at the light switch and then back at the eyes watching me. Can I turn on that light switch before something jumps out and gets me? I must prevail… My muscles are tensing up as I get ready for flight. I leap at the light switch while reaching for the doorknob. I am safe… In the living room, I told mom I slipped turning on the light switch. After using the bathroom, I walked over and closed that closet door. Lights off… Edward J Ebbs - 5/18/2015 Written for a Contest, Tales From The Dark Side

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/15/2015 10:19:00 PM

hey was the picture here before? That is pretty cool to put with your poem.

Edward Ebbs
Date: 6/16/2015 7:22:00 AM

Thank You Andrea :)

Skat A

Date: 6/15/2015 7:46:00 PM

this is a great poem

Edward Ebbs
Date: 6/15/2015 9:15:00 PM

Thank you SKAT...it's a memory :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 6/14/2015 7:31:00 PM

Brings back memories of being afraid of the dark and its something we never really grow out of... I liked your dark tale, Ed. Great work! Congrats on the win!

Edward Ebbs
Date: 6/15/2015 9:14:00 PM

Thanks Kelly!

Jack Horne

Date: 6/3/2015 5:07:00 AM

very clever write

Edward Ebbs
Date: 6/6/2015 1:02:00 AM

Thank you old friend :)

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/24/2015 2:33:00 PM

The author uses good imagery and maintains a dark flow through the whole piece. Emile.

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/24/2015 10:40:00 PM

Thanks Emile for dropping by :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/21/2015 2:25:00 PM

i almost couldn't contain the suspense, ed.. distinctly done--wow!.. huggs

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/21/2015 9:17:00 PM

Thank you nette :)

Constance La France

Date: 5/19/2015 8:55:00 PM

Ed wonderful. For me it was something lurking under the bed. Impressive 7 and thanks for visiting my poem today

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/19/2015 9:22:00 PM

You know as an adult I rationalized that those days were from an active imagination, which I did have. I was required to sleep in the dark, and in the daylight, I would check that closet and analyse those clothes...there was nothing reflective in there and where the eyes were, should have been impossible, I could never figure it out. ~ Ed

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/19/2015 2:54:00 PM

Hi Ed Enjoyed this light poetry ( about a dark topic).. words that describe what I remember going through as a child, and went through with both my adult kids when they were younger. Cool poem xx~xx

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/19/2015 9:15:00 PM

Thanks Kim...I left a light on for my kids when they were little. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/18/2015 3:27:00 PM

HI,, Edd, finally seeing it as you requested. I think you can call it free verse. First, Change fell to "feel" Now I want to make another suggestion. Let me take it to Soupmail!!

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/18/2015 10:34:00 PM

Thanks for reponding to my mail/messaging for help with the "poetry form", I was not sure, just a beginner here...

Ayesha Karim

Date: 5/18/2015 12:34:00 AM

Oh I am going through something similar in my life right now.

Edward Ebbs
Date: 5/18/2015 10:27:00 PM

Sigh, I am sorry Ayesha...