David Kavanagh Poet Free verse

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In a World where I do not Exist Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Silent One 08/29/2024

In a world where I do not exist

The world where I do not exist 
is only a heartbeat either way 
A flicker of light
a trickle of tears 
blue turns into (grey)

And it is grey
not black or white 
A void without permission  
or invite
Oblivious and comfortable
the great filter be
Forgettable too
in absence of memory

Yet into the grey I go
to a realm of nothingness
A world with no woe —
Infinite in empty ignorance
Energy becomes of me
an atom-less mass of entropy

Stretching, pulling
Rising, falling
upon waves of gravity

Outside of time
only spontaneity  
in this world 
where I strew 

Malleable, gaseous, shapeless,
Infinitely complex,  
intrinsically simple
Diffusion spirals inside infusion 
across a pulsing eternity
For the greatest time  
I never had
A netherworld  
that does not know sad

This world where I do not exist 
precedes and succeeds me

Come what will
Come what may
From where I come
I go back today

A spasm, a twist
a breath, a death
a cycle anew
No void to view

With nothing else to do
til the grey
burns back to blue

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Robert Sidwell September 8, 2024 at 10:38 AM Congratulations on your win!! Great writing and I really enjoyed the rhythm to your piece! David Kavanagh September 8, 2024 at 1:15 PM Thanks so much Robert, always great to hear a fellow poet enjoyed a piece I’ve written, I was delighted with the good placement in this contest, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith September 7, 2024 at 10:15 AM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your      creative write. Have a blessed/fun day with your win...................... David Kavanagh September 8, 2024 at 2:41 AM Thanks so much Paula, I’m delighted you enjoyed my poem, and with the placement, cheers David

Karen Jones September 7, 2024 at 8:37 AM I’d love to hear this as spoken word it has a melodic flow and interesting word choice with meaning! Congratulations on your win! David Kavanagh September 7, 2024 at 9:48 AM Heya Karen, perhaps one day I will try an audio and see how it goes, thanks so much for your kind comments I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

Silent One September 7, 2024 at 7:38 AM I really liked the simplicity in your poem and in particular how you formatted it.. sometimes the way we do that, adds to the poem and it did that here.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest.. David Kavanagh September 7, 2024 at 9:40 AM Thanks so much S1, I’m delighted to share top spot in your thought provoking contest, formatting for me is a work in progress, cheers David

Suzanne Delaney August 30, 2024 at 9:31 AM David It does make you ponder existence and non existence.Particularly when you haven't experienced the latter but your imagination carries this admirably and it is like time speeds up at the end with those racing lines. My favorite line, "The best time I never had. " LOL GL in the judging. SuZ Suzanne Delaney August 30, 2024 at 5:51 PM Interesting theories David ...we have to remain open to all possibilities. David Kavanagh August 30, 2024 at 10:34 AM Heya SuZ, I know it’s all bonkers, but i’m postulating here that death is the same non experience as before birth; now this is where the science gets tricky, if the universe is Infinite then everything can and will happen an infinite amount of times including us, and if it proves to be finite, it’s also possible a (Big Rip) can happen destroying the universe, causing another (Big Bang) on the rebound, and we’ll come around again eventually, so it will be (the best time I never had) due to oblivion during the process lol! Cheers David

Kim Rodrigues August 29, 2024 at 4:44 PM An interesting write that spirals! David Kavanagh August 30, 2024 at 1:21 AM Thanks Kim, an alternate look past the perpetual cycle of life from an oblivious perspective, I’m sure plenty of spirals are going on here lol! Cheers David

Tom Cunningham August 29, 2024 at 7:46 AM You take the reader on an incredible journey to a world where you don't exist, or are you already there, who knows for sure. Good luck in the contest. Tom David Kavanagh August 29, 2024 at 8:27 AM Thanks Tom, no I’m not back there yet, simply because (I think therefore I am) lol! I came across eternity before birth without even noticing a second of it, so I’m postulating after death is the same, oblivion cancels itself out by it’s very nature of being oblivious, it’s all bonkers, but fun to ponder, cheers David

Lin Lane August 29, 2024 at 4:42 AM Mornin' David and this empty void of a world without you does not appeal to me. You speak of it as being wrapped in crinkled grey tissue paper, no ribbon, certainly not a gift anyone would want. I enjoyed the verses where you used several adjectives to convey your sentiments of a world... in particular, "A spasm, a twist, a breath, a death..." David Kavanagh August 29, 2024 at 8:19 AM Indeed Lin that is the paradox of trying to explain a world where we don’t exist, insofar as my poem and pov goes, all this obliviousness happens instantaneously because it cannot be perceived, til the grey burns back to blue, blink and I will miss it! But hey you’re a damn good poet so should have no problem getting around the paradox! Lin Lane August 29, 2024 at 7:15 AM I'm finding it difficult to keep the thought in proper perspective that we WON'T be around to witness it, and yet explain what it's like, what it's become, or had been. Since I claim I don't have a muse, I'll have to blame my thoughts where they belong... on me. I'll find the words, somehow... maybe... maybe not. David Kavanagh August 29, 2024 at 5:11 AM This world without me contest I took literally Lin, I try to express without having a pov, as I won’t be around to witness it, just like before I was born, yet potential is still there to be again, oh I’m sure the world itself will carry on one way or another without me, Come what may! I believe there is hope and infinite possibilities, thanks for commenting on this perhaps difficult piece, cheers David