In a Field of Daisies - a Contemporary Sonnet

In a field of daisies, bathed in a  perfume
of wild roses, clover and ocean brine,
you and me in the early afternoon
drinking Kool Aid, pretending its wine,
and sharing left over crumbs with a few tiny ants,
that scurry across a thread barren cloth
that has spent years in a trunk with a moth,
While we eat a meal fit for a King and Queen-
Periwinkles, Dulse and canned Sardines- 
treasures from the Great Atlantic Sea,
while the rolling waves break on the rocks below
in this field where so many daisies grow

He loves me, he loves me not, my daisy flies away,
And only Jimmy and the wind will ever know.


Written:  June 9th, 2014




Author's Note.

This was my first picnic with my first love - We were 6 or 7 years old at the time.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 3/31/2016 7:00:00 AM
sweet!
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 3/31/2016 7:09:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by, James and for your kind comments. Elaine
Date: 12/1/2014 1:07:00 AM
Hi Vera, I too love sonnets. This was the first contemporary one I wrote; all my others are of the old form. It was over 6o years ago when Jimmy and I had that picnic, so that makes you and I nearly the same age. Where has the time gone? Elaine
Login to Reply
Date: 11/28/2014 6:28:00 PM
Hi Elaine, what a beautiful sonnet, I just love rhyme and sonnets, Ah! picnic with your first love, if I remember I had the same experience when I was about 10 or 11 years old, it was a long time ago, I would say about 60 odd years ago, thank you for this little reminder and take care..........Vera............
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 12/1/2014 1:13:00 AM
Hi Vera, I too love sonnets. This was the first contemporary one I wrote; all my others are of the old form. It was over 6o years ago when Jimmy and I had that picnic, so that makes you and I nearly the same age. Where has the time gone? Elaine
Date: 7/20/2014 9:34:00 AM
A quite lovely sonnet on those first memory's Elaine, I loved it...Keith.
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:58:00 AM
Thank you, Keith. Lainie
Date: 7/17/2014 9:35:00 AM
The innocence of youth so well remembered and written!! Congrats on your win!!!!!
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:58:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Robert. Much appreciated. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 7:40:00 PM
a lovely trip back to innocent love Elaine congrats on win hugs
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:57:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Shadow. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 6:50:00 PM
So young and innocent! loved this, grats on your win!
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:56:00 AM
Thank you Casarah, for your kind comments. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 5:59:00 PM
I sure remember this one and it remains one of my very favorites on the list. Congrats for your win.
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:55:00 AM
Thank you for always supporting my writing, Andrea. It means a lot to me. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 4:26:00 PM
Pure bright, clean, innocence is what you always seem to portray so well. Congrad's Light & Love
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:54:00 AM
Thank you Deb. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 3:38:00 PM
This is so sweet but rich with emotion. I remember feeling very intensely at that age. Great garden party poem. Congratulations.
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:52:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Faye. Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 8:00:00 AM
Oh loving sweet memories Elaine ! Very beautiful write,, relates well to me,, congrats on huge win!
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:50:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Dr. Upma. Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Date: 7/16/2014 5:39:00 AM
Oh! sweet memories that must be kept alive! Enjoyed your picnic in your own special wild-flowered garden. Deserves a 7top rating. Congratulations on your merited win, Elaine! // paul
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:49:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Paul. Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Date: 7/8/2014 7:56:00 PM
Beautifully written, Lainie! This is so sweet and so nostalgic. It really brings back some nice memories for me, of spring and summer days gone by.
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:48:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Kelly. bfn Lainie
Date: 7/7/2014 9:25:00 AM
Oh my, dear Elaine, this tender memory seems to whisper with such delicate emotion, ...it carries the reader to a childhood day, in a soft summer breeze. So lovely !!
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:47:00 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Carrie. Lainie
Date: 6/24/2014 1:06:00 PM
wow! such sweet sweet memory of a long lost love.. :) like best the last two lines you made.
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:46:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Olive. bfn Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Date: 6/21/2014 4:02:00 PM
Delightful Elaine, a memory forever locked away and a treasure it is. So nice to visit after such a long time. Love, Elizabeth
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:45:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Elizabeth. bfn Your friend in poetry, Lainie
Date: 6/19/2014 12:41:00 PM
He loves me, he loves me not, my daisy flies away...when i reached this part i read the poem all over again and clicked +FAV
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:44:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments Rodger and for faving.It means so much to me. bfn Your friend in poetry. Lainie
Date: 6/16/2014 3:03:00 PM
Just reading this one again and admiring how you did it. Did you ever see your first love again?
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 6/17/2014 7:59:00 AM
. Our paths literally crossed again while walking down the road to the Bay I write about. Our lives had taken such different paths...but I must confess, the sparks were still there. bfn. Elaine
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 6/17/2014 7:57:00 AM
Hi, Andrea. The poem I wrote entitled 'First Love', is also about Jimmy. My dad joined the army shortly after that and we moved from New Brunswick to Ontario and I never saw Jimmy again until I was in my fifties while on a nosolgic trip to the place I was born.
Date: 6/15/2014 9:08:00 PM
A lovely and well written sonnet. Such memories are treasures that deserve to be shared with the world. BBBRAVOOOO!!!!
Login to Reply
Date: 6/15/2014 7:46:00 AM
lovely nostalgic write : )
Login to Reply
Date: 6/15/2014 3:18:00 AM
Excellent. Adore it. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
Login to Reply
Date: 6/11/2014 4:17:00 PM
The wild roses, clover and daisies must have been beautiful, dear. I bet you still smile when thinking of your first picnic with Jimmy. Such a delightful poem! Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 6/10/2014 6:22:00 PM
I absolutely adore t his one. A FAVE! the final couplet is perfection.
Login to Reply
Date: 6/10/2014 4:44:00 AM
Good morning my friend! This gem reminds me SO much of my childhood days...I had my first crush when I was in the 2nd grade. Her name was Carol and she totally ignored me...I was heartbroken. I am SO glad to see you posting poems again! I can't BELIEVE I have not yet put you on my fav poet list but am gonna do so now. I deserve a good spanking for that (Ouch!)
Login to Reply
George   Avatar
Elaine George
Date: 6/11/2014 9:48:00 AM
Thank you Tim. it is nice to be back and writing poetryb again..which I have concluded... is the breath the great crator breathed in me. Wishing you a wonderful day. bfn your friend, Elaine
Date: 6/9/2014 9:45:00 PM
Loved it Laine ...Seren
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter