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*Ranket : an organ (a double-reed wind instrument of the 16th and 17th centuries.) producing a gentle, muffled tone.

The mist fell over the lake like a grey blanket. Only the sound similar to a ranket* The water still and lifeless, not a ripple to be seen. The air not foetid but fresh and clean. And I felt a chill from the loss forever of my Bill. Sitting in the snow, my mind void of thought. Blocking the clarity, I so desperately sought. Enraptured by a numbness circling my soul. Seeking solace most peaceful and whole. And I felt a chill from the loss forever of my Bill. Enjoying the loneness, no wish for chatting. Glancing I saw a large wolf come pitter patting. I felt a hot breath behind my head. Its eyes piercing, though I did not dread. I felt a chill. Said the wolf "forever with your Bill" Without thinking I asked the creature. It stared at me with a chiseled facial feature. Why are you here, what purpose do you fulfil? Again, I asked, are you here to remind me of Bill? I felt a chill. Said the wolf "forever with your Bill" My dear Bill’s emblem was a wolf, a large tattoo. Not a man saved all drowned captain and his crew. Dear Bill working on that ill-fated ship lost at sea. We had plans, Bill and I, he was going to marry me. I felt a chill. Said the wolf "forever with your Bill" I could not fathom why the wolf was here. I spoke harshly to the beast without any fear. Wolf what are you doing encroaching my space? The wolf answered, gave me a blank face. I felt a chill. Said the wolf "forever with your Bill" Where do you emerge from canine ghost? Are you evil, should I dread you most? Who sent you to unsettle me and joust my mind? You speak of my dear Bill, do you mean unkind? I felt a chill. Said the wolf "forever with your Bill" Again, I demanded an answer from the beast. Surely that was what I could expect at the least. The wolf did not answer, it just walked away. That is the last I have seen of it, to this very day. And I felt a chill from the loss of my Bill.

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Date: 12/4/2023 11:07:00 AM
You're always so good and if this hadn't been so reminiscent of the Raven it might have placed higher. Thx so much for supporting the contest with this excellent entry
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Date: 12/4/2023 11:54:00 AM
No need for a place Tom. It was intentionally fashioned after The Raven, I even added words I would never usually use like pitter pat. Your contest was beyond me, but I enjoyed doing what I did. Thanks for your comment.
Date: 12/4/2023 9:44:00 AM
You captured the nuances of Plath's state of mind as she writes about in her works. An intriguing twist, SV on the Poe /Plath contest which I think should have been a Top Ten List for your efforts! "Not an easy task, but I did put my heart and soul into it" Yes you did as I did. Stay cool, I wish you no more midnight drearies! lol. Anaya
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Date: 12/4/2023 10:57:00 AM
I am afraid I was out of my depth with this one Anaya. I was reluctant to enter, as it felt like sacrilege trying to emanate those two. Particularly Poe, who I admire greatly. Thanks for your lovely comment. I don't spend much time reading now, but I have just read your entry to the contest its very very good. I will comment now on it.
Date: 12/4/2023 7:19:00 AM
I always love your stories Svvie. You make them appear so real. I'm kinda chilled to the bone reading this one. Love it! :)
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Date: 11/28/2023 8:54:00 PM
You are an excellent storyteller. Love how you’ve written this and how you’ve rhymed too throughout. Deeply moving and touching poem. I felt so much reading it. Goodluck in the contest. Always a pleasure reading you
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Date: 11/28/2023 11:22:00 PM
Thank you Empress you are so kind. You made me smile. I share your love of Poe. LOL That's why I made the wolf's approach a pitter pat. as in Poe's Raven's Ratta tat on the window..
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Date: 11/28/2023 9:22:00 PM
Ah Poe is one of my fave poets and you did it very well. One of the best iv read for the contest. I tried too but i dont think im any good haha. I loved yours. Plaths lifestory is sad. But i prefer actually poes style of writing more maybe cus ive always been a fan . Love the poem queen
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Date: 11/28/2023 9:14:00 PM
Thank you Empress, it is loosely based on Edgar Allen Poe's The Raven. I tried to capture a meaning while in no way copying him but at the same time emanate Sylvia Plath's style as the contest requested. Not an easy task, but I did put my heart and soul into it, trying to keep it as pure poetry as possible. I really do appreciate your lovely comment.

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