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I'm Sorry My Love-An Almost Sonnet of My Deepest Admiration

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I wrote this in response to Timothy Hicks' wonderfully satirical and witty poem "The Eye is Such a Braggart."


Lying in the meadow on a long afternoon
I press soft against you and start to spoon,
but the lump at the base of your spine has now grown
(vestigial tail , I guess) presses hard against my places unknown,
so rolling you over and with gentle caress,
your yellow scaled elbow, I adore, I confess,
I trace the large bump on the end of your nose.
I just love the coarse hairs and, how subtly it glows.
You sniffle so sweetly, as never ending it runs,
as of lipstick, thick mucous coats your lips, and you have need for none.
So I lie next to you, of your beauty I want more,
admiring your features, almost all I adore                ...only one I abhor.

So, though shallow I feel, it saddens me greatly to know I must leave you
for the one thing I hate, I'm sorry my dear but your eyes are      just      too      blue!


03/22/16

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Date: 8/24/2016 11:31:00 AM
What a silly one you chose to read Lynn. Please keep in mind this was not meant to correctly follow form. I wish I could think of some witty response to your lovely comment, alas, it is not within me this morning.
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Date: 4/28/2016 11:21:00 AM
OH Dear...I though this would be passion pleasure! Good chuckle, though. Thanks for your recent visit to my work and your encouraging words.
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Date: 4/28/2016 2:07:00 PM
"Lost In You" http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/lost_in_you_768184 if you are interested.
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Date: 4/28/2016 2:05:00 PM
A little satire Eileen, perhaps "Lost In You" would better suit your tastes, thanks for the visit.
Date: 4/2/2016 9:00:00 PM
Nicely penned James, thanks for the chuckles :-)
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Date: 4/3/2016 12:07:00 AM
Thanks Lenny, appreciate the visit.
Date: 3/27/2016 6:10:00 PM
haha. GREAT parody. I thought you were making love to a troll or a hobbit or something.
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Date: 3/27/2016 7:10:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed it, I was in a silly mood. Happy Easter to you Andrea.
Date: 3/24/2016 12:33:00 AM
This is splendid, James. As witty and satirical as can be. Well done. T.J
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Date: 3/24/2016 10:31:00 AM
LOL, glad you enjoyed it. I hope you've read Timothy's as well.
Date: 3/23/2016 1:26:00 AM
I don't care that it doesn't follow form (it adds to the humor) ... I'm still imagining a man genuinely complaining about "too blue eyes" ... I think that with you and I, maybe things will start changing in the poetry world. I can see it now ... Ode to My Lady's Cleft Chin ... Terzanelle For a Toenail. She Nose How to Draw Me Close. Longing For That Sweet Elbow.
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Date: 3/23/2016 5:58:00 AM
Thanks for the inspiration Timothy. Glad you enjoyed it. How about "No one can touch me like you, and your four thumbs."
Date: 3/23/2016 1:17:00 AM
OH my gosh! This was great, James. So happy to pass some zany inspiration your way. You had me laughing all the way through as you described the "all too realistic" Lady Love, of yours. "I just love the coarse hairs and, how subtly it glows. You sniffle so sweetly, as never ending it runs." Needless to say, I planted the seed, and you took to it extremes! An easy Fave (still laughing here) ...
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