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I fell~ asleep
It was easy to fall*
I slipped~ into a dream
When I couldn't get a grip*
.           ***         .

I hate WHAT you did to me..
Inside are things you can't see..
Do you want me to PRETEND a smile?
I think I'll stay in my slumber of denial..

Like a pack of candy,
you where excited to open me up!
After a while you kept your mouth shut.
This Love Label came with NO WARNING sign.
WHAT happen to cloud nine?

Secretly you ended this.
With one broken KISS!
In the back of my mind when I close my eyes..
My thoughts are still searching for that one surprise..
A piece of puzzle in the making, 
The piece that will clear up my skies...

I can't live my life in peace...
Knowing my heart was filled up with your disease...
Like a dreamer you made me fall into deep...
Now I'm lost in a realm of sleep..
This dream has not expired,
I'm overdue when it comes to counting sheep..

This is only a bad dream?
Wake me up! 
Hear me scream!
WHAT! I'm not screaming?
Come on, I got to be dreaming! 
Do you mean this isn't a dream?

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Date: 11/24/2017 1:56:00 AM
Lovley dream "Secretly you ended this. With one broken KISS! In the back of my mind when I close my eyes.. My thoughts are still searching for that one surprise.." i like your way of turning your mind into words...........
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Date: 8/16/2016 8:11:00 PM
Wow. Skat. You know about psychopathy. Thanks girl for supporting me. LOL
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Date: 7/9/2016 8:33:00 AM
I really like this one SKAT A. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 4/8/2016 12:48:00 AM
I'm never going to sleep...My third most favorite thing to do....Great write as always.8.2
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Date: 1/13/2016 6:08:00 PM
Thanks for contacting me SKAT. The Illusive Dream that faded so fast, don't dream of the future, nor either the past. Nice write!
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Date: 12/25/2015 4:25:00 AM
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Date: 11/30/2015 1:06:00 AM
its a dream SKAT A :)
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Date: 11/14/2015 12:05:00 PM
You have the most absolutely wonderful flow in all your poems. It reads like a song and how you capitalized a few words makes it more deep. Love this! 7 -LU Great job
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Date: 11/3/2015 5:57:00 PM
I dislike dreams like that SKAT! Love this write now! 7+
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Date: 8/14/2015 7:32:00 PM
Skat, wow, what an amazing write, so full of emotion and pain dripped from every word A7 and thanks for visiting my poem, and the rains came
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Date: 4/19/2015 9:50:00 AM
Very nice poem of anger and love in love. Passionate words are beautifully colored in this exquisite poem. 7++ surely. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 2/16/2015 2:19:00 AM
Wow, strong poem, and I vcould feel the anger and pain in your words! Amazing write skat!! :)
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Date: 7/14/2014 12:12:00 PM
I know this pain and feel it clearly in your verse. I love it! Thank you!
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Date: 5/15/2014 3:06:00 PM
Great write Skat...putting the pieces of the puzzle together in your dream
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Date: 2/4/2014 3:42:00 PM
Bless your heart. Love Jayne
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Date: 1/27/2014 9:20:00 AM
A lot of hurt and anguish expressed in this piece, The dream of true love has proved illusive for many of us . I've come close a couple of times but it wasn't to be , I allowed work to rule my life for far too long but I'm still dreaming . Somewhere out there in this big wide world is the person I'm meant to be with . So however illusive Skat , Continue to dream.
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Date: 1/7/2014 8:38:00 PM
The alternate reality that we live in, when outside of that once favored position. It's a dream like state, but more of a nightmare, but all nightmares eventually end. We sometimes feel a little fear about the reoccurring ones, but what time doesn't erase, I can't finish because I am now inspired to wirte something lol. Oh what the heck, the things that time doesn't erase, and that love can't replace, really aren't good for us anyway. They don't allow us to grow, they imprison us, I think?
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Date: 11/20/2013 6:21:00 PM
Spooky and sad, nicely done, and thank you for your comment on win.
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:51:00 AM
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Date: 10/23/2013 12:41:00 PM
HEY HI Skat i am Mahima from India thanks a lot for commenting for my poem and even your poem is just wow i loved it and i am studying in 11
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Date: 10/12/2013 10:42:00 AM
Wow I can feel your emotion in this Skat.I really like it
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Date: 9/24/2013 7:02:00 PM
Thank you for welcoming me to Poetrysoup. Illusive dream was real to me because I've had a similiar dream. Catchy poem; good work
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Date: 8/28/2013 1:22:00 PM
I absolutely love this poem, SKAT! I can relate to this completely..... Sometimes our worst nightmares happen to us when we are awake....Thank you for all of your encouraging comments on my work. I really appreciate it!
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Date: 7/21/2013 10:30:00 PM
I liked it! Truthfully, I think dreams are a way to escape reality, but I suppose they can imprison a person as well. I liked this one ^_^ dreams can become lovely too or nightmares.
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Date: 7/10/2013 12:48:00 PM
An excellent write. I loved every line of it. Thank you Skat for the nice review of my writing as well. Roger Dale Hadden.
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