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If This Was the Last

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My Mum & Dad's 67th Wedding Anniversary

If this was the last ray of sun, or gossamer breeze. The final child’s laughter, or rustle of the trees, No more floating bubbles, or deeds to right a wrong, If every wren stopped singing its own sweet song. If they ceased to shine, every brightly coloured balloon, No more excitement for a surprise coming soon, If it’s the last daisy you bring, or the last Valantine’s rose. The last time you say I love you, or last poem you compose. The wonder of a wild animal running free, ceased to be, No power in the waves crashing in the sea, No more bright sunsets to turn the sky black. When our time has come, we won’t look back. Together we will stand in line at the pearly gate. And there for the last time together we will wait.

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Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 9/21/2023 8:40:00 PM

Speaks Volumes, 84 and 90 that's a blessing having them in your life. Hope you inherited their genes. Beautiful honor for sure. I was 85 this month, son now 50 and husband 93, and very spry. Keep writing beautiful thoughts, this keeps me young at heart ... which is important, I hope you agree. Congrats!

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/22/2023 12:06:00 AM

Such a beautiful comment Barbara. My dad was blind for the last 15 years of his life, with a nimble brain that I found hard to keep up with. Mum was petite and constantly active, she loved to not only bent to touch her toes, but place her palms flat on the floor in front of her,( Also impossible for me to keep up with). I have wonderful memories. best wishes to you lovely lady. Thank you.

Robert Gorelick

Date: 9/19/2023 12:44:00 PM

Dear SV, I was deeply moved by the photograph of your parents' sixty-seventh anniversary and how very much in love they were. You must miss them terribly. It's so true that the greater the love, the greater the grief, all my best, Robert.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/19/2023 4:32:00 PM

Being the late age they were when I was born Robert I was lucky to have them til I was forty, and that was 29 years ago. After she passed, he just spent all his time waiting til they could be together again. 9 months later they were together again. Cheers Robert. Thank you for your lovely comment.

Terry Miller

Date: 9/19/2023 7:57:00 AM

Congratulations SV and so well deserved too!

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/19/2023 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Terry. The 10th place in the competition isn't nearly as important to me and yours and the other's comments letting me know you liked it. Very much appreciated.

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/18/2023 8:39:00 PM

SV, the poetry site enables us to use it as a journal, I too have posted my mother's picture and myself and my partner as well as. I write for my family and friends first, and if anyone likes my poems here they'll come if not, so be it. I have come to you, you have your mother's eyes. Congratulations on things we certainly would miss!

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/18/2023 9:14:00 PM

Anaya, you just wrote down my thoughts. Exactly the way I feel. I write for myself. The contests give me ideas of what to write. Without them, I have a thousand thoughts spinning in my brain suggesting topics. Not in a for a win, in it for the people who care to read and actually like what I wrote. When looking for a picture for this poem, I decided there was none that depicted true love to me, as that of my mum and dad at 84 and 90 respectively. Mum died the next year and dad died of a broken heart 9 months after her. Never known a couple to be so in love. I was pleased with my placing in the contest. Its filled a gap. I have now received every placement from one to 10 and a couple of HR's..lol Thank for your lovely comment. I could not agree more.

Silent One

Date: 9/18/2023 11:46:00 AM

It was the rhymes and flow to this poem that really captured my attention.. I can see it is an emotive one for you, so beautifully expressed in your own unique style.. So many great lines, especially no power in the waves crashing sea.. no more bright sunsets to turn the sky black.. we would all miss them. Thank you for writing for my contest and congratulations on your placement.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/18/2023 3:33:00 PM

Thank you. It was a new experience for me. First time I have ever received a 10th place in a contest. Best wishes from SV.

Jay Narain

Date: 9/15/2023 11:17:00 AM

Nice poem showing the feelings from young to maturity age.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/15/2023 4:16:00 PM

Thank you Jay, that was my intention, (That picture really is my mum and dad on their 67th Anniversary. They died within months of each other. When Mum passed my Dad died of a broken heart a few months later. ) They were my inspiration for this poem. Cheers SV

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/15/2023 9:38:00 AM

Dear, SV, Your poem delves far beyond mere triumph over adversity, instead painting a vivid portrait of both the tranquility and marvels of love. It skillfully portrays the profound agony experienced during periods of separation. Your words are infused with an abundance of emotion and imagery, rendering the experience of love palpable and deeply immersive.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 9/15/2023 9:42:00 AM

Thank you dear friend, your words are like magic that encourage and delight. Precious in every way. Thank you.