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This is a lyrical adaptation of Becca Teagan's wonderful poem of the same name posted a few years ago. I finally got around to doing this one.It is one of my all time  fave poems. Thank you Becca for writing such a powerfully passionate write, I'm in awe evey time I read it!!. I know this may not have all the flair and the imagery of her poem, but  that's the way it goes with  the restrictions of songwriting..there is always some  poetic sacrifice that has to be made to make the syllable count work. It's like taking a beautiful free verse and trying to harness it with an imposed rhyme scheme and syllable count. 

I hope you like it and please check out her poem.

Like I mentioned to you more than a year ago Becca you will get writing credit as well if this song ever get's published and recorded!!! Here's to hoping!!  Thanks again!! JD

If only I could love you (Lyrical adaptation of Becca Teagan's poem) If only I could love you... I'd love you with the strength of a million dreams My raging rains of passion would flood your streams If only I could love you... My storms would blow the leaves from off your tree expose you so you'd share your soul with me If only I could love you... If only I could love you... Chorus If only I could love you... I'd love you like I did in a million dreams our love would keep bursting at the seams I'd devour you like strawberries and cream If only I could love you... If only I could love you... I'd pursue you like the dawn chases the night I'd reach into your shadows... I'd make you shake and shudder with sheer delight!! If only I could love you... If only I could love you... If only I could love you... My desires would fulfill all of your needs I'll keep you begging... baby, baby, please If only I could love you... I would share with you rainbows and vivid skies... we'd lose ourselves in whispers and in sighs If only I could love you... Chorus If only I could love you... I'd love you like I did in a million dreams our love would keep bursting at the seams I'd devour you like strawberries and cream If only I could love you... I'd pursue you like the dawn chases the night I'd reach into your shadows... I'd make you shake and shudder, with sheer delight!! If only I could love you... If only I could love you... If only I could love you... If only I could love you... If only I could love you... If only I could love you... fade to zero John Derek Hamilton/ Becca Teagan June 20, 2020

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Date: 7/3/2020 6:21:00 AM
You are on a roll. Two songs in a row! What! I am gobsmacked and astounded at your versatility!
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John Hamilton
Date: 7/4/2020 3:24:00 PM
Thanks Caren I hope your ok after being gobsmacked, that must hurt lol!! I do thank you for your kind words
Date: 7/2/2020 12:20:00 PM
Wow John I see I have been missing out on quite a lot! You truly are an amazing writer!;)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 7/6/2020 11:59:00 AM
No problem John You are gifted writer!;)
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John Hamilton
Date: 7/4/2020 3:23:00 PM
Thanks so much Brenda, I missed this somehow, sorry for the delay, I truly thank you for your generous and kind words!
Date: 7/1/2020 10:31:00 PM
Thanks for my win in your song contest, John. I hope to see more of your beautiful song lyrics soon!
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John Hamilton
Date: 7/2/2020 9:07:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, I have quite a few that are unfinished, hopefully soon, working on the music so it's a long process!
Date: 6/30/2020 8:09:00 AM
Very nice John! Congratulations to both of you with the inspiration to bring this here :)
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/30/2020 12:33:00 PM
Thanks Heidi, I'm pleased you like it!
Date: 6/26/2020 10:50:00 PM
Woww such a fantastic sensational poem, so charmingly said and appealing. The refrain is cool romantic and the words can make us smile lost in poetic delight. Kudos. Plz pleez do read my newest prose and read the related data and info too further down below it in comment section or also in the short story section here where I have uploaded it.
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/27/2020 8:47:00 AM
Thanks S.Z I'm so glad you enjoyed this will take a look at yours!
Date: 6/26/2020 10:49:00 PM
this is beautiful John... loved the refrain especially...it makes one see how deep the love is... great write... hugs
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/27/2020 8:46:00 AM
Thanks Sandy, nice to see you today!
Date: 6/22/2020 6:02:00 AM
Such a beautiful lyric, John:) I am off to read Becca's version..
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/22/2020 12:09:00 PM
Thanks Jo I'm glad you liked it, Becca's poem is amazing!
Date: 6/21/2020 9:25:00 AM
Beautiful lyrics from the original poem John, best wishes
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/21/2020 10:31:00 AM
Thanks Joseph glad you came by today!
Date: 6/21/2020 7:38:00 AM
Wonderful writing, my friend. God bless you with many more beautiful words. Love to you, Gina
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/21/2020 7:42:00 AM
Thanks Gina so nice of you to pass by today!
Date: 6/20/2020 6:50:00 PM
ooh la la la la la. That is SO romantic! Becca is a real darling and poetic talent. You did well to emulate her. Oh that we could enjoy our poetry put to music! Soupmail for you.
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/20/2020 8:34:00 PM
Hi Andrea thanks you for your kind words, glad you liked it!
Date: 6/20/2020 5:36:00 PM
I hear the longing of love in your lyrics John--but I also hear the hesitation in "If only I could love you". That is how it goes in the world of romance sometimes. Kudos to you and Becca for this stunning write.
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John Hamilton
Date: 6/20/2020 8:33:00 PM
Thanks Vijay it is a very one sided love, a love non requited is a painful thing, thanks for your kind visit!