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For " i wish i had " contest sponsored by unseeking seeker

Once upon a silent summer eve, as fine vermilion lines, between bleeding moonlight, swiftly sailed across my darkness and I, sakura springs sang dulcet melodies of a deathless devotion, incised within smoky stones of faith, ticking away airbrushed twilight, illuminating fireflies, amidst all the flesh melting wrongs~ I’ve forged upon your selfless sight, like Lilith and her veiled infernal horizon. Now I swirl with my wandering muse, which intricately sculptures our velvety silhouettes, to slow burn the edges of a paper-cut sky, that unraveled a book of eclipsed dreams and fallen cosmos, cradling nightmares to roam in lucid loops of long nostalgic nights. But even the hailing hellfires couldn’t rise above riveting ripples of rusted awareness, reflecting ambience of your evergreen essence, unveiling an oasis of waterfalls to stream from unbreathable lashes~ dusted with glitter and retro-red regrets, of letting time and ego be the sore winner that chained our secluded souls from reuniting. What if the universe would lend their ears again? Would I recall how when I met you, stars cathartically stretched their silver threads and allowed my quill to release and thaw frozen thorns of ice? I wish I had given love a chance, allowed my heart to be the string to your crumbling parachute, discarding darkness that dwells above as clouds of chaos, to let humility and compassion be the faultless compass that guides me to a realm of blissful rainbows, where songs of serenity soar amidst sorrowful sagas. I am still here, yet no longer tangled in the gossamer cobweb of lies and lethal attraction, as your seamless verses, with alliterative rhythm, have annihilated every copper clouded storm within iron-fisted ghosts of my conscience. So if tomorrow, rivers of rhyme-less runes, surrounding empty, aching islands between us would drown out of tune, remember how I’ve seen fields of fluorescent feathered ferns, from your lunar-glazed gaze; remember, in your acrylic embrace, I have felt poetic layers of a homely haven, where archives of a diamond dawn are depicted in dahlia frames, remember, it wasn’t me but my demons that tore us apart. The ego within forced me to resist But now I wish I had effused a love mist With aplomb and flair, just kind of left it there For self-aware souls passing by, who choose to pair

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Date: 3/29/2024 10:53:00 AM
IE, there is a lot of swirling emotion in this love and a lot of mixed emotion....I ask myself if this felt as though it should have been a love for eternity. It's all rather sad when we have these regrets, and it can be quite painful. How do we recover from such a thing? My own thinking is to focus on being a good soul and lover in the present. This means taking on a job...this sounds strange even to me, but I think it is true. What choice do we have?
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Date: 3/29/2024 3:44:00 AM
It was the demons that tore you guys apart. I really love this, indeed it was. Demons you could hardly beat. "Now I swirl with my wandering muse, which intricately sculptures." So many wishes, we wished were said or done. I like that you're not longer caught in the web of lies. Sometimes for us to grow, we need to live in the cages of wishes. "Wish I had" because it's okay not to have done it. "I wish I had given love a chance, allowed my heart to be the string to your crumbling parachute." Ink.
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Date: 3/28/2024 11:34:00 PM
Wow, I'm not sure what to say, but stunning. I doubt anyone could write a better exceptional beautiful piece of art. I'm blown away. O Perfection. A joy to read.,Pete.
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Date: 3/28/2024 6:42:00 PM
This was filled with such humanity and humbleness- it really touched my soul, made my eyes wet, beautiful lines and art, dear Ink...
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Date: 3/28/2024 12:13:00 PM
Your poem, dearest Ink, is truly exceptional and profound. Your use of artistic diction, such as mentioning bleeding moonlight and crumbling parachutes, evokes a wide range of emotions that deeply resonate. Exploration of themes like love, regret, and self-discovery is thought-provoking. I appreciate the way you delve into human relations and their impact. Your journey from darkness to self-awareness is evidence power of love. Thanks for your concern and kindness during my last absence. A fave
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Date: 3/28/2024 3:10:00 AM
fine vermilion lines, between bleeding moonlight,.. ooooo child .. ticking away airbrushed twilight, oo papi the imagery is gorgeous! our velvety silhouettes, to slow burn the edges of a paper-cut sky, hailing hellfires couldn’t rise above riveting ripples of rusted awareness, yaaas alliterations!!! my heart to be the string to your crumbling parachute, I want that kinda love … it wasn’t me but my demons that tore us apart... mmm so true.. our inner demons r truly the bitter end to our relationships
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Date: 3/27/2024 10:07:00 PM
An excellent entry for the contest, dear Empress. A FAV for my list. The poem was very engaging from the start and the beautiful imagery and alliterations pulled in into the drama of past possibilities and regret of paths not taken. I particularly liked. "to slow burn the edges of a paper-cut sky, that unraveled a book of eclipsed dreams and fallen cosmos, cradling nightmares to roam in lucid loops of long nostalgic nights." Con't
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Bill Baker
Date: 3/27/2024 10:08:00 PM
I also enjoyed the closing verse. A delightful read of love and intrigue. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us. Light and Love forever. Bill
Date: 3/27/2024 8:16:00 PM
Dear Empress, an amazing and profound exploration of love, regret, and self-discovery. I love your artistic words about bleeding moonlight to crumbling parachutes, which evokes a plethora of emotions that tugs at the heartstrings. I loved your introspection on missed chances and the longing for reconciliation is both raw and deeply moving. I feel the grapple with the complexities of human relationships and the choices that shape our lives. Dearest Empress the journey from darkness to self-awareness is palpable, showing the true power of love and the importance of embracing humility and compassion. Your poetic expression is not just a reflection but a heartfelt journey of self-discovery and growth. A Fav! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 3/27/2024 5:53:00 PM
How creative of you to use Unseeking's words at the very end...and those words didn't at all seem out of place. Truly creative in that regard. Your alliterative phrases again created mind-blowing images. I especially liked: Now I swirl with my wandering muse, which intricately sculptures our velvety silhouettes, to slow burn the edges of a paper-cut sky, Best wishes with the contest, dearest Ink. Sending you hugs & blessings, Sara
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Date: 3/27/2024 3:44:00 PM
A wonderful dialogue of love, regret, and longing, Ink. Splendid metaphors enhance your theme beautifully.--So if tomorrow, rivers of rhyme-less runes, surrounding empty, aching islands between us would drown out of tune, remember how I’ve seen fields of fluorescent feathered ferns, from your lunar-glazed gaze--awesome poetry, as always! Another FAVE!
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Date: 3/27/2024 3:32:00 PM
Wow it looks like you used Unseeking Seeker's prompt at the very end. So cool how you were able to incorporate his ideas there. You are pure dynamite with your flair for imaginative phrasings. To me this sounds like a lost love. Did I get that right? I have already forgotten my own interpretation of "I wish I had!"
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Date: 3/27/2024 2:52:00 PM
I think your muse has spoon fed you perfection lol, win win girl win win
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Date: 3/27/2024 1:41:00 PM
Your poem beautifully captures the intricate dance between love and regret, weaving together vivid imagery and emotive language to paint a picture of longing and introspection. The imagery of 'sakura springs' and 'fireflies amidst flesh melting wrongs' evokes a sense of ephemeral beauty amidst the turmoil of past mistakes. The exploration of missed opportunities and the yearning for reconciliation is evident,
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Silent One
Date: 3/27/2024 1:41:00 PM
culminating in a poignant reflection on the role of ego in love's unravelling. The final lines, with their plea for self-awareness and the embrace of love, leave a lingering sense of hope and redemption. Overall, a masterful piece that resonates deeply with the human experience
Date: 3/27/2024 12:52:00 PM
A reference to Lilith, the very first feminist, btw.;) "seen fields of fluorescent feathered ferns, from your lunar-glazed gaze; remember, in your acrylic embrace" a lover, a mentor, perhaps love strikes again between the two. So nice you have rhymed the ending. Beautiful entry for Unseeking Seekers contest, Empress! Love & peaceful dreams~Anaya
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 1:22:00 PM
Awwn sweet anaya, thank you for reading and for leaving your thoughts. The ending with rhymes is seekers line of enquiry. I felt like it will fit as an ending. I am always grateful for your kindness
Date: 3/27/2024 12:35:00 PM
Another masterpiece …. Just WOW. I wish I can write like you .
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 12:44:00 PM
Awwn dahlin you are my biggest supporter! Love you

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