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'I Was the Last One'

I was the last one to ever see you-
Say goodbye, or even I love you to. 
You were the last one I ever trusted,
eight years later my soul still rusted.
My eyes still red, your life combusted.

I was the last to see your awful pain-
Now only heartbroken memories remain.
You were the last one to believe in me, 
see things in me only a sister could see.
Now I’m still caged and you are free. 

         O, how could I forget that bad October?
         You never really were completely sober. 
         November came and the chill set in.
         Feeling the anguish hidden deep within.
         Dying was your life’s last greatest sin.

I was the last one to hear you laugh-
The sound too hard to paragraph. 
You were the last to see me through, 
for love is rare and so were you.
What on earth have you put me through…

I was the last one to write of your ways-
All these metaphors expressing your days.
You were the last to write a farewell letter.
Too many syllables to make me feel better.
I was the last to wear your grey sweater.

         O, how could I forget that terrible December?
         It’s too much anguish for me to remember. 
         The end was quick for you but not for me, 
         you were too blind for all your damn debris.
         I was the last one who could actually see…
                          how caged you were, now you are free. 



The Last... Poetry Contest
Silent One
November 27, 2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 12/2/2018 6:30:00 PM
Your poem is so sadly beautiful, filled with the emotions and passion of feeling an intense loss. Congratulations, Lu, on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/3/2018 5:57:00 AM
thank you sweet lady :)-luloo
Date: 12/2/2018 4:29:00 PM
So intense, so much passion. He may be free but we all are now captured by your great heart. This is notable work. Thank you for sharing. Thank you for living the pain again...for us, for empathy.
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:57:00 AM
many thanks dear Greg :)-luloo
Date: 12/1/2018 11:04:00 PM
A wonderful well written sad and deeply moving poem, Laura, congratulations on your 1st place win.
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:57:00 AM
many thanks sweet eve :)-luloo
Date: 12/1/2018 11:16:00 AM
- Many beautiful and deeply moving poems for this contest ... congratulations on your win, L.L. :) - hugs & happy weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:57:00 AM
many thanks Sunshine ;)-luloo
Date: 12/1/2018 10:49:00 AM
Very deep, sad poem of a personal final goodbye.. One that is a sad situation many others will also face.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:57:00 AM
thank you for my placement lovely man :)-luloo
Date: 11/28/2018 10:03:00 AM
Lu, so emotional and wonderfully written as usual, I feel your pain in each dripping word, your sister is free but now you are caged with your sorrow and grief, a winner and a FAV !
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:56:00 AM
thank you sweet Dear Heart..."-luloo