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Another sleepless night, so I decide to dress and wander down to the nearby beach. As I paddle in the ocean I’m soothed by the hypnotic rhythm of the tide and the sensation of gentle waves teasing my bare toes. I’m transfixed by silvery moonbeams dancing on the inky sea. magical moonbeams sea bathes in luna's spotlight cloudless sky enchants Moments Of Reflections - Haibun Poetry Contest Sponsored by Malabika Ray Choudhury 04/07/21

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/12/2021 11:09:00 AM

Charming and soulful, Jan. Words words paint an amazing story picture. One of the loveliest sights in all of nature is the allure of moonlight on an "inky" ocean. Congratulations on your win. Blessings and a hug! Prayers for a good nights sleep!

Hilo Poet

Date: 5/11/2021 6:02:00 PM

'Sounds like an Ann Margret screen test' ... anywho, well-done, Jan, to have articulated such a haibun and my compliments for your win my friend, Aloha!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/11/2021 4:45:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Love and hugs ~ Mala

Kathleen Austin

Date: 4/11/2021 2:33:00 PM

Beautiful prose! Loving the second line of the haiku part, too. The idea of the moon being the one doing the "bathing" rather than the sea is such a fascinating reversal.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:35:00 PM

thanks Kathleen i am delighted you commented on that part of the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 4/10/2021 5:56:00 AM

Wow! I really love this Jan! That picture and your creative touch puts me right there! Well done!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:34:00 PM

Thanks so much Mark I am so glad folk like this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 4/9/2021 11:19:00 AM

Plenty of time to sleep when we are dead Rather dip one's toes into the ocean and eulogies about moonlight

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:34:00 PM

Thanks so much Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/8/2021 5:29:00 PM

Hi Jan, You've penned a lovely “ haibun” for the contest. It is just breathtaking! Best wishes in the contest. Have a great evening:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:33:00 PM

Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Ken Rone

Date: 4/8/2021 3:07:00 PM

Thank you for inspiring me Jan...See "Beach Maiden"

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:33:00 PM

I am so thrilled I inspired you to write a limerick!!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/8/2021 12:08:00 PM

Not the moon I expected from your title, but well done! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:32:00 PM

ha ha ha you know me well BUT i can write the odd serious poem from time to time:-) hugs jan xx

Ken Rone

Date: 4/8/2021 11:26:00 AM

On those rare and precious nights when the moon causes one to actually squint, magnified be the sea's reflection...or proverbially "read the newspaper". The sounds of the beach at night are unlike its daytime noises.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:31:00 PM

You are so right in your observation Ken:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/8/2021 8:30:00 AM

You painted a beautiful image with your words Jan, a scene I love to see, its magical. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2021 4:31:00 PM

thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 4/8/2021 6:54:00 AM

Incredibly beautiful imagery you have created Jan! I'm ready to go!! Happy Thursday xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/8/2021 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Mike its always a pleasure to see your smiling face and lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/8/2021 12:00:00 AM

Such a great vision. In summer we enjoy the moon shining over the sea as we walk along the promenade.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/8/2021 8:21:00 AM

thanks Victor:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 4/7/2021 3:56:00 PM

Your lines have a very calming effect, Jan. It's lovely and serene.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2021 4:56:00 PM

Thanks so much Jenna:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/7/2021 3:00:00 PM

Lovely haibun, Jan ~

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2021 3:45:00 PM

Thanks Line, I hope you had a lovely birthday xx hugs Jan x

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/7/2021 12:58:00 PM

Hi Jan, Outstanding gestures and symbolism. I, too, adored the picture. The moon is incredible!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2021 1:02:00 PM

Thanks so much i hope its what the sponsor is looking for:-) hugs Jan xx

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/7/2021 12:44:00 PM

Beautiful expressions and wonderful imagery. I loved the illustration, too. That moon is unbelievable!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2021 1:02:00 PM

Thanks so much Milton:-) I adore seeing the moonbeams on the sea:-) hugs jan xx

J. Summers

Date: 4/7/2021 12:31:00 PM

A lovely, tranquil piece of writing. Few ocean sites surpass moonbeams dancing on the water. John

Jan Allison
Date: 4/7/2021 12:33:00 PM

Thanks so much John, we often go out at midnight and I love standing and watching the sea - but not paddling lol that's a deal of poetic licence:-) hugs Jan xx