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Just a little scribble playing around with assonance and alliteration this morning.

I once wrote a poem without metaphors, only words to console a lonely soul lost in melancholic moods in thoughts of those gone to soon without a note or goodbye. Pondering how to probe in prose who's sole purpose would be to compose an ordinary song to expose innocent emotions to show scope and protect, but not to provoke or choke forgotten crimson wounds, so I wove an ode without a raincoat, before moonlight wore a cloak covered in clouds composing a shroud. Alone in an abode of brown meadows, I spoke to the moon in monsoon soaked mellow seasons, but in treason its glow showed no devotion. Soothing sounds of raindrops stroked soft symphonic tones, but brought no hope, so one was prone to prostrate in sorrows only consoling smoke shadows portray through motions of stolen ghosts. Forever wondering how to become poetic. Is there a narrow yellow cobbled road to follow - or should I forget it? Once I wrote a poem with poor metaphors, so you would not notice how unspoken conversations could explode without control shown like cold charcoal gloom and fog vapours pouring showers of torment to trouble and torture strongest thorns of an old stone rose.

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Date: 12/27/2023 10:50:00 AM
I'll keep this subtly simple, S O...this is simply exquisite.
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Silent One
Date: 12/27/2023 11:21:00 AM
Thanks Jim.. It was more of a poetic exercise, but I am happy with the result.
Date: 12/26/2023 8:35:00 PM
When we think of those gone ahead without even a note of goodbye, our mind will fall into a sense of deep pain. Your poem is so poignant with some inerasable images. "Alone in an abode of brown meadows, I spoke to the moon in monsoon soaked mellow seasons, but in treason its glow showed no devotion.".... Sometimes even nature shows indifference to us. Much enjoyed your highly alliterative poem, but its tone tugs at my heart.
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Date: 12/26/2023 6:21:00 PM
A poem without metaphor may seem to have no soul, but it is actually a raw soul, in itself. Pure flowing waters. Pure blood of thorn.
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Date: 12/26/2023 5:52:00 PM
Follow the yellow brick road I say SO, the flying monkeys maybe broke, kelli
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Date: 12/26/2023 9:21:00 AM
an amazing and thought provoking read, Silent One. It was a treasure trove of poetic techniques, especially alliteration and imagery. I found this write clever and a delight to read. Have a splendid day, Sara
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Date: 12/26/2023 9:00:00 AM
So, Despite the ups and downs that we experience, this poem is a symphony of poetic techniques, and it vividly depicts the sincere feelings of love and life that we adore. Exceptional writing!
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Date: 12/26/2023 7:30:00 AM
Love: so I wove an ode without a raincoat, before moonlight wore a cloak covered in clouds composing a shroud. Alone in an abode of brown meadows, I spoke to the moon in monsoon soaked mellow seasons & the soothing sound of raindrops, consoling smoke shadows…such lovely imagery, Silent!
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Date: 12/26/2023 7:10:00 AM
Emotive this is Silent One. True depths that purpose the heart its beat and of souls to be reasoned. My ticker gave me a reasonable right hook--I think it said, "Dummy, why can't you write like this!" Aloha my friend, William
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Date: 12/26/2023 5:19:00 AM
A symphony of poetic devices, SO--eloquently presenting heartfelt emotions of love, and life--cherishing-- despite the ebb and flow we encounter. Splendid write!
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Date: 12/26/2023 5:02:00 AM
What an amazing write with alliteration and assonance, S1... and you call this a scribble? The last stanza is just amazing... Very nice choice of words... If this is for a contest, best wishes. God bless... ~ Ani
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Date: 12/26/2023 4:22:00 AM
Always blessed to read your poetry. It sings, plays and dances - ventures to destroy the weariness of the old and give each thought a fresh appeal. Love it, as is usual, when reading what you're created. God bless you always, love, Gina
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Date: 12/26/2023 4:00:00 AM
Silent One you really know how to turn a phrase. Your poems always provoke the reader to THINK about what they are reading. I like a poem that says something and yours always do. Nicely done. God Bless, JB
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Silent One
Date: 12/26/2023 4:06:00 AM
Thank you Judy, this was more a play on the vowel 'o' and alliterations.. I guess the meaning is how we write poetry when we are lonely and how we feel and how we want to hide behind words..
Date: 12/26/2023 3:59:00 AM
lol, your amazing, you make me wish I was more concrete and less water lol, I appreciate you Silent One, never leave this site, your like a star in the night, that never runs out of dark light, :)
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Silent One
Date: 12/26/2023 4:07:00 AM
Thank you Vienna... Not sure if I am concrete though lol..
Date: 12/26/2023 3:29:00 AM
Ahh silent one you are truly a poetic genius, not being biased really, i am in awe of your poetic prowess, i absolutely love the way you’ve also started the poem and the “o “ assonance is so very evident here. I would like to see a poem woven with poor metaphors by you, I doubt it, although ofcourse that line can have a deeper meaning and thats the beauty of your words that convey meanings that can be interpreted in different ways. The flow of this is seamless and i love the depth of this esp
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Silent One
Date: 12/26/2023 4:07:00 AM
Thank you, sometimes the quick scribbles are the most memorable.
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Date: 12/26/2023 3:33:00 AM
Especially “ wove an ode without a raincoat,before moonlight wore a cloak covered in clouds“ wow the alliterations and the imagery there blew me away!!! Loveee the depth of that! “ mellow seasons, but in treason its glow showed no devotion.“ oh my the cadence! So captivating and lyrical. I bet this will be perfect for one of your spoken word events, cus if its read loud Will sound so catchy and mellifluous. “ showers of torment to trouble and torture strongest thorns of an old stone rose.“ what a profound ending! I just love this! A fave for me! And should do well in brians contest if u ever enter. Maybe u should

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