Nette Onclaud Poet Dramatic Verse

I Had Loved You So, Once

Somehow I had loved you so,once…
When we relished vintage cherry wine until
The last pitch of a guitar man drifted along
harbour’s bay…and how our shared wishes
gushed around Trevi fountain, tossing coins,
rummaging  new souvenirs that became
endless conversational pieces in our inner loft.
Yes, I held other thoughts about us, keeping
My voice low as angry words snuffed the
Fragrance of candlelight:  but in a flash, time
Paused while you smiled to brush my hair amiably.

I loved you well, perhaps …maybe more,
Yet deep in my bones, leaving me alone kept
Rainy nights unbearable where we passed
Like abandoned ships at night… then what
About those evenings that won’t let me down?
This feeling of uncertainty, suspension, pain
Led to catharsis: because for all that was real,
The ghosts of old souvenirs ended love's glory.


Gren's Evergreens (Golden Oldies) # 1
Inspired by the song: ‘And I Love You So’
Contest of Teppo Gren    4/21/2016

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Moon Flower April 25, 2016 at 3:04 AM A nicely written one. Congrats on your placement, Nette. :)

Vladislav Raven April 22, 2016 at 8:57 AM Hi Nette, Congratulations on your win in the contest. An excellent, gentle write, that just flowed so softly. It sings its way into the heart. I do enjoy the gentle flow of your writes. They always touch the readers heart and they can bring peace to the reader. There is always beauty to be found within the poetry. This has to be a seven and into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX

Dr. Upma A. Sharma April 22, 2016 at 4:42 AM Wonderful imagery n win.. big congrats nette.

Charlie Smith April 21, 2016 at 1:33 PM Congratulations Nette, well done...

Bl Devnath April 21, 2016 at 9:53 AM Congratulation my lovely friend on your beautiful win. Loved always, bl

Demetrios Trifiatis April 21, 2016 at 8:25 AM Is there anyone of us that has not been through such an experience? If, yes, then must be from another planet! Very well conceived and so romantically constructed. Good luck dear nette! A seven!

Connie Marcum Wong April 21, 2016 at 4:16 AM Wow Nette, this is an impressive entry! Romantic yet sad combined. Lovely! #7 ; )

Cherl Dunn April 20, 2016 at 9:39 PM Dear Nette Such a passionate write, good luck in the contest, loved the piece, great job young lady, your very talented, you are going to take the world by storm one day, and thanks for the review on my cheshire kitty, cheri d.

Beautiful Scars April 20, 2016 at 8:21 PM Nette, just breathtaking..this will definitely be a top spot! I had such a hard time coming up with something good, and you did the job very well!!! Have a blessed night Nette :)-luloo

Frederic Parker April 20, 2016 at 5:57 PM To find reflection in the shadows of love and learn the lessons needed, is water to a women blooming in the fullness of her heart

Carly Lalion April 20, 2016 at 3:50 PM Impressive poem! This looks like a prequel or sequel to the song mentioned then , taking all that input and shaping it into a personal statement of love fading.

Anne-Lise Andresen April 20, 2016 at 2:15 PM - A wonderful poems, with touching content dear Nette - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Leon Datu April 20, 2016 at 1:45 PM Your response was entirely way out of the ordinary and I now see the other side of love with this brilliant poem even if it is sullen! You really impress by being a trailblazer!