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Written for " I go Insane" bY Glenn Hughes, contest sponsored by Robert James L

Somewhere between fallen flares of an untouchable phoenix~ and the nostalgic red of crimson horizons, I feel the amethyst embers of longing illuminate rambling roses that mourn within my hibiscus heart. O beloved Love, I long to be your tulip twilight adorned with unfading mauve haze, where green-gold scribbles of sunset erase interlaced flaws, to harbor blue-black mists twirling above tides of tainted topaz… and I will thrive amidst storms of insecurities, as the Swarovski Horse of Poseidon, crystallized in resilient silver, gleaming in glowing grace, beyond dews of darkness, shifting the aroma of pomegranate’s kiss. There, peonies of peace feast upon decadent delicacies in the barren garden ~ flourishing with jilted jasmines. I wonder, will these metaphors woven across my canvas in perfumed ink, speak the songs of my splintered spirit? For the moon no longer sings the melody of my soul, and I refuse to choreograph a diabolical dance for resentful ravens, collecting twigs from tortured trees, as the crescent smile wanes into neon nothingness. Yet while the witching hour beckons skeletal remnants to rise as celestial ashes, I go insane, lose my incandescent light that glistens in opalescent hues, leaving my quill to suffocate in solitude, unable to grasp the musical muse, to stitch sorrowful sonnets with seething synonyms. O stringed sapphires sailing above the meadow of melancholy, forgive this coffin curse ~ it holds carvings of a corpse bride, aching to be seen beyond the kohl shawl~ cloaking the frost-glazed silhouette, weeping woeful elegies while slumbering in the amorous arms of Orpheus, for in your absence, I cannot breathe, and sleep screams like a long-forgotten miracle, needing an oracle to alchemize a soothing potion… So lay me down in a bed of deep daffodils and thorns, watch me plead for merciful rain, to free obsidian tears of terror, while my psyche bleeds grammatical mistakes. I am forever trapped in tremors of agony, unable to reopen galactic gates of euphoric escape, so tonight I’ll let the torrents of torment embrace inked insanity…

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Date: 11/10/2024 3:48:00 AM
Oh dear poet friend, this is my fav. perfumed ink, coffin curse, corpse bride, Kohl shawl..... awesome word combinations. lovely write dear poet. congratulations on your win. Cheers !!!
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Date: 11/10/2024 12:56:00 AM
‘ I wonder, will these metaphors woven across my canvas in perfumed ink, speak the songs of my splintered spirit?’… yes your metaphors speak to all of us. Such an intriguing writing, it could only deserve the trophy. Congrats.
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/10/2024 2:38:00 AM
Thank you so much dear Robert; im honored to be placed first: i do appreciate your kindness and support always. Sending you light~
Date: 10/18/2024 7:44:00 AM
IE, your description is so very intense. It's almost too much to bear, but I love to read on. It's iconic in strength of emotion. You really stretch to reach the depths of description. I was amazed to see Swarovski Horse of Poseidon mentioned within the poem. Not knowing what is coming next just adds the the pleasure of reading. Smiles!!!
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Date: 10/17/2024 1:02:00 PM
This is heavy, but a beautiful kind of heavy... I know the feelings of insanity, and you've definitely barred it in your poem, to grasp it, but put it away, at the same time
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Date: 10/16/2024 10:01:00 AM
I can feel despair and angst in your words here.. yearning for "Love" and the melancholic reflection on unfulfilled desires give the poem a deeply emotional tone. Phrases like "amethyst embers of longing" and "hibiscus heart" reflect an intense and vivid longing for connection, which is palpable throughout the poem. This longing, though romantic, feels intertwined with pain and uncertainty. It has this feeling about you cant always have what you really want and you go insane.. looks like a trophy winner to me
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Date: 10/16/2024 2:03:00 PM
Thank you silent one for understanding and grasping little details of this poem, inspired by the song. I hope robert will like it too. Appreciate your selfless support
Date: 10/16/2024 5:31:00 AM
"Somewhere between fallen flares of an untouchable phoenix~ and the nostalgic red of crimson horizons," -- Love that! "For the moon no longer sings the melody of my soul, and I refuse to choreograph a diabolical dance for resentful ravens," -- Great imagery! "So lay me down in a bed of deep daffodils and thorns, watch me plead for merciful rain, to free obsidian tears of terror," -- A terror for all seasons. Great writing!
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Date: 10/16/2024 2:02:00 PM
Thank you dear joe always for being so supportive i am truly grateful that you take time always to read and point out also lines you like: grateful
Date: 10/15/2024 8:50:00 PM
"I am forever trapped in tremors of agony, unable to reopen galactic gates of euphoric escape,".... What utter helplessness and sense of emotional incarceration I feel in these lines while your mind longs for love..."O beloved Love, I long to be your tulip twilight". Thus I see you torn between an emotional turmoil and a sense of intense longing. Some of the alliterations you have used are so powerful and beautiful.... 'hibiscus heart, splintered spirit, peonies of peace' et al. When I hear your laments of a tortured heart with feelings of being lost and broken, I too feel with you. Dear Empress, you are unbeatable in the expression of whatever emotion you choose to highlight. Another poetic marvel.
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Date: 10/16/2024 2:01:00 PM
Thank you always for being so kind sweet valsa you a truly a poetic gem! I appreciate your kindness truly.
Date: 10/15/2024 7:07:00 PM
Great one, Ink Empress. I like these: For the moon no longer sings the melody of my soul, and I refuse to choreograph a diabolical dance for resentful ravens, so tonight I’ll let the torrents of torment embrace inked insanity…
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Date: 10/16/2024 1:17:00 PM
Thank you dear david. Appreciate your support always truly
Date: 10/15/2024 6:58:00 PM
I enjoy this poem because I am currently going insane. I hope it doesn't last long. I enjoyed how you described the jasmine as jilted. They tend to be shy, I've noticed.
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Date: 10/16/2024 1:09:00 PM
Awwn sweet hilda, i hope you are ok, and so sweet of you to visit me always! I appreciate you kindness truly. Thank you so much
Date: 10/15/2024 12:36:00 PM
Dearest Empress: WELCOME BACK! As I perused your work, what truly stands out is the profound longing, transformation and emotional turmoil (so palpable). Just powerful! It eloquently juxtaposes beauty and pain by employing natural imagery to convey intricate emotional states. This is no small feat; however, you achieve it. I also admire the recurring motifs of flowers (roses, tulips, peonies) and celestial bodies (the moon, stars) because they forge a cohesive aesthetic throughout the piece. My absolute favorite line is: “For the moon no longer sings the melody of my soul.” I believe the reason I enjoyed it so much is that this line encapsulates the poem's themes of disconnection and emotional discord in a single, striking image. Although it uses a clear, powerful metaphor that's easy to grasp, it remains emotionally resonant. It appears your break has gifted us a winner of a favorite poem! Autumn blessings, my dear Empress—Daniel.
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Date: 10/16/2024 12:59:00 PM
You always leave me speechless with your generous comments dear daniel! Thank you for this warm welcome back and fave and detailed and yes like tomsz said eloquent feedback. For someone that writes like i do its an honor to be understood. Thank you so much. Ill visit your page now to read more
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Date: 10/15/2024 4:55:00 PM
That's what I meant to say! You're so eloquent Daniel
Date: 10/15/2024 11:40:00 AM
One feels the emotions in this poem with its contrasting feelings. Even the moon fades in disillusion, as the writer wanders in the meadow of melancholy. Such powerful imagery and metaphors. Well written.
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Date: 10/16/2024 12:33:00 PM
Thank you so much always dear victor so good to hear from you
Date: 10/15/2024 9:35:00 AM
So many emotional twists and turns here inky. I like the line, "So lay me down in a bed of deep daffodils (light) and thorns (dark)." The pain and the pleasure. How many of us are truly sane? What does it even mean anymore? Sigh. Yet we go on. Love it! Another inky fave for me
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Date: 10/16/2024 12:29:00 PM
Youv really understood the poem tomsz, thank you very much for taking time to analayze and grasp lil details and comment, i appreciate your kind support truly. Also your fave is an honor thank you again
Date: 10/15/2024 7:51:00 AM
Ooo between fallen flares of an untouchable phoenix and the nostalgic red of crimson horizons,.. look at that flow papi… I long to be your tulip twilight adorned with unfading mauve haze, mmm the romance !!! Is gorgeous!! will these metaphors woven across my canvas in perfumed ink, speak the songs of my splintered spirit? Oooo that just melts my heart papi!!! U r my spirit !!! stitch sorrowful sonnets with seething synonyms. O stringed sapphires sailing above the meadow of melancholy, oooo the alliterations!!!!!! Love love looooove it!! So lay me down in a bed of deep daffodils and thorns, oh my… u lay me down!!! I shall the daffodils in my mouth all oiled up for ya papi!!! while my psyche bleeds grammatical mistakes. My goodness my brain does that alll the time!!! The bro is just born that way.. tonight I’ll let the torrents oftorment embrace inked insanity … I shall embrace it too aee … absolutely breathtaking piece… love the heaviness in this piece with mythical elements to it!!!
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Date: 10/16/2024 12:28:00 PM
Wow iv never seen such long comments from anyone thank you papi you the best! Lol some of what youv said here made me laugh!
Date: 10/15/2024 7:46:00 AM
You've been missing too long Ink Empress, I hope you are ok, I have no idea of Glenn Hughes music. I will have to listen having read you epic gripping descriptive poem. good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/16/2024 7:20:00 AM
Dear Jan, thank you for noticing and your kind comment. I am Grateful for your support
Date: 10/15/2024 7:37:00 AM
Just wow!
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Date: 10/15/2024 7:39:00 AM
Was waiting for your one word comment glad its two words dahlin haha

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