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I Dream

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the dream pulls me under erasing my mind as I leap from slumber unleaping as still, still... still screaming that I've forgotten - something... whilst silent I'm watched, weighed down unconsciously conscious of something... rest, breathe out and ~ in immobile, struggle to draw in breath still, still... still raspy sounds, hooves hit stone out of sight behind curtains knuckles touch surface... do I stir? paralysis terror do I want to open my eyes? to see what holds me in place... I'm aware not of the shadow but of the mass morning will come to push scenes from senses "I spy with my little eye something beginning with..."

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Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/23/2023 1:35:00 PM

Something beginning with E for excellent. Congrats D Great job !

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/23/2023 1:39:00 PM

Thanks SV! Ta very much :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/8/2023 3:12:00 PM

still, still... still raspy sounds

Vickey Rhymer

Date: 9/6/2023 12:39:00 PM

First of all excellente',secondly perfect description of sleep paralysis that realm between sleep and consciencesness where the guardrails should be in place to keep us from acting out our dreams while dancing in the netherworld of the subconscious.Some poor souls,the sleep walkers,those with night terrors and those who have sleep paralysis have those rails blurrily incomplete.Sleep apnea could cause the sense of breathlessness we are unaware of when completely under.So accurate in its horror .

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/6/2023 1:18:00 PM

Thank you Vickey, I have night terrors so don't experience the sleep paralysis as I actually leap out of bed defending myself from imminent death or head in hands thinking I've forgotten either who I am or something very important and essential. Thank you for your engaged comment as always x

David Kavanagh

Date: 9/6/2023 12:06:00 PM

The sinister powerless element in this one takes me in a different direction Dilly, it makes me imagine what it’s like for the unfortunate ones who have their drink spiked by predators, it certainly makes this reader think, excellently written, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 9/6/2023 12:16:00 PM

Re-reading it fits that narrative, although it wasn't my intention when I wrote it. Terrifying