I Could

I could write of stellar skies -- Really I could! Could write of lozenge moons~ of over-saturated beams, arriving and departing, concentrates of extra sweetened, totally addicting, poetically whipped creams: (unfold, eerie immaterial, cobwebby tightly creased seams, of long seeming ever taboo gleams -- ) I could write...really I could! compose glitter, like diamonds, a huge, full jar -- Aladdin Stories, fantastical adventures from romantic afar -- I could strum a string strung between, distant star and my near, dear, sparkly guitar -- rather savor your toffee lips chocolate licks like a Mar's Bar....

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/28/2025 5:02:00 PM

Aladdin Stories,? I believe yours are just as got, Joe . Fantasy-astical

Joe Dimino
Date: 3/2/2025 8:32:00 PM

Thank you, Vie. Sorry for the delay replying -- have been having computer issues.

Sally Eslinger

Date: 2/27/2025 7:30:00 PM

OMG, Joe! As time passes, i more strongly believe in the force of the collective unconscious! Just posted my poem BEFORE READING ANY PSp poems. So ‘ya think God posts a “prompfor Today” via telepaty mail? Hmmm Your poem here is very very cool. I love Toffee, too. Hugs, sally

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/28/2025 8:20:00 AM

Very exciting! I will have a look at your latest work. Certain I will be delighted. Thank you, Sally. Blessings.

B.J. Fitz

Date: 2/27/2025 3:55:00 PM

I really enjoy the word play and style, and the intermission stanza beginning with "unfold" is really dazzling. Cheers!

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/28/2025 8:21:00 AM

Thank you, B.J.. So pleased you took the time to delve more deeply into this write. Have a great day my friend!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/26/2025 7:26:00 AM

LOL, I surely love the way this one finished up..the finishing touch and savor! Hugs

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/26/2025 8:16:00 AM

Thank you, Kim; my main computer is down, so, using laptop to reply. Very old one. A bit out of my element here, but starting to get the hang of the keyboard again. And the tiny screen. When I get computer up and running again, redo operating system, no more auto-updates...they screw things up with bad files sometimes.

Maria Williams

Date: 2/26/2025 4:24:00 AM

Dear Joe,This is absolutely enchanting! Your imagery is so vivid, from the "lozenge moons" to the "glitter like diamonds," each line feels like it’s dipped in a dream-like sweetness. The playfulness with the idea of "writing" makes the poem feel like a journey of possibility, while the sensual shift at the end brings it all to a delightful, intimate close. The combination of cosmic beauty and personal longing creates a mesmerizing atmosphere. Truly captivating!

Joe Maverick
Date: 3/5/2025 2:55:00 PM

Geez Maria..Ya got it bad ya know ? Ten years in the old world.? And well Ud sort ya out though I'm here to tell.' He's a good writer though Joe.' Ya know the other one lol)))

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/26/2025 8:19:00 AM

Wow! Thank you so much. I will treasure this comment. Have a great writing day! Blessings.

Ink Empress

Date: 2/25/2025 3:50:00 AM

Dear joe, sure you can write of all that and more, how beautiful is this and how youv written “ lozenge moon “ made me smile! Thats unique!!! And not something iv read anywhere before. “ compose glitter, like diamonds, a huge, full jar -- Aladdin Stories, fantastical adventures from romantic afar -- ” love that! You are an amazing poet that can touch any theme and genre and deliver one that readera can connect with! Pleasure reading this. Sending you light always

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/25/2025 2:25:00 PM

Thank so much, IE, you made my day. Blessings!

Michael Tor

Date: 2/23/2025 8:44:00 AM

Love this Joe just getting back to posting been away. I wrote a poem Wishing Upon A Star. Maria Williams made a song video of my poem if you have any spare time please comment on the video on Marias poetry page. Thank you Joe looking forward to reading more of your lovely Poetry...

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/23/2025 12:19:00 PM

Hi Michael; thank you. Good luck with your video. Sounds exciting! I will go take a look, and leave a great comment I am sure.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/23/2025 8:20:00 AM

Steadily you approach the end of your poem in the most romantic way.

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/23/2025 12:21:00 PM

Thank you, Victor; seeing how you are such an outstanding, romantic poet yourself, I am very pleased by your positive comment. Have a great weekend my friend!

Valsa George

Date: 2/22/2025 8:38:00 PM

Wow.... more than anything, I like your "toffee lips"..... Really enjoyed your highly romantic ending of the poem.. ! Have a great Sunday with your dear one.

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/23/2025 12:24:00 PM

I think all poets are suckers for a good, Romantic poem. Happy this one seems to have succeeded. Blessings my friend.

Oliver Mckeithan

Date: 2/22/2025 6:04:00 PM

Good one Joe. Yes, skip the words and go right to the last two lines

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/23/2025 12:44:00 PM

Right to the meat and potatoes. Thank you, Oliver. Have a great day!

Susan Lawrence

Date: 2/22/2025 4:38:00 PM

Love this Joe! A definite classic and a fun ride to be on with you! Cheers to toffee lips and Mar's Bars! Susan :)

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/22/2025 4:39:00 PM

Thank you very much, Susan; have a great, fun weekend!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/22/2025 2:31:00 PM

I enjoyed your poem.

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/22/2025 4:41:00 PM

Hi Hilda; thank you. Wishing you a very pleasant weekend. Lots of Toffee and Mars bars. Blessings.

Joe Maverick

Date: 2/22/2025 10:59:00 AM

Toffe lips.?? The mind just flips.' Your Fantastical steller skies, have widened My eyes.' And lozenge moons ' t'would Make cupids to swoon.' Well done Indeed though.. Joe-Dimino.)

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/22/2025 1:17:00 PM

What the heck...I can't be too stuffy all the time. Just a little fun writing. Easy to relate to. Thank you, Joe.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/22/2025 10:50:00 AM

- Have a romantic weekend, no one says no to toffee lips and chocolate, Joe :) - hugs

Joe Dimino
Date: 2/22/2025 1:19:00 PM

Wishing you a banquette of toffee and chocolate this weekend:) Blessings my friend!