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Jan.25.2024
I can Move Mountains Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Anoucheka Gangabissoon
~ Placed First~

 


As the ‘tick-tock’ sound falls in my ears, and its incessant refrain drops like a thud, My memory unwinds to years fled when we grew up under our parental roof. Plodding miles through country lanes, with the weight of satchel breaking our backs, We walked together hand in hand to the village school near the parish church. Our days in school were so much fun, laurels and trophies, we had won. Friends we hoarded to our heart’s content who made our worlds bright and gay. Eager to teach you the arts I learnt, like an arduous master, gave you drills. Longed to see you fare on stage and sweep the floor with eloquence strong. Ever and anon, through smiles and giggles, through every twist and turn of life, We were together like a pair of twins, prodding each other to move ahead. You grew up blooming in age and skills with pleasing manners and a winning smile. At times with sibling envy, I watched you stealing every heart. You excelled me in looks and skills, surpassed me in brain and brawn, Stole the chunk of parental love, but never I grudged your edge on me. We dwelt on many a similar thought, cherished umpteen dreams and hopes, We stayed late on rainy nights, sharing hot and spicy tales, Of passionate friendships formed and forged, of infatuations felt and faded, Of scary moments encountered…of daring deeds performed…. Secrets ever eager to confide, longings always openly shared, Together we spun the lace of life, together we strove to reach our goals. It was (is) a bond too deep for words which time or space could never erase. We chased each other in eager search like hungry cats sniffing for milk. I could read even a passing thought that fleeted across your sentient face. Knew every ache and pain that darted through your feeble heart. Saw your struggle to ward off your woes that once intensely plagued your heart. I sensed how wearily you tried in vain to conceal your grief and wear a smile. It was an agony to see you grieve and tried my best to bring you cheer. With rising thrill, watched you glow and in time, you bloomed in joy! Igniting sparks of parting pain, you flew to an alien land. Each time your voice trails across, I feel you near – just one breath away. Of all our siblings, dear young sis, in my heart you hold the prime place. For you I'm ready to move mountains or even pluck the moon from the sky!

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Date: 3/2/2024 12:39:00 PM
So glad this was awarded 1st place Valsa, it is an amazing tribute to your dear sister, the time you spent together as children and your deep love. A compelling read so eloquently written. I truly loved this from start to finish. You are a very talented poet ( as I have always known). Congrats.. Wen
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Date: 1/27/2024 9:52:00 AM
Hi Valsa, what a gift to have your sister as your. best friend, to grow up learning and playing together, to share your secrets as you grew up, what a treasure yes of course you felt that you could and would move mountains for her. Good luck in the contest with this exceptional write, Hugs and kisses. Jennifer.
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Date: 1/26/2024 1:56:00 PM
It sounds like a very special relationship. This is so well articulated. Best of success in the contest.
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Date: 1/26/2024 5:50:00 AM
Ah dear Valsa. Leave the moon in its place. It is a source of love. Still I love your poem and the relationship between you. Great emotions.
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Date: 1/25/2024 8:20:00 PM
Really sweet stuff, Valsa... fyi: I can eat mountains; never moved them though. Smiles, Gershon
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Date: 1/25/2024 12:14:00 PM
Dear sweet valsa, this made me tear up really. Cus i feel the same way about my twin sister, for her i would move mountains, climb the highest too: and that picture is so cute: is that one of your own? The uniform reminds me of my childhood when i studied in trivandrum for a year. Ah flashbacks. And I absolutely loved how descriptive and sincere your heart is, and that can be felt too through your word weaving really. I had the same idea to write about my twin sister; but this is just BRILLIANT
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Date: 1/26/2024 4:37:00 AM
Glad to know that you have a twin sister whom you love so much. Sisters make so much of a difference to our lives. The picture is not one of ours. During our time, there was no such smart uniforms. In my childhood I never remember to have worn shoes except on my holy communion... white shoes and white dress. Great to know that you studied at Trivandrum for a year. Thanks for your wonderful feedback.
Date: 1/25/2024 12:01:00 PM
Lovely idea dear Valsaa.. Your poem is a poignant tribute to the enduring bond between siblings, characterized by shared memories, empathy, and unconditional love. Through its evocative imagery and heartfelt expressions, it captures the essence of familial relationships and the profound impact they have on shaping our lives.
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Date: 1/25/2024 9:48:00 AM
A lovely friendship when siblings draw close! Very nice. Love the pic too…captures the mood!
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Date: 1/25/2024 7:38:00 AM
Beautiful dedication to Lil sis, and the great joy of looking back in time reminiscing of how we have grown and learn as we go, some kids demand more attention: ). While some are content in humility: )
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Date: 1/25/2024 6:48:00 AM
Dear Valsa, the poem revolves around the deep bond and affection between you and your younger sister. The word choice in the poem is evocative and sentimental, reflecting the emotional depth toward your sister. You use imagery such as "plodding miles through country lanes" and "spun the lace of life" to create vivid pictures of their shared experiences. Using similes, metaphors, and personification adds richness to the language and enhances the poem's emotional impact. BOL in the contest
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Date: 1/24/2024 9:46:00 PM
I love this - and envy anyone with a childhood sibling relationship as strong as this one - a beautiful poem.
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