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written for the emotions contest sponsored by Andrea D.  This little rhyme took me hours and more to write! Always love trying these new forms.
 

I am Sadness

I’m like the rain, lamenting with despair. I ache to feel the stars in golden skies. My heart, a mirror cracked beyond repair, it echoes hymns of grief in somber sighs, like herbs of hurt, that moonlight will declare.
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George Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 8:30 AM
” like herbs of hurt." Great write, great rhyme Dearest Ink. This emotion has been described with the best metaphors and in the best ways possible. I see you.
Woods Avatar
August 30, 2024 at 12:26 PM
Ooo interesting use of "herbs"... very proactive Empress! Congratulations! Xo
Delaney Avatar
August 30, 2024 at 9:37 AM
You have captured the essence of sadness in just a few finely penned lines. You can feel it deeply through the flowing words. Beautifully done. SuZ
Dietrich Avatar
August 29, 2024 at 3:36 PM
So beautiful, Ink. I can't believe I placed this second as I think of it. It was one of the best for imagery
Woods Avatar
August 30, 2024 at 12:27 PM
<3
Empress Avatar
August 29, 2024 at 10:15 PM
Ah my sweet andrea in the midst of trying to sound like shakey (Shakespeare)I sound soulless lol i always appreciate whichever placement you give and your choice of first place winners are deserving of their placement! Thank you for always seeing beauty in my words! I appreciate you sincerely. Im happy with 2nd place. Sending you always light
One Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 9:39 AM
You really amaze me, I know you are an an academic and when you study something you get really good at it, but you have become a poetic academic now and mastered the iambic pentameter - my nemesis... my issue with it is that it can lack emotions, but your poem is full of emotion in only five lines.. This looks like a winner to me dear poetess.. Best of luck in the contest..
Buehler Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 3:21 PM
This is so lovely, Ink. If sadness could speak, it would have the voice of your beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 5:49 AM
Awn thats such a beautiful and poetic comment thank you so very much dear evelyn
May Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 10:41 AM
Very nicely done, I enjoyed the read, best wishes in the contest
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 5:51 AM
Thank you dear joseph always
Cornish Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 9:17 AM
Lovely Inky meter maid, yes, your extra effort is rewarded in this write even beyond the perfect iambic pentameter and so much emotion packed in 5 lines and...that sneaky little twist with the "herbs" which are usually used to cure pain now contribute to it ~ an interesting wreath of similes to start and end!
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 5:54 AM
Ah dear craigsz, im truly grateful for your help too, haha your tough love did encourage me to do better: its always good to learn and to know the final version is good enough means alot really. Thank you so much and tomsz you are so kind and encouraging always. Im so very grateful always to know talented poets like you both!
Sands Avatar
August 17, 2024 at 6:57 AM
Oh, this is beautifully written! Perfect lines written. I can see it, feel it and know that it has reached me ! :)
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 6:27 AM
Thank you so much dear heidi, for your kind feedback
George Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 10:35 PM
"My heart, a mirror cracked beyond repair, it echoes hymns of grief in somber sighs," Worth having taken so much of time in composing. It is sharp and terse and penetrates deep into the heart. Can sense 'the aching of your heart in feeling the stars in golden skies'. All the Best dear Empress. This goes into my FAVE.
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 6:27 AM
You are so kind sweet valsa, thank you so very much truly always for feeling and for leaving such thoughtful comments
DiMino Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 4:42 PM
"I ache to feel the stars in golden skies." -- beautiful, unique imagery.
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 6:39 AM
Thank you so much dear joe
Rose  Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 3:24 PM
I really like your short forms, I can see why it took so long, every words hits home, dear heart !
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 6:39 AM
Thank you so much sweet rose
Hind Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 10:45 AM
This is very beautiful. I am sorry for your sadness.... it's felt throughout your poem
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 6:48 AM
You are such a sweet soul thank you so very much always
Greenhough Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 10:05 AM
Oh what a beautiful quatrain. I feel the pain that it describes. Good luck with the contest.
Empress Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 7:00 AM
Thank you always dear hilda. Truly grateful
Onpaper Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 9:20 AM
like the rain, lamenting with despair…. Ooooo that line!!! I ache to feel the stars in golden skies.Mmm like walking through a magical strings of dreamy summer papi!! My heart, a mirror cracked beyond repair, Ooooo child !!! Same!!! Broken !!! Khalasssed!! moonlight will declare… cnt get enough of how ur elements move … it’s absolutely captivating…
Culverhouse Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 7:44 AM
well you nailed the rhyming, good readable flow too, good luck for the contest IE
Empress Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 8:04 AM
Hah i had to change rhymes few times. Its not easy for me. Thank you for your encouraging comment appreciate your support dear Clive
Rhymes Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 7:41 AM
Stars in golden skies . Wow . Love it .
Empress Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 8:04 AM
Awwn you are the best dahlin
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