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I Ran Alone

So many at the start Jostling Elbows stuck out Tempers a little frayed My mind a computer chip Reminds me I run alone Other might be near I run alone Many yards do I pound .....Mind on job ahead Forget all problems with life .....Concentrate  Am running in a  small  breakaway group All ran yesterday 's race ...... Advantages not yet in vogue ....Concentrate On and on  we run......Feet now on fire Heaving chest  sweating profusely  .....Concentrate. 2 more laps to go Get into position for the breakaway .....Gather your awareness ....Concentrate  Round the  bend  ..... the bell will ring for me Time to show them my worth.......Concentrate Gathering my strength .....I stretch my legs heart now pounding  Gathering momentum .....Concentrate Look up at the screen! .....Can see bodies hurtling  behind me  Blind panic keeps me going ......Concentrate  Can see the finshing line .... Legs  pound on The bodies conserved energy in use .....Concentrate Chest out, arms out behind .....I lunge for the tape Three bodies near enough together, fall down with exhaustion Wait for results ......All looking at screen Here they come, I won , personal  best ....Concentration no longer needed. I ran alone. Penned  12  September 2013 Too long for contest ......unable to reduce to 14 lines.

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Date: 9/21/2013 10:08:00 AM
Great poem, I am glad you didn't try to shrink it.
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/21/2013 12:53:00 PM
I couldnt lol, I did try ...Seren
Date: 9/13/2013 12:33:00 PM
Great work, Seren! I felt like I was running with you, except I wasn't out of breath and I didn't break a sweat. LOL Love, Kim
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/15/2013 7:54:00 PM
Hi Kim thank you ...Seren
Date: 9/13/2013 3:35:00 AM
I wouldn't reduce this poem to 14 lines either because I think it's perfect as it is, a very wonderful write my friend! I really like the repetition of the word 'Concentrate', very nicely done Seren! What a tremendous piece, quite the glorious poem, Great Work!!
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Seren Roberts
Date: 9/15/2013 7:53:00 PM
Thx Russell ....Seren

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