Humanity

Laws of Thermodynamics First Law Energy cannot be created or destroyed, only transformed or transferred (conservation of energy) Second Law Entropy, a measure of disorder, always increases in a closed system. I took it personally I know I shouldn't have there is no way it's about me ~ yet I felt it feel it now fear the lack of remedy for this truth I mentioned it to a friend she said: "it moves me in the same way" now I'm left circling round and round without exit my mind diminishing my place in the universe I was present, and absent, over lifetimes now powerlessly trapped in this one ineptitude of self painful "entropy increases over time" it's in black and white the black of my ashes carved into the white of my bones "the arrow of time, irreversible" until my body brittle throat clogged with debris and I just linger... right now I'm burning up ready to burn out without ability to comprehend a path out of this closed loop always at odds with itself in the cooled emptiness of this moment could I begin again? existence forever remaining in the equation I don't know where I went to rekindle, burn brightly whomever I cry to - please sustain me long enough to mark the ground be imprinted before, during and after this storm until the energy is no longer recognisably my own - I'll find the earth run my hand over the traces of me and spark once more

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Paul Bell

Date: 1/12/2025 1:34:00 PM

Entropy. That's me after a long run, or ten beers. Always find I need something to spark something to then get something to happen. Maybe a bit like reinvention.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/14/2025 5:36:00 AM

The perfect balance of marathons of running or beer drinking - sounds like you have it sussed

Ink Empress

Date: 1/9/2025 11:23:00 PM

The strength at the end there , of finding ones own spark amidst all is so very soul hitting and a powerful ending! Very well written poem i love the flow and depth and also youv arranged your words and how youv articulated your lines kept me going! I also absolutely love the line “ the black of my ashes carved into the white of my bones” What a line! That stood out for me really! I love the theories of physics youv written for but there was one that i resonated with in your contest~ lets see. I think this is one of those poems that truly is thought provoking and soul stirring! For all readers! I love the throat line too! How youv used that there. Pleasure reading you today! Sending you light always

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/9/2025 11:52:00 PM

Thank you Ink - it's like I sit quietly on my page and then a massive bouquet of flowers arrives when you leave a comment :) Thank you for your kind words, truly appreciated. I tend to feel a lot in my throat and it feels such an emotive word too. I do hope you write for the contest. The laws of thermodynamics certainly gave me all the feels :)

John Lawless

Date: 1/8/2025 11:56:00 AM

...for there is always that "forever" spark waiting to reignite, to embolden, to re-inflame our dream. Nicely written and thought provoking DD...your words and thoughts will travel with me today...

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/8/2025 3:13:00 PM

Thank you John, I worried I'd bit off more than I could chew veering into science, stealing bits, then racing out again. So your kind words are most appreciated. I'm sure you could do something great with the idea yourself :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/8/2025 11:47:00 AM

- A powerful description of feelings "the black of my ashes carved into the white of my bones" ... great poem, D.D. - hugs

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/8/2025 3:10:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise - that's my favourite line :) I hope you'll take a look at my contest on this theme x