JC Brul Poet Free verse

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3 December 2024 For Di11y Da11y 's  "How the echo filters reality " poetry contest.  

How the echo filters reality -POTW

charcoal grey horizon~
on the rusty cast iron bench 
my old self sits in pensive mood
beside the lake beneath December sky
the wayward wind as it teases my hair 
whispers melodies from long ago~
that breath echo in the air

the echo reverberates ~
weaving fragments into vivid voices
and symphonies of yesteryears 
my grandma's lullaby 
our high-school graduation song 
then tender laughters 
of children at play fill the air 
then comes the echo 
of my father's sobbing voice 
as he handed me to my groom
on that Saturday afternoon
whilst the organist played 
the  Wedding March by Mendelssohn 

as the echo fades 
and turns tenebrous twilight 
into enchanting ebony evening

I look around ~
the coffee shop behind me
inviting for another cup
whilst the coffee on my lap
gets colder and colder
yet not as cold as the winter chill
perching inside of me

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Panagiota Romios January 28, 2025 at 3:25 PM Late response. On outsranding work of poettin neauty. Soooo well done..pangie xoxo

Richard Lamoureux December 31, 2024 at 8:00 AM Wow! A pleasure to read your POTW. Congratulations! Thanks as well for your visit. JC Brul December 31, 2024 at 10:33 PM Thank you, Richard. Happy New Year. Stay blessed. ^___^ JCB

Christuraj Alex December 14, 2024 at 8:01 PM "weaving fragments into vivid voices and symphonies of yesteryears" - A beautiful and realistically nostalgic illustration of the echo and all its works. Congratulations! JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:52 PM Thank you, CA. ^__^

Paige Hind December 14, 2024 at 2:29 PM This is beautiful - a worthy POTD - love the end about winter's chill inside... <3 JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:53 PM Thank you, Paige. ^__^

thriveni c mysore December 13, 2024 at 9:52 PM Congratulations on POTW honor dear poet. Lovely write. Happy Christmas. Cheers!!! JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:53 PM Thank you, Thriveni. ^__^

David Crandall December 13, 2024 at 1:36 PM I like the way you describe the echos weaving fragments into poignant memories that stand in contrast to the cold evening. JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:51 PM Thank you David. ^___^

Andrea Dietrich December 12, 2024 at 10:48 PM Such an honor. PO T W. And so we'll deserved. Congratulations. JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:50 PM Thank you dear Andie.^__^

Sotto Poet December 12, 2024 at 6:42 PM An enthralling story of a woman who finds solace in the stillness of the lakeside and the whispers of existence. It is extremely deserving of POTW; the writing is so exquisite, and the visual representation is vivid. Congratulations, but a bit late! JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:50 PM Thank you, Sotto. ^__^

Deb M December 12, 2024 at 11:53 AM How very beautifully you write JCB….such a poignant piece that reaches out and touches the readers heart and soul….just lovely! Belated Congratulations on POTW! Debx JC Brul December 22, 2024 at 4:49 PM Thank you, Deb. ^__^

I Am Anaya December 12, 2024 at 9:07 AM Striking poetry and photo dear poetess, beautiful Korea. My favorite is "but the echo fades and turns tenebrous twilight into enchanting ebony evening" and the regal reference to the wedding march song, a real joy to read. Congratulations on your POTW Jcb Brul !! ~Anaya xo JC Brul December 14, 2024 at 5:34 AM Thank you, Anaya. I appreciate your warm feedback. Stay blessed. ^__^

Evelyn Judy Buehler December 11, 2024 at 2:03 PM This is a captivating tale of a wonan, listening to the echoes of the lake and of life. Beautifully written, with vivid imagery, it is so desrving of POTW. Heartfelt belated congratulations! JC Brul December 14, 2024 at 5:32 AM Thank you, dear Judy. I am delighted by your stopping by and leaving a warm greetings. ^___^

John Lawless December 11, 2024 at 8:49 AM ...yet not as cold as the winter chill piercing inside of me....I believe we all sit on that bench at times. More so as we add years and distance to the echoes filter. Masterfully written . JC Brul December 14, 2024 at 5:28 AM Thank you, John I appreciate your warm feedback. Warm wishes. ^__^

Hiya Sharma December 10, 2024 at 10:46 PM Oh, this is deeply poignant, nostalgic and heart-touching dear Jcb! I feel enchanted by the depth of your soul-stirring words and they speak so much to my cores ~ you've such a marvelous poetic technique of weaving emotions within such intricate phrases... this one took me on a journey of one's fading essence and the shadows of a storm raging within... "but the echo fades and turns tenebrous twilight into enchanting ebony evening" Ahhh, the imagery really stood out for me! So glad to be reading your angelic poetry today, heartiest congratulations on the POTW honour, it's so well-deserved!! Sending light & best wishes to you always ~ JC Brul December 14, 2024 at 5:27 AM Thank you, dear Hiya for your heartwarming feedback. Sending you light and wishing you all te best, too. ^___^

Nette Onclaud December 10, 2024 at 5:02 PM deeply sensitive, this work depicts the nostalgic parts of life...love it, J with roaring POTW greetings! JC Brul December 10, 2024 at 5:57 PM Thank you Nette. I could hear your roaring POTW greetings! Sending you warm wishes. ^__^

Darlene De Beaulieu December 10, 2024 at 10:55 AM Hello JCB Brul, You are brave to be near the water at this time of the year. being near the water is calming . i enjoyed to listen to the waves rushes to shore. It is so soothing. Merry Christmas. All the best for the New Year. /Darlene Hugs. Darlene De Beaulieu December 11, 2024 at 10:27 AM Hello JCB Brul, Thank you. Wishing you a Merry Christmas. All the best for the new year. Hugs. /Darlene/ JC Brul December 10, 2024 at 3:02 PM Hi sweet Darlene! You are right, being near the water is calming even at this time of the year. Have a prosperous New Year ahead. Thank you for dropping by. Sending you warm hugs. ^__^

Maria Williams December 10, 2024 at 3:18 AM Dear Jcb congratulations on your POTW,This is a beautifully evocative piece that paints a vivid picture of introspection and memory. Your use of imagery—charcoal gray horizons, the teasing wind, and melodies from the past, all go to make up a wonderful poem...Maria JC Brul December 10, 2024 at 3:48 AM Thank you Maria for your heartwarming feedback. Warm wishes.^__^

Constance La France December 10, 2024 at 2:50 AM Jcb, beautifully penned, and congratulations of receiving the POEM OF THE WEEK honor, Constance JC Brul December 10, 2024 at 3:47 AM Thank you, Dear Heart. Stay blessed. ^__^

Hilda Greenhough December 9, 2024 at 2:01 PM This poem of memory captures my heart. A wedding full of question , sometimes that is how it is. You deserve this week's POTW. JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 4:29 PM Thank you, Hilda. Happy to feel your appreciation more than words could say. Stay blessed.^__^

Kim Rodrigues December 9, 2024 at 9:55 AM Your poem paints a bittersweet picture. I can see it on canvas. A fave for me, JCB JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 4:26 PM Thank you Kim, i am delighted for the honour of "Fave". I am grateful! ^__^

Valsa George December 9, 2024 at 3:03 AM Back to your sweet poem once more dear Jez, to congratulate you on your well deserved POTW JC Brul December 10, 2024 at 6:06 AM Thank you, dear Valsa.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 9, 2024 at 1:28 AM - Congratulations on your p.o.t.w. ... the feelings are palpable, Jcb - hugs JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 4:27 PM Thank you Sunshine Smile. Sending you warm hugs. ^__^

Karen Jones December 9, 2024 at 12:52 AM Wow! I’m in awe of how you captured my thoughts and pulled me into your world! Congratulations on your engaging potw! JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 4:27 PM Thank you Karen. Your visit warms my day. ^__^

Ink Empress December 9, 2024 at 12:04 AM Back with congrats on receiving POTW! Congratulations dear poetic soul! Well deserved! JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 12:12 AM Thank you dear Inky. Sending you warm wishes to keep you well. You are loved! ^__^

Sam Kauffman December 8, 2024 at 9:56 PM Greetings JCB! This poem is one that reaches out with the heart of memory singing a pensive song of life. It is beautifully written with a deep emotional impact. Congratulations on your POTW. It is so well deserved, dear friend! Blessings of Advent light to you. So happy for you! JC Brul December 9, 2024 at 12:13 AM Thank you, dear Sam. Your words never fails to hit a cord in my heart. Sending you warm wishes. ^__^

Daniel Henry Rodgers December 8, 2024 at 5:17 PM Dear JCB, I love it when a poem touches my soul that is so full of the realities of life. Heartfelt and passion that is so deserving of POTW. Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel JC Brul December 8, 2024 at 7:59 PM Thank you Daniel. Glad to know your warm appreciation with your warm feedback. Appreciated. ^___^

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