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hope, hushed -

bound by doubt, I stood there amidst the Bluebells
          watching where she'd been but a moment sooner
               dusk to come, her breath hanging like the shadows
     she, thus departing

on my tongue, sweet words melted soft and tender
          all those daring, romantic thoughts I'd gathered
               passion dreams that longed for a voice, but silenced
     with my reluctance

"please don't leave!", I begged of her proud affections
          "you're the blushing flame that so warms my marrow!"
               still, those sounds had not found my lips for voicing ...
     heavy, that stillness

rife, those times that I'd worked hard to impress her
          waiting, long, the chance of this evening saunter
               there I stood, waist-deep in the meadow, darkened
     mourning my chances

as her shape was swallowed by shrouded gloaming
          rose the moon, perfecting its grand enchantments
               I, then, choked on words meant for love's endeavor
     now, sad ... unspoken.







Written April 22, 2019
Submitted on August 29, 2021
To the "Your Best Sapphic Stanza" Poetry Contest
William Kekaula, Judge & Sponsor

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 10/2/2021 6:58:00 AM
A lovely romantic verse , Greg , your work always shines. Congratulations on your win in William’s contest! Hugs Eve, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/26/2021 5:26:00 PM
Congrats again and you never disappoint.
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Date: 9/23/2021 3:41:00 PM
It is seeped in atmosphere, Greg. So lovely. BIG congrats
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Date: 9/21/2021 1:24:00 PM
Reminds me of this guy who proposed to his girl on the Great Wall of China. Not so romantic as he had so carefully planned but he finally asked the question. And she said Yes. Great write. Greg with excellent imagery and suspense.
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Date: 9/21/2021 11:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A Beautiful write and picture. Have a blessed day.............
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Date: 9/21/2021 10:55:00 AM
Greg, yours, IMHO, is truly a POTD contender. Magically tendered words that spellbind the mind searching for its arresting eyes. A Fave and my compliments my friend, Aloha!
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Date: 5/13/2019 4:26:00 AM
I am back to give you congratulations on your second placement Greg. ; ) xxoo
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Date: 5/12/2019 11:46:00 AM
Congrats, Greg, on this momentous poem moving up from "HM" to Trophy Status. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 5/12/2019 11:12:00 AM
My favorite among the ones I have read from the contest. Congrats.
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Date: 5/12/2019 9:19:00 AM
I was very close to giving this an even higher position. You have talent. Congrats and thanks for entering my contest.
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Date: 4/23/2019 2:03:00 PM
Shyness in youth is revealed in your romantic poem Greg. Wouldn't it be wonderful if we could go back in time with the confidence age affords. This is lovely! : ) xxoo
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Date: 4/22/2019 11:49:00 AM
This is spectacular writing G, I'm out of superlatives when I read you, this one leaves me breathless!!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/23/2019 5:52:00 AM
Thanks so much, John, I'm pleased that you like this one ... I struggled a bit on where to take it, so I just let it unfold. Blessings, my good friend - I hope your Easter was a happy one! :-)
Date: 4/22/2019 9:53:00 AM
This one should certainly be a winner, Greg.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/22/2019 10:00:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Sunlite - that's very sweet of you! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 4/22/2019 7:30:00 AM
Great job Greg, I can see this on the winners list. Very well structured and deep with emotions. Good luck.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/22/2019 9:59:00 AM
Many kind thanks, Phil, I greatly appreciate your wonderful comments ... so pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-)
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