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His Future's So Bright

He sports some eye shades plastered to his nose. In coolest clothes; with cell phone goes to town. Perpetual is his strategic pose. His glasses don’t come off when sun comes down. He scans a crowded room for someone hot on which to use some cheesy pick-up line and show the ladies what finesse he’s got. Too bad he’s never heard of “wine and dine!” And every measly buck spent on a dame he sees as a down payment on her "assets". Shallowness could be his middle name since his character has so few facets. He tells his bimbo prey his future’s bright, but even she just sighs and says, “Yeah, right.” 3/7/14

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Date: 6/12/2014 2:45:00 PM
A very shallow character so sure of himself. Thinks we all know someone like this. Nice one. love phyl
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Date: 3/17/2014 4:31:00 AM
Nice criticism...covert expression..I like it...Best wishes from India...
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Date: 3/16/2014 7:06:00 PM
Nice sonnet Andrea....I think he wants the same syllabl count throughout...check his blog (Cornish sonnet simplified)..best wishes
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Date: 3/16/2014 1:22:00 AM
Oh my dosn't public perception have a lot to answer for.! Or maybe it his natural to some..?..? I think I could find many angles here to comment on Andrea, I gather you are busy at the moment, hope all is well Joe..)
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Date: 3/14/2014 11:41:00 PM
Reminds me of the song from the late 60's called the "Rapper" Do you remember it? This fellow sounds very shallow. But we are not all like that! Keep up with the good poetry! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/14/2014 7:47:00 PM
Hiya Petal, I'll attest to Darren's statement on the use of the word plonker, you see them ten a penny in the pubs. Of course to romance a lady a man has to be as clever as they are, which is rare lol. Take care, Richard
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Date: 3/14/2014 7:24:00 AM
hah! seething ridicule.
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Date: 3/11/2014 3:01:00 PM
LOL, I guess we've all met guys like this - reminds me of Kris at work, LOL - great descriptions
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Date: 3/11/2014 2:21:00 PM
Poor guy, sad state. So true Andrea, we've all been there, but had the sense enough to leave. Always love your selection of words. Take care.
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Date: 3/11/2014 12:51:00 PM
Worded beautifully "Too bad he’s never heard of “wine and dine!” and about sun glasses..... Very interesting poem. Loved always, my lovely friend, bl
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Date: 3/11/2014 11:16:00 AM
Plenty of that kind around. Advice to the younger female generation, eh, Andrea. Love, daver
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Date: 3/11/2014 8:06:00 AM
Very entertaining, "He wears his sun glasses at night." it made me think of that old song. Also that old leisure suit Larry.
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Date: 3/10/2014 7:40:00 AM
I see guys like this in England too , We call them plonkers , lol Usually stand about with a bottle of beer in their hands thinking they are ten men , They arrive alone and tend to leave alone too . Brilliant poem Andrea.
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Date: 3/10/2014 2:51:00 AM
Great fun. Nice sonnet, good flow, fantastic rhyme. Well done.
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Date: 3/9/2014 6:12:00 PM
hi Andrea i like the personal touch in this one, if for a contest good luck, thank you for your comment I did think my poem had perfect rhyme and the meter was spot on, the swop was on the nail, but as I have already said I respect the judges decision in any contest....David
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Date: 3/9/2014 2:35:00 PM
- Such cool guy .... always with sunglasses, could he see the light in the future (?) - :))) well written, Andrea ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/9/2014 1:06:00 PM
ha! you've nailed him, for sure!
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Date: 3/9/2014 10:26:00 AM
You have captured quite a lot of my brethren, though some of us can't account for their actions, your last two lines cut rather deep
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Date: 3/9/2014 6:44:00 AM
Andrea I'll tell you what my granddaughter said to me about my poem "Jack" . It's not a big belly laugh but a nice quiet chuckle. Well done. Anne
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Date: 3/9/2014 6:01:00 AM
Definitely some of those out there..Great work that descrbes some of life's situation..Thanks for the visits to my page and for reading and honoring my poem in the your contest..Sara
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Date: 3/9/2014 5:37:00 AM
Ha Ha I love it! He is so shallow even the bimbo sees through him.
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Date: 3/9/2014 3:54:00 AM
Love to read your poems dear. This one's excellent and interesting, especially how you make it end! You write different from me, and that's what makes it so good, the world a wonderful mix. Yes, Andrea I haven't been here lately, ok yesterday I was :) ,, I'm not particularly a blog person,, and my erratic time schedule, poor time management as well is taking a toll on me, effecting me badly..But I'll come to read your poems , even if not right away. Always a friend.. love you, Hugs..
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Date: 3/9/2014 3:56:00 AM
...and yes dear,, Many Congrats on all your wins!!! ((it won't attach there, says too many characters :) ))
Date: 3/8/2014 10:56:00 PM
Yes Andrea, this write did make me chuckle, you had successfully written a spectacular, funny poem! I surely enjoyed reading this awesome poem this evening! What a wondrous piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 3/8/2014 9:07:00 PM
Let him keep searching,he shall find his,just a matter of time,he shall hear of '' wine and dine''.Great work Andrea.Thanks for your visit to my page.
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Date: 3/8/2014 8:40:00 PM
Please tell me, guys. Is this one funny or not? If it does not make you chuckle, I will have to write something else for the Tickle Me contest.
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