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the winter sky whirls white snow falls swirling ... birds hide _________________________ January 21, 2023 Poetry/haiku/hiku Copyright Protected, ID 01-1519-244-21 All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France Written for the contest, You Select sponsor, Brian Strand, Judged 01/21/2023 First Place

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Hilo Poet

Date: 2/16/2023 3:22:00 PM

The brevity instants understanding, Constance, a fullness conveyed and appreciated, also, thank you for your posted concerns on my blog, Aloha, William

Constance La France
Date: 2/17/2023 1:17:00 PM

Hilo, thank you so much for the compliment, hope things are better in Hawaii, blessings, Constance

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/23/2023 12:25:00 AM

Beautiful, congratulations, Constance:)

Constance La France
Date: 1/23/2023 9:32:00 AM

Jo, thank you so much for the visit, compliment and congratulations, Constance

Gary Radice

Date: 1/22/2023 9:41:00 AM

Hi Constance. When I first read this I wondered if the word 'hide' referred to a camouflaged shelter that birds can be observed from but realise now from your comments that this isn't the case. Your haiku poses the question as to where birds go in winter without directly asking it in the text. It makes the reader think. I'll add that your description had me comparing Canada's winter to a washing machine movement swirling and whirling with washing but that's just my imagination :) Cheers - Gary

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 1:26:00 PM

Gary, thank you so much for the visit and wonderful comment, that's why I love haiku, so much can be said in a few words, well in a snow storm in Canada itis like a washing machine swirling and whirling, yes the question is hanging where do the birds go.. blessings Constance

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 1/22/2023 6:39:00 AM

Wonderful Constance! Congratulations on your win! :)

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 1:27:00 PM

Linda thank you so much for the compliment and congratulations, Constance

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/22/2023 12:55:00 AM

love how you used sound in this poem.

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 6:36:00 AM

Andrea, thank you so much for the comment, appreciate, Constance

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/22/2023 12:54:00 AM

way to go, Dear Heart. I got nuttin' with my Milt poem which I'd been unable to enter in my own contest!!

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 6:35:00 AM

Andrea, thank you so much for the visit and compliment, sorry about your Milt poem, perhaps another contest will come up where you can use it, Constance

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/21/2023 7:57:00 PM

Big Congrats to win TOP

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 6:36:00 AM

Anisha, thank you so much for the visit and congratulations, Constance

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/21/2023 5:45:00 PM

Congratulations, Constance. A model hiku...beautifully composed with a question - Where do the birds go in the snow?

Constance La France
Date: 1/22/2023 6:39:00 AM

Reason, thank you so much for the visit, congratulations, compliment, and comment, I like to think they find refuge in trees and bushes, dens, hollows, it always amazes me how they survive in the bitter cold of my Canadian winters, but they do somehow because when the sun comes out there they are, chirping and singing, Constance

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/21/2023 1:13:00 PM

Very nice!

Constance La France
Date: 1/21/2023 4:08:00 PM

Kim, thank you so much for the visit and compliment, Constance