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Hemlock and Ivy

You and I, we are, two polar petals, laced with arctic blue moonshine of soft sweven-hymns and sunburst apricity of aqua-gold tides, reminiscing mauve hours, when our love waltzed in teal faithful lakes hued with ivory ink of coral kismet, shimmering in wine-auroras, but now we just trace poisoned pixie-dust, upon each other's frail fate, sinking in folklores of shaded red canopies, as I bleed stardust in ebonies of hellfire heavens and we fade like smoked-ash comets; for you and I, are we Hemlock and ivy, swathed in swan-shaped ballads, floating like hail on smudged graves?

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Date: 2/2/2024 8:14:00 AM
Dearest Hiya, soulful poetess, there is an abundance of lush and luscious imagery entwined in the emotional angst and refined beauty of your verse. "Poisoned pixie-dust" and "As I bleed stardust" and "we fade like smoked-ash comets" - reflect realizations of a hurtful love, or a demise of love with imaginative texture and creative metaphors. Your poetic artistry burns brighter than a comet, but your golden never loses its vast brilliance! An exquisite creation, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/15/2024 3:08:00 PM
It is difficult for opposites to work together unless we allow for each other's strengths and can spend time not in control of each outcome. What's so interesting here was the great start together and the description of the unraveling. It's amazing how you weave this all together in a unique style. All wonderful.
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Date: 8/24/2023 3:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 8/22/2023 4:31:00 PM
A fine Choka poem, Hiya. Easy to see why you did well in the contest. Congratulations! Your imagery is eloquent. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/24/2023 3:12:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kind and appreciative words, they warmed my heart! I'm beyond grateful for receiving such wonderful support! - Hiya :)
Date: 8/21/2023 2:43:00 PM
Polar opposites can they make it? Only if. They work together to overcome the differences each working to accept the other one for who they are. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 8/24/2023 3:36:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much for your heartwarming and glowing words dear, yes definitely, polar opposites need to fill in the lost puzzles of life's pattern and compliment each other's calibre and embrace each other as who they are. I'm grateful for your beautiful review, sending love and hugs- Hiya :)
Date: 8/21/2023 2:07:00 PM
Painting your canvas with beautiful vocabulary Hiya. Very enjoyable! Congratulations! :)
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/24/2023 3:30:00 AM
Thank you so much dear, beautiful soul! I'm deeply grateful for your kind visit and such heartwarming words- Hiya :) Love and hugs ~
Date: 8/21/2023 10:58:00 AM
Great work with imagery and sights, Congrats on winning.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/24/2023 3:15:00 AM
Thank you so much, I'm deeply grateful for your kind words and wonderful support! Means a lot... :)
Date: 8/21/2023 8:20:00 AM
WOW! You weave words into shining jewels. Splendid write, Hiya.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/24/2023 3:16:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much for your beautiful words, your poems are absolutely impeccable, always and I love reading them! Grateful for your support :)
Date: 8/21/2023 5:37:00 AM
Superb use of poetic language my friend. Another fine gem I've found from your golden pen. And another gem to. A fav.. God bless .
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/24/2023 3:14:00 AM
Awwn, you yourself scribble bejewelled poems which I deeply adore to read! Thank you so much for your wonderful and kind words.. I'm beyond grateful! :)
Date: 8/21/2023 3:28:00 AM
Wonderful writing. Congrats and God bless you, Love, Gina
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Date: 8/24/2023 3:13:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much dear, for reading and visiting.. This means a lot coming from such a brilliant soul like you! - Hiya :) love and hugs
Date: 8/20/2023 6:21:00 PM
Lovely imagery, Hiya! Congratulations on your placement in my contest!
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/21/2023 7:33:00 AM
Oh my, I'm truly beyond thrilled and euphoric, this was my first time taking participation in a contest on Poetrysoup and to be honoured amongst such brilliant poets.. It's so magical, thank you so much dear, I'm grateful~ :)
Date: 8/19/2023 9:33:00 AM
I can definitely see why you and inky are buds as you write in a similar style: heavy with metaphors, colors and textures. Fading like smoke ash comets... Nice line
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/21/2023 7:38:00 AM
Your support and kindness definitely mean a lot to me, Tom! I'm beyond grateful for your beautiful comments, thank you so much for always being so generous and inspiring~ yes, Ink is a magical soul herself :)
Date: 8/19/2023 9:16:00 AM
You more than did justice to the choka form with lucious imagery and a love only the angels can abide to. B0l Hiya Sharma!
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/21/2023 7:51:00 AM
Oh wow, such kind and beautiful words, thank you so much, I'm deeply grateful for your support, this means the world to me~ Hugs and love- Hiya :)
Date: 8/19/2023 8:50:00 AM
- "swathed In swan-shaped ballads" ... sounds wonderful ... you really know how the words should sound ... inspiring writing ... thank you I enjoy every word ... - hugs
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/21/2023 7:40:00 AM
Awwn, thank you for such magical words dear, I'm truly happy that you enjoyed reading this piece, means the world, sending love and hugs~ Hiya :)
Date: 8/19/2023 7:57:00 AM
Wow my angelic star, your metaphors are always in sync with my heart, and soul, i am loving the flow of this and the imagery and artistic choice of diction here that truly deserves more recognition, i love the lines “ poisoned pixie dust” for you and i are we he Lock and ivy “ “ swan shaped ballad” gosh! Im truly in awe of the way you’ve written such a soul stirring and stunning poem, definitely deserves to win
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/21/2023 7:34:00 AM
My dearest Ink, I'm forever grateful for your marvelously inspiring and supportive words.. You truly are a precious gem and I treasure your kindness, always~ your angelic star :)
Date: 8/19/2023 7:22:00 AM
The profound resonance evoked by your creation of an exquisite poem is stunning. The sheer elegance and brilliance emanating from your carefully crafted words are undeniably captivating, rendering it high-quality poetry. The incorporation of your remarkable metaphors and the impeccable choice of diction further enhance the poem's inherent beauty, solidifying its rightful place among the prestigious selection of POTD
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Date: 8/19/2023 11:39:00 PM
Thank you so much for your extremely kind and wonderful feedback, this in-depth analysis of my poem truly humbled my heart, especially receiving from such a brilliant writer. I'm beyond grateful to you for such honouring words and feeling so blessed to be amongst this gorgeous community!

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