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Heart's Lament

Shall I leap for the sky to then capture a star Or be stead on this earth and admire from afar Would I journey for miles to sense sunsets on shore Or be sated with every day views from my door Ah, my soul yearns for love that seems planets away Know my soul of what love it needs beyond today? For tomorrow it may be my heart breaks in two Lest I take half for me and then bleed half for you Then a love comes along and it echoes my song Though my heart yearns to sing the refrain seems all wrong It’s a question I’m certain eternally asked Yet in fearing a heartbreak those answers are masked So my heart asks why then do you question your fate And my mind interrupts and says cease this debate As I garner my heartstrings again reel them tight They resiliently come back bereft of a bite But tomorrow I’ll cast them again far and wide In the name of sweet Eros my will please abide I am certain a line cast just out of my sight And the twin to my flame destined souls reunite.

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 2/15/2018 3:51:00 PM

Absolutely stunning poetry, Judith! I LOVE the opening/closing lines ... and all prose in-between. Great romantic yearning imagery ... Shall I leap for the sky to then capture a star ... Or be stead on this earth and admire from afar. I am certain a line cast just out of my sight ... And the twin to my flame destined souls reunite. Simply beautiful poetry. An instant classic fave for sure. Love and more love always.

Mash Mulla

Date: 1/31/2018 4:37:00 AM

The poem is so deep.

Judith S
Date: 1/31/2018 3:52:00 PM

Thank you for your visit. Best, Judy

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/29/2018 11:20:00 AM

Rumi was a Persian poet, so I'm glad you chose a quote of his to fit this lovely poem of yours, Judith. The line that touched me was the one about the heart..."take half for me and bleed half for you". It takes some risk, but...in the end...it's worth it. Hugs

Judith S
Date: 2/1/2018 8:23:00 AM

I love Rumi! Thank you for you're amazing comments Eileen. So sweet of you to visit and leave such meaningful feedback :) ~Judy

Chris Hagy

Date: 1/27/2018 9:18:00 PM

Beautiful write Judith.. lovely flow to your rhyme... love the line "Then a love comes along and it echoes my song" :) have a beautiful day :)

Judith S
Date: 1/29/2018 9:37:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments and visit Chris!!! Greatly appreciated! ~Judy

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/27/2018 6:48:00 AM

Beautiful rhyme, Judith, loved your choice of words and the rhythm in this, what a beautiful way of writing a lament!!

Judith S
Date: 1/27/2018 5:56:00 PM

Thank you so much for you kind comments Jo :) I appreciate your visit! ~ Judy

Marc Acrich

Date: 1/22/2018 3:11:00 PM

So nice I try hard, but I can only do rhymes Marc see if this works https://plus.google.com/u/0/+marcacrich

Judith S
Date: 1/23/2018 9:24:00 AM

Thank you Marc. Rhymes are lovely and mostly what I do as well.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/22/2018 1:59:00 AM

We cannot teach our heart anything but we can help it remember. A profound and harmonious poem that springs from a loving heart! Excellent dear, Judith!

Judith S
Date: 1/22/2018 2:48:00 PM

Ah Demetrios! Your comments are always so lovely and poetic. Thank you so much for you visit. ~Judy

James Swartz

Date: 1/21/2018 6:21:00 PM

This is a masterpiece Judith! A truly remarkable piece of poetry you have given us here. I enjoy this so much.

Judith S
Date: 1/22/2018 2:47:00 PM

Thank you so much James! I appreciate your visit! ~Judy

Ricky Muse

Date: 1/20/2018 6:10:00 PM

Really like this Judith. Those opening lines are killer. Very universal.

Judith S
Date: 1/20/2018 7:48:00 PM

Thank you for visiting and commenting Richard !! I always appreciate your support! ~ Judy

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton

Date: 1/19/2018 4:40:00 PM

So emotive, I can feel your heart pumping in time with others, not only mine. Beautiful, beautiful poem. This one truly deserves POTD, if it never received it. So beautiful, "For tomorrow it may be my heart breaks in two, Lest I take half for me and then bleed half for you". x

Judith S
Date: 1/19/2018 6:07:00 PM

Oh Leanne!! Thank you for visit today. Your wonderful comments are so greatly appreciated!!! ~Judy

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2018 12:46:00 PM

This feels like a piece written by the old masters during the Romance period.

Judith S
Date: 1/18/2018 7:52:00 PM

My gosh Richard!! What a lovely comment!! Thank you! ~Judy

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/18/2018 2:31:00 AM

- Oh ... so beautiful, Judy - I love the whole poem, but the last verse is a special one - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Judith S
Date: 1/18/2018 9:05:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. I love that you have found yours :) ~Judy

Maria Williams

Date: 1/17/2018 6:57:00 AM

I also love the expression'you don't find the book, it finds you'. Judith your poetry as always is brilliant my friend. I especially love your last 4 lines, cast your line far and wide my friend....Maria

Judith S
Date: 1/17/2018 11:42:00 AM

Maria ... I've never heard that expression :) But it certainly is a good one to abide by. Thank you for your wonderful, supportive comments as always my friend ~Judy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2018 3:29:00 PM

Judith , this is REALLY nice writing. Such a unique expression of searching for one's soul mate. I love it!

Judith S
Date: 1/17/2018 11:41:00 AM

Thank you Andrea :) I appeciate your visits so much! Always so encouraging!!! ~Judy

Mike Gentile

Date: 1/16/2018 12:46:00 PM

that fact that you're searching also speaks, Judy. So, don't give up. You will attract what you want and hopefully, it is what you need. Great poem, xxoo

Judith S
Date: 1/16/2018 1:16:00 PM

Thanks for the vote of confidence in the universe Mike :) lol ... Always appreciate your visits !! ~Judy

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/15/2018 8:51:00 PM

A beautiful and thoughtful write Judy. You have conveyed much yearning and longing for love.. your thoughts, wishes and desires are so wonderfully depicted through your lovely use of language and superb imagery and rhyme. Your first line captured me for the entire poem. Be not afraid to cast your rod... Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Judith S
Date: 1/16/2018 10:24:00 AM

Thank you so much for your visit Susan!! Always appreciate your comments :) <3 ~ Judy

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/15/2018 5:11:00 PM

A yearning for love so eloquently depicted.. language of loving souls resonates in your words..destined, as you say, to unite... seeking each other..well done, Judy.

Judith S
Date: 1/15/2018 7:15:00 PM

Thank you so much dear Vijay for your kind comments :)

Silent One

Date: 1/15/2018 2:51:00 PM

Oooh a Rumi quote, isnt he just the best? Has a quote for everything.. Well what can I say about the poem, it rhymes and flows very well.. the subject, well all is fair in love and war Judy... love is not simple, nor are humans and their ego.. Humans do not think alike, unless you meet your twin flame, and then you will know what love really is... you keep casting your rod far and wide, you will catch him soon... loved your poem..

Judith S
Date: 1/15/2018 3:40:00 PM

Thank you Silent One for your kind comments!!! You are always so inspiring and encouraging. I do love Rumi. I always appreciate your visits my amazing poet friend! ~ Judy

Arturo Michael

Date: 1/15/2018 1:27:00 PM

Lovely poem... How can it be forbidden if it's love...personal responsibility for all actions must be considered so no one is wronged... All the best Judith

Judith S
Date: 1/15/2018 3:36:00 PM

Thank you dear Arturo!! True words :)