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Heartbreaking In Leaves

A tree birthed in girl's heart behind the window Wherever, however, old Aspens are made — And God was in green's time, Christ coming in gold. The solo leaf that before my look just swayed — She dropped in the dark, though would her lost life grow. While at Autumn's end, I remember her shade — Tree limbs reach for my womb, but never lift up From where my hands feel, leaves come in unborn touch

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Date: 7/18/2025 11:11:00 PM
wonderfully powered by your inner light,paige...love this!
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Date: 7/18/2025 5:18:00 PM
a wonderful metaphor and flowing poem. You wrote this form well....I've never tried it, but may I should. Enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara
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Date: 7/18/2025 3:29:00 PM
Gorgeous imagery in a spiritual poem
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Date: 7/18/2025 10:51:00 AM
Paige, this poem is deeply moving with a palpable angst and sorrow. You use the metaphor of the leaf so skillfully. Thank you for this poem. Blessings to you.
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Date: 7/18/2025 3:28:00 AM
It was a pleasure to read your poem today, Paige. You shared a moving Rispetto poem.
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Date: 7/18/2025 1:15:00 AM
Sorry, Paige, this is not my cup of tea. Rispetto Lyric is usually written in two stanzas with classic rhyme schemes. It is not your usual work ... are you branching out; testing new forms?
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Paige Hind
Date: 7/18/2025 5:35:00 PM
Uh okay, lol. Well, it's close to being a Rispetto...I'm just going to leave it, all those slants and stuff, I don't understand. Thanks so much for caring about my work.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 7/18/2025 7:24:00 AM
Rhyme: a (slant rhyme as the stress is on the first syllable) bcbabde. I love the content (tale). It has the basis for a very nice poem. :)
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Paige Hind
Date: 7/18/2025 7:04:00 AM
:) Okay.
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Suzette Richards
Date: 7/18/2025 7:02:00 AM
Maybe it is my ear, but I hear a different rhyme scheme. All is well. :)
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Paige Hind
Date: 7/18/2025 6:46:00 AM
Yeah, just to make it my own, I combined the stanzas but kept the right rhyme scheme, abababcc ...with eleven syllables in each line, using eight lines like it called for. :)
Date: 7/17/2025 10:20:00 PM
Blessed be the solo leaf, Paige & may the limbs become wings. Enjoyed rispetto this morning. X.
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Date: 7/17/2025 5:42:00 PM
Thank you for the touching Rispetto poem today, Paige. I enjoyed reading your poetry today, my friend. Bill
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