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Heartache

Feeling forlorn as darkness deepens Shadows stretch silently into nothingness Loneliness lurks like a living leprechaun Waiting and waiting for that glimmer of hope Waiting and waiting for that glimmer of hope Loneliness lurks like a living leprechaun Shadows stretch silently into nothingness Feeling forlorn as darkness deepens 08.12.2020 Contest: Mirror Mirror poetry Sponsor: John Lawless

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Carol Louise Moon

Date: 8/26/2020 7:34:00 AM

Wow, a poignant poem. I like lines 2 and 7, the shadows stretch to nothingness as hope is fading. Congrats on your win!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 8/23/2020 2:32:00 PM

A sadness expressed in 4 short lines that are felt in the dark of loneliness. Well epxressed Jo. congrats on the top win!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2020 12:29:00 PM

you portrayed loneliness so vividly, love the leprechaun line Jo! many congrats on your top spot;-) hugs jan xx

John Hamilton

Date: 8/21/2020 8:08:00 AM

Really well done Jo congrats on a top win!

Paul Callus

Date: 8/21/2020 3:43:00 AM

Congratulations on your striking poem placing first, Jo. Those who suffer alone suffer most! ~ Regards // paul

John Watt

Date: 8/20/2020 10:51:00 PM

Excellent depiction of loneliness, with some great alliteration and a palpable feel of despair. Wonderful first place win, Jo, well deserved. Congrats! ~ John

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/20/2020 9:51:00 PM

Such creative pictures - like the leperchaun! - that carry your feelings of being "forlorn with "loneliness," "shadows," and "nothingness." Congratulations on nyour #1 placement.

Jenna Logan

Date: 8/20/2020 2:50:00 PM

Congratulations on your poem being #1, Jo!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/20/2020 1:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Love your line, "Waiting and waiting for that glimmer of hope." Yes, where is it???? Your pen did a wonderful write. Enjoy your win and day...............

Sheela Js

Date: 8/13/2020 12:16:00 PM

Amazing