Heads Up

I saw a jet, jet ‘cross the sky silvered high, captivating my eye: Surely no meteor could show natural better, icing the sky leaving lick-able tails of frosty air glitter -- The jet made circles a lariat rhinestone cowboy or sparkly pinwheel in the hands of dancing child – surely some future astronaut, making novelty of atomic flash and fire – celestial lollipops two scoop cones of sprinkled faceted stars….

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/19/2025 2:04:00 AM

It's so darn hot these days, a celestial lollipop will lift me to heaven. Great metaphors.

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/19/2025 2:25:00 AM

Hi Victor; its that time of year here also. The wife and I often kid, living here in such a hot climate, that if we do not make it to heaven, at least the heat we will be use to. Thank you, my friend.

Valsa George

Date: 6/18/2025 4:48:00 AM

This is the height of your imagination, dear Joe. I like the expression 'celestial lollipops'! Indeed a visual delight!

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/18/2025 5:03:00 PM

Thank you, Valsa; you made my day. Have a great writing day!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/17/2025 12:43:00 PM

this is really cute and so imaginative, Joe.

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/18/2025 4:09:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea; have a great day!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/17/2025 12:07:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Heads Up" write. You have seen UFO'ssss??? That would make for a great write. Have a fun day writing away..........

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/18/2025 4:14:00 AM

Hi Paula; what I saw were military type jets chasing a bright dot over Phoenix in the sky. Very high up. Just before sunset. Beats me what it was all about? Strange. Nothing in the news papers next day.

Joe Maverick

Date: 6/17/2025 10:30:00 AM

A sky-light delight..Well done Joe Dimino.'

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/18/2025 4:15:00 AM

Thank you, Joe; have a wonderful day!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/17/2025 10:24:00 AM

I love where you went with this poem! Delightful, Joe!

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/18/2025 4:17:00 AM

Just having a little fun with imagery. So pleased it seems to have worked out. Thank you. Blessings.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/17/2025 5:18:00 AM

- "Phoenix 114 yesterday. Thursday 117" ???) - Sounds like you saw something rare and beautiful, Joe :) - hugs

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/17/2025 7:29:00 AM

Hi Anne; couple eggs in a skillet, hold them out the window for 3 minutes...and breakfast is ready. I really do love it. Use to love to hike the desert. Plenty of pools in Phoenix.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/17/2025 4:59:00 AM

your eyes seem to catch the beauty very well here, unique and refreshing, also very observant. :)

Joe Dimino
Date: 6/17/2025 7:35:00 AM

Hi Vie; coming home from work, just before dusk, a couple of jets were chasing a UFO -- quite a spectacle. Every time they would get close the bright dot with make a sharp turn, avoiding them. Finally, it just got tired of the game apparently, and left them with a flash of acceleration.