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We stood on a beach of white sand, on a beautiful tropical isle. I held my daughter's hand in mine. We shared a knowing smile. There were no words spoken. We knew what was left unsaid. Our voices surely would've broken, so we shared a hug instead. No father to walk with her today; no strong arm to keep her steady. I was the one who'd give her away. "Mom," she said, "I'm ready." Then we felt a gentle breeze, ruffling the hem of her chiffon dress. It rustled through palm leaves, soft and sweet as a lover's caress. An orchestral wedding march became music with each rushing wave. Romantic lighting from tiki torch, to her groom, my daughter, I gave. A golden sunset cast its light, as the happy couple whispered, " I do." It was quite a charming night, beside still waters of turquoise hues. A moments respite from the fray, I sat with my daughter alone. "Mom, I wish Dad had been here today." A tear of sorrow was sown. "So do I, my darling. I miss him, too. Right now he'd be so carefree, on the dance floor with you. He's not here so come, dance with me." She wore a smile, for a while, then I saw her walk out the door. My little girl, no longer a child, said, "Hi Daddy, this is Eleanor." Time to put away her denial, and whisper her last 'goodbyes.' Daddy walked her down the aisle, when he sang her lullabies. ~ Internal and Ending Rhyme Schemes ~ There are no rules for the number of lines or syllables per line. I especially like this double form of rhyming because of its challenge to rhyme in the middle and at the end of each line. Example for each verse: a b a b c d c d Lin Lane ~ Poetry Writing #1 Contest December 10th 2015 Sponsor ~ Broken Wings

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Date: 12/19/2015 5:21:00 AM
Lin congratulations on your winning form. Touching and heartfelt write.
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Date: 12/18/2015 9:34:00 PM
Masterful write Lin.. lovely form ..congrats on top win!
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:55:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 12/18/2015 9:27:00 PM
Lin, Congratulations on your sweet win Luv **SKAT**
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:55:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 12/18/2015 9:13:00 PM
Lin, CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN.... LINDA
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:54:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 12/18/2015 5:12:00 PM
Wonderful write, heartfelt, Lin,Congratulations on your win! Hugs dear friend Eve
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:54:00 AM
Thank you, Eve..
Date: 12/18/2015 4:03:00 PM
such a sad one but so beautifully written. Yes, I love this kind of rhyming too!!
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:53:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 12/18/2015 3:02:00 PM
Congrats Lin on your win!! *smiles* -luloo :)
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:52:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 12/18/2015 2:25:00 PM
Beautiful and poignant! Congrats--Janice
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Date: 12/18/2015 2:36:00 PM
I appreciate the congrats, Janice.
Date: 12/18/2015 2:03:00 PM
oh this brought a tear to my eye Lin - I do love writing with rhyme too but have learned so many new styles since i joined soup:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 12/18/2015 2:36:00 PM
Thanks, Jan. There are so many I've never heard of, but I'm willing to try them.
Date: 12/11/2015 9:24:00 AM
Your descriptive wording, rhyme scheme, and use of sullen imagery brought it all to life with clarity and grace. Emile.
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Date: 12/11/2015 9:31:00 AM
Another lovely detailed box of compliments. Thank you for all of them, Emile.
Date: 12/10/2015 5:13:00 PM
I have written this form and it is difficult, but fun and makes such a good poem. You did a great job. I enjoyed this very much, Lin ... CayCay
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Date: 12/10/2015 5:18:00 PM
Thank you, CayCay.. not easy but I love the challenge..Thanks for coming over to read.
Date: 12/10/2015 4:27:00 PM
So....here I am in Michigan, USA, and I can feel your tender love wherever you live in this world. Beauty and lovely Lin...You are blessed with such talent and grace...Be blessed... *smiles*
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Date: 12/10/2015 4:38:00 PM
I'm in New Orleans.. way down SOUTH! and thanks for the compliment.

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