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Harvest Moon

harvest moon
                  
                 flourescent light to pluck corn
                                         
                                                  best wait for son

                                                                     ~*~

For Charles's "Haiku/Senryu" Contest

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John Heck

Date: 1/20/2011 7:49:00 AM

An excellent and clever write. This haiku will surely be amongst the winners and deservedly so. Peace always, John

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 1/18/2011 9:43:00 PM

Very nice Haiku..good luck in the contest....JAM

Elaine George

Date: 1/18/2011 7:05:00 PM

Great Haiku, Audrey. Good luck in Charlee's contest. Lainie

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/18/2011 1:45:00 PM

Thanks a mill, Deb! You're such a d--- good teacher! Love, Annalise

James Fraser

Date: 1/18/2011 12:02:00 PM

What moments would await one as they witness the harvest moon. A new dawn arises whilst a new day's sunshine lures the corns yellows to show. Good luck in the contest Annalise....:)

Diane Locksley

Date: 1/18/2011 11:44:00 AM

Your haiku is very nice, Annalise and I think you met all Charles Henderson's requirements. Not easy to do, but you came through. Good luck. Best to you, Diane

John Rhinem

Date: 1/18/2011 9:30:00 AM

Smile ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love, 'Forevermore,'" John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day My Dear, Amid The Soothing Gentle Touch of, 'The Rising Morning Suns, Beautiful Love;' Bye, 'My Dear Precious, Annalise!'":) ~

John Rhinem

Date: 1/18/2011 9:23:00 AM

Smile ~ "Your Beauty" is so "Amazing" for, to be able to craft such a thought evoking poe amid so few words is "Astonishing," to say the absolute least and, again, one could only find themselves completely emerged amid this "Glowings Harvest Moon Moment" ~ I hope that life is treating "Your Treasures" wonderfully my dear & "Yes," I shall fave this lovely canvas ~ ....Cont:)

John Rhinem

Date: 1/18/2011 9:16:00 AM

Smile ~ Sounds almost as a dream sequence "My 'Dear, Precious & Priceless Annalise Brigham!!!'" ~ I also find it somehow metaphoric in Nature; or perhaps, symbolic towards the long thought anticipation of what, shall Never be for, "Yes," the Sun will Rise as the Moon so sets whereupon, the Corn will fail to behold the Hands of fate...."Sooo Brilliant; 'Wow'" ~ ....Cont:)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/18/2011 7:31:00 AM

Nice thought expressed so well with good images, Annalise

Michael Gelb

Date: 1/18/2011 6:27:00 AM

Nice poem. Thank you for commenting to my poem.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/18/2011 6:17:00 AM

Reads like a winner..Good luck in the contest..A bright full moon would be great assest tonight..Your presence at my work brought me a ray not stingray but a sun ray on this cloudy rainy Georgia morn..Sara

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/18/2011 5:32:00 AM

...hope this helps and you are OK mew talking here it takes me half the time to answer here BIG HUGS & thanks so much for honoring me, by asking! light & love

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/18/2011 5:31:00 AM

Okies little one line 1 is OKies it has the subject clearly! [just make sure Charles in not sticking to a straight 5/7/5] now line 2 [in my opinion] is too much like a regular sentence [in fact it IS a sentence] and not evocative enough, line 2 is where the action is use a strong visual or sensory action word here [though the best haiku use only nouns it's too hard for me1] too end line 2 you want three --- which are marks to indicate a PROvocative shift in the same image

Tahera Mannan

Date: 1/18/2011 4:56:00 AM

Super one Annalise. All the best.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/18/2011 2:39:00 AM

how refreshing to see natire through you soul, annalise.... shimmering 'ku/ senryu! best winning streak in the contest..:) huggs, nette

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 1/18/2011 12:47:00 AM

Oh now this is really beautifully written, it makes me long for those sultry evenings where we can make the most of the outdoors... Good uck for the ocntest, this should do well! Anna-Marie.